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Thread: First Time

  1. #1
    The Big Waffle
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    First Time

    like it says ^



    I sit here and just fear what goes on in my mind,
    It seems the more that I move I just fall behind,
    My parents keep me on my toes so very much,
    that I seem less like a blessing and more like a crutch,
    the best is expected, with lack of affection,
    it's like there can only be one right direction,
    as I try, and I strive, and I go for the glory,
    I'm much more of a myth than some headline story,
    and school systems don't help with their selfish BS,
    A letter grade shouldn't tell you my intelligence,
    regardless of who I may be deep down inside,
    and when you asked I just smiled when I should have cried,
    i feel like breaking down, like there's no where to turn,
    but with so much weight on my back, and so much to learn,
    and those who count on me, and those who care,
    and those that always expect for me to be there,
    the girls, and the guys, and the adults who I cherish,
    it would permanently hurt to see that I had to perish,
    so I sit and I write, and I sit and I type,
    till I'm staying up thinking in the middle of the night,
    and I yearn, and I burn, and I wish that I could,
    I live better than most, but still misunderstood,
    It's not about the house size, or the cash I've collected,
    I wish I could just be the one who was not neglected,
    Deep thoughts, deep feelings, things you probably forget,
    but I tell it anyway because I can't let it sit,
    if it stews, then it boils, and eventually bubbles,
    and I don't want to have to be the one to clean up the troubles...

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    Wow! that was a lil deep. But I don't get it.It was your first time doing what?

  3. #3
    The Big Waffle
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    First open mic. Not something creepy. Sorry for not clarifying that. And I didn't want it to be real deep, because I don't know you guys, and I don't feel like you would need to know, or care to know, anything about me personally.

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    oh okay, well keep up the good work.

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    nice drop dude....you got potential so keep droppin!
    VERBAL INTERCOURSE

  6. #6
    The Big Waffle
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    Thanks.


    In case you guys were wondering, I wrote this while listening to the "Way I Am" instrumental by Eminem. The last part might not go along with the beat though, but the first part definitley does. I would suggest you read it over the beat for the full effect.

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    good drop waffle, u got something goin here, keep practicin good job

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    yo bro this peice hit me hard kid. it was easy to relate tobesides the fact that i aint as well off but it was real good keep it up.

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    yo bro this peice hit me hard kid. it was easy to relate tobesides the fact that i aint as well off but it was real good keep it up.

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    yo bro this peice hit me hard kid. it was easy to relate to besides the fact that i aint as well off but it was real good keep it up.

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    sorry bout that my comp. was fucken up

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    That was good. I thought this would be a wack piece but ya vocab came in and thetopic was good. You stayed on topic and you had good structure. you did well for a first open mic. Better than what ive seen from other people. Keep workin at it.

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    View this from last year^

  13. #13
    MC.EDICIT
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    "and school systems don't help with their selfish BS,
    A letter grade shouldn't tell you my intelligence,
    regardless of who I may be deep down inside,
    and when you asked I just smiled when I should have cried"

    Man I so.. appretiate this.
    This is what true, meaningful rhymin is about.
    I relate man. especially to this qoute bro. we should collab on a topic.

  14. #14
    The Big Waffle
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    All right, thanks you guys for the feedback, I was just freewriting how I felt. I'll be checking out some Open Mics by the ones who left comments, (if they have an open mic).



  15. #15
    Yeah man, this was nice.

    At first i weren't sure to take you seriously, i expected the 'first time u saw a waffle or sumthing' lol, but this was good

    At time it seemed a little pushed, and didnt flow very well, but all in all it was a good piece

    Keep dropping Master Waffle,

    Hit this up
    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...8&page=2&pp=15
    Thanks

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