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    raiders of the lost art: I Missed It

    I would play it smooth, avoid the truth, confronted in my youth
    that I was cursed since my birth and Karma fills my shoes.
    I can't deny it, so despite it, I ante up and try to buy it
    crystal Balls, tarot cards, seeking guidance from a Psychic!
    But if God's my only witness, then he's the one to judge me
    put angels on both shoulders - help to motivate and nudge me.
    And if I hadn'ta drown, id never found ..
    .. higher ground - the wine was my medicine
    but after i'd emptied it and penned all my penances,
    the sentences i'd etched, didn't express my sentiments.
    The perception of perfection is that it's simply our reflection
    so I stay away from mirrors, 'cause I fear my own rejection
    And luck protects them ^ At a time I felt I was balancing upon
    .. a golden plateau. My ego and flow enhancing along
    with my afflicting woes, now I'm reaping what I sew
    - for doing tasks I remember, for people I didn't know.
    He shook his head, from side to side, giving second glances
    sent some to the abyss, blessed others with second chances.
    Since it's my second time around, I should be making do
    but it's a strife living life, when I see everything as Dejavu.


    The evening night line echoes the derelict ticks of my chronometer
    obviously born to weaken, in a dream is where I'll prolly meet her.
    I'd rather it were all wreckless & perilous like terroristic hints
    the sole occurence of my wavered exuberance pinned upon the freezer.
    Unfortunetely now tinged with wrong demenor occuring invariably
    scared to speak, but as it transpires, words are impaired in speech.
    The last to be picked syndrome, in poems the writers voice.. divine
    chime melancholy carillons, for the sand to stop subsiding in time.
    Life is a lie, actuality astutely masked beneath candid graphics
    as if man's rationale was to keep Big Brother the handy Blacksmith!
    Missed the bus, the train, subway, missed Fate with the time of day
    so I can kill it with cigerettes.. 45 away in my faint lung estate.
    Here for a long stretch with Saddam Hussein running the lap of luxury
    functioning wonderfully under this Sod's Law, sacked for one mistake.
    Although I made the first wrong move like opening for a Scholar's Mate
    isolated.. dark clubs on the card, odds on a solitaire to fornicate?
    Form a shape- a shadow, autonomously anonymous..consciously dormant
    and be that Jon Doe door mat persona until you honestly forfeit!

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    Raiders of the Lost Art; Methane n' N-Demik

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    the pound is stronger than the dollar, HOLLA !

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    this was dope, good strutcure and vocab, i thought the first verse was better than the second cause i could understand the first verse more, both verses were tight though.
    return the favour reply 2 my last post.
    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=161927

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    this was da shit good rhymes vocab and structure. some long ass shit

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    yo if u have xanga hit me up and pm me ...........

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    serious !
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    the pound is stronger than the dollar, HOLLA !

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    First off, wlecome back to both of you...

    Actually I was very imoressed with this drop, from diction to meter, this was solid as can be. Complexty was surgically sewn within and the message was a damn good one. On many levels this exceeds the norm on RB, and was a most refreshing read (Thank You!). Congradulations to both of you on a dope ass peice. I loved the style and the complex word grouping, vey good. Syllables and ryhme scheme were on par, nothing off in the read for me at all. Well done drop in all acpects of writing, voice was pressent and soothing. Well worth a legends Nod here, great stuff and please keep droping on RB. Deep yet not overly abstract or complex, didn't seemed forced as many peice's in OM tend to be.

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    of course it was dope, demik is in Divine Diction

    ill drop a reply in a few minutes
    Bittersweet

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    much appreciated feedback bounce. thankya !
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    the pound is stronger than the dollar, HOLLA !

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    Word...thankies for the reply Bounce

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    Sublime D posted 20 hours ago, telling you he'd drop a reply in a minute, and he's not done so yet.

    Really nice piece guys, I really felt the second verse more for some reason, both came nice though. Syntactically, good, And I felt the rhyme scheme was just complex enough to work. Content wise, it was dense and slightly abstract, but not to the point that it broke down as a piece of poetry. Definately well above the average in OM. Nicely written, I'm impressed.

    give this a read gentlemen, its getting crazy slept on:

    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=161885

    thanks.
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    LoL, am I still a member of raiders of the lost art? :P:P
    wordperfect?
    ..o0Pure0o..

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    you're the honorary member, duude ! annnd i've still got that weather verse ..
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    the pound is stronger than the dollar, HOLLA !

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    ^oh, dopenuss...i think i might have mine somewhere? LoL, even if i don't, i can just re-write it. *sigs raiders*

    yay ! =)
    wordperfect?
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