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    Everything is Nothing

    I might kill you all and not even know it
    Strangling the anger out of life
    and leaving myself a blood-drenched poet
    Resurrect death’s bliss and harmony
    And propane the embers inside
    With the passion of the sun - I stole it
    I stole the breathing lungs, capacitated
    By your scarred ribcage and chest
    And ripped your angelic wings into dust
    Razor blades engraved an emblem for me
    To remember the misery
    You endured...when this dull blade met your rust
    I’m two steps ahead of the death penalty
    All my energy preserved when
    Your throat will engulf steel when I thrust
    Even the heavens crumble to oblivion
    Once I speak blasphemy for you
    There is no God that I bow to in need or peace
    I fold Biblical scriptures into origami
    And exhale cancerous oxygen
    That speech is the sickle for the hate I reap
    I breed spawned demons from carcass debris
    That sweep diabolic over your home
    For this poem is the crop of dates I will seed
    I have to cope with hope when tomorrow is promised
    Because everything is nothing
    If my two broken fists and motives are godless

    I might kill you all and not even know it.

    Lynch the future with a slipknot of your hair
    Left as a symbol for dead youth
    Corner the white rabbit into the clasp of my snare
    Smear the internals of the Lord’s grave lamb
    Goddamn his sacred love for all
    Reverred internals of this poem broaden my care
    To be inclined for these mandibles of Satan’s grasp
    And ringe each carrier pidgeon
    Into worm infested, germ infected message for the Gods
    Stretching the wretching of every emotion
    Crop cannabis in the garden of eden
    Smoke away the daybreak in grey sirius of no cause
    Castrate Malcomb’s black, silk cat for the future
    Vicosectomize the victimised
    And leave those nine lives lost and nutured
    Harvesting the restraints of discrete Christians
    Exchange the remains of false idols
    For the title of imperial gemini and faded pewter
    Brittle the liberty that is fatigue in memory
    America is Babylon’s child
    Harps of yesterday are replaced by war machines
    And the threshold of humanity held tight
    Restricted from access of the truth
    In a gold, heart locket with pictures of malign
    We have to cope with hope when tomorrow is promised
    Because everything is nothing
    If yesterday’s peace and our nation is godless

    It might kill you all and not even know it.
    Last edited by spokenoh; January 30th, 2005 at 01:51 PM
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    I might kill you all and not even know it
    Strangling the anger out of life
    and leaving myself a blood-drenched poet
    ^ hahaha dope...

    ionno why these fucks are sleeping, this makes me very angry...
    there is som much expression and imagery and anger in this peice its unbeleivable, i dont think i can compliment enough on how well written i thought this was. All technicalitys set aside i like this peice cause this is how i feel sometime lol. I really like some of the metaphors in this peice. Some lines were just very expressive and captivating, i really like your style of writting. A well constructed peice in my mind.

    Neway your flow was smooth and you imagery was picture perfect, you also used alot of technicality and vocab was great...

    for the most part... this was a dope drop...

    keep em comin,
    Peace...

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    This was very nice Pinny....
    my fav line "Lynch the future with a slipknot of your hair"
    that was real strong I thought...the 2 parts were both good, but I
    thought the second part...yuo jus snapped and went off on some
    crazy internals and multis and your emotion was amazing.....First
    part was good, but the second part was much stronger I thought
    ...word choice was very nice, and mostly it read smooth cause of
    you syllable count.....dope drop Pin...keep it up..your on a roll
    lately man
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    great job here sweetie... i like the way that this flowed out so smoothly... the poem just captivates my mind as i read each line. The emotion that was put into this actually interested me becasue it seemed like even though it was't hidden... it had more meaning that only the eye can capture.... these kinda poems aren't around all that much anymore... I kinda wish that they were because they're a lot more interesting to read.... great job hunny...



    ...........fav part...........

    I might kill you all and not even know it
    Strangling the anger out of life
    and leaving myself a blood-drenched poet
    Resurrect death’s bliss and harmony
    And propane the embers inside
    With the passion of the sun - I stole it


    keep droppin'



    ....bless

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    Thanks a lot. Too bad Siberian didn't drop some of his godly feed on this.
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    I would describe this as like, raw anger, with just a touch of Avant Garde. Quite abstract. There were certain technical flaws that I could identify, but nothing too serious. There were also some very strong lines, for instance the part about "I fold Biblical scriptures into origami/ And exhale cancerous oxygen." I found that to be very, very graphic, and it's meaning, could be construed in a number of different ways. So yeah, nice job. It's good to see you so passionate in your writing. - Jek

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    Spoken this piece was fantastic.... You had alot of good metaphors and it was real nice.... I think what stood out the most in this was the wording and how you put lines together nice job....

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    I am naked. Nominate this. You know it is worth it.
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    This was a wonderful peice. Your imagery was like a picture in my head and your vocabulary was great. I liked the way you showed your anger and the peice makes you angry to read. it was really good, Give you full on ups!!!

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    This classifies the gayness on RB. Read my fucking poem.
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    *shakes head*

    You love your attention don't you Spoken.

    You know this was great, why do you need other people to tell you it?
    murder murder

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    spoken this was illy as phuck son....<----------lol

    anyways this was a very emotional piece definately felt,the imagery was unbelivably dope it had no limits which is good and helps benifit the emotion of the piece, the voabulary was okay also,overall i loved the take to the topic,and the concept was not played at all ....so props man and keep dropping solid pieces
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    That was a sick opener...lol...wow i loved that

    Great job here pinny, you grabbed my attention...get at me for a collabo...if yah up

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