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    Streetwalker

    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=166614
    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=166382

    I saw this man the other day and he was eatin out the garbage/
    and i thought to myself that's nasty, but then i stopped and thought "what if"/
    what if that was me, what if i didnt have this roof over my head/
    i been so close before, what if i was the one almost half dead/
    and the only way i can survive is eatin out the trash in the street/
    what if our roles were reversed, what if it was him that was lookin at me/
    what would he think about me? would he judge me and dismiss me?/
    thats been our attitude about other less fortunate throughout history/
    or would he show compassion, reach out and lend me a hand/
    would he think the worst about my life or would he just understand/
    it tripped me out to think about, but still i just kept walkin/
    whats that say about me as a person, now i felt akward/
    and i wanted to turn around cuz i kept thinkin still that maybe/
    he's not a bad person, he's just down on his luck a lil worse than me/
    i reached into my pocket, grabbed some change that i could spare/
    i tried to give it to him, but he just walked away like i wasnt there/
    and then it hit me, he was just like me, a man too proud to beg/
    so i just sat it on the ground, walked away and then he said/
    in a soft cold voice that echoed in my head for days/
    "Thank You", and by the time i turned around he had walked away/
    Never saw him again, and i don't know what became of him/
    if he's still alive or if he died or even the name of him/
    but he symbolizes the struggle we as a race are faced with/
    not black or white, just people, and while most of our lives are wasted/
    deep inside of every one of us is still a soul/
    a man just like the one i saw, hungry but movin toward a goal/

    based on actual events, but not completely true

    look for this to be audio soon
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    i felt the emotion. very good story telling. keep i up.

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    this peice had a good story and topic.........very interesting and it made me think......i like the emotion but i didnt think this flowed very well.......maybe it was your choice of words but i didnt think it was as good as it couldve been......great story but i didnt like the rhyme scheme..............stay up though man keep droppin ill be lookin for more of your shit.......

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    thanx for the comments, imma hit ur shit up STAT... i flowed it kinda like snoop in "freestyle conversation" ... it was more like a unstructured poem really, i just started rattlin it off on the drive home from work
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    up once, and thats it....
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    nice story
    I also really liked the emotion
    I didnt like the flow though
    maybe a few multies would of helped it
    but keep droppin though
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    I liked this. The lines were long throughout, but it emphasized the story. The topic and detail overshadowed the rhymes, which were alright. Keep postin stuff like this, it had good emotion.

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    yes!!!!!

    nice!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! KEEP DROPPIN' NIGGA!!!!
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