Eddy Ft. Born To Kill - Facing what?

[Edicius]

Born To Kill . .

I hear the simple things in life can be the most precious...
But when even they’re denied the color green can dress us.
Up in jealousy; when I coveted what was thy neighbor’s...
Cuz they always seemed to have a stocked refrigerator.
Such a simple substance, food is all that’s needed...
But most every night of my life, hunger wasn’t defeated.
Raised where dollars weren’t, so it seemed hopeless...
When a 6 year old boy was handed an eviction notice.
And had to run and play, outside most everyday...
Cuz why come inside, there’s no electricity anyway.
So safe doesn’t get felt, more so anger and envy...
Cuz father foamed at the mouth in a gambling frenzy.
Ends meet? No! But he had BET YOU as a fuckin fashion plate...
He affords that but doesn’t feed his brats...
...............................S’why I’d like to smash his fuckin face!
But never did, just never looked back, left an evil old man alone...
And make sure I never go back to that by taking care of my own.

chorus

My life my` choice's ` my death ..
Can you face life like that?
No creed, race, no white & no black
Engaged & ready for combat
Can you face death like that?
Coming up thru the ranks
No whattup, cheers or thanks
Can you face life like that?
Engaged & ready for combat

Eddy . .
facing struggles as an every day thing..
hit the notes of a ''life'' felt the flow but cant sing!
running into walls!! tho the sun shine's & a little rain falls, ..
and the season is there, im aware .. but i keep on failing to crop!`
my head is a carrousel of memories the spinning never stops
its like when i fell into the scene of a scoolboy crush,
start carrying her books, and doing lots of drugs ..
almost forgot who i was ..
my visions` my future; blurry` rushing my life in a hurry
rushing everyting hastily in an undignified way so damn scurry
facing all my believes w/ tendency yet readily
blowing up in my face, still able to walk steadily
.
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unbelievable
its so damn unrealistic the answer's ive searched for
are so simplistic yet satisfying! inside i`m dieying
knowing its all gone
ending of my song, nothing is left .. its simple,
the crime: life .. the sentence: death . .

[Edicius]

replyed to` effect and to fgee

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[Foreshadow]

Damn this was real nice I liked the chorus alot it was catchy and well put together. Both verses were fire and I liked the piece alot.

[KAPPO]

daamn, really nice piece. i give ya both props to that. they both had nice rhythm. really on point, chorus was catchy too. i give yall a 9 out of all. deep, and emotional, lotta image in this piece.

[Johnny 6-feet]

definately different to the usual stuff i see on the forum, i liked the story being told in both verses and the hook was pretty damn cool.


my head is a carrousel of memories the spinning never stops


^ loved that line, creative as fuck.

some solid work fella's. keep on posting.

p.s. reckon you could rep one of my pieces back?

[jimbean]

yeah good drop ta both parties... killed it this the type a shit i like to read some times i feel its chour to reply but then good reads like this come along and replenish...

[Edicius]

thanks yall` up.

[Edicius]

^ what he said

[SMZ]

Born - the imagery was good and the emotion also - some of the wordings were awkward - I liked this line:
"Cuz why come inside, there’s no electricity anyway."
the story you gave was quite memorable - pretty good stuff

Eddy - your's didn't hit the emotions quite as hard as Born's but your word choice was nice - flow was cool up until your closing lines - I think you would just end up saying that part - I don't really see how you could 'rap' it...

chorus was iffy in my opinion - might work - might just sound weird

pretty cool stuff overall - keep at it - peace

hit me and Nique's "In the Twilight Zone" if you would

[Edicius]

seriously ever heard about inners? ` lol thanks for the feed yo

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[SMZ]

^of course - and I also know that not many people can carry a flow with only internal rhyme - a few can - most just sound odd - haven't heard you but I'm thinking odds are it would sound awkward - if not - props to you

[Jay Mel]

I got caught up into this piece

this shit tight as hell

[Edicius]

it doesnt sound odd trust me, .. ^up

[nolonger]

Wack.




















syke...dope

[Ceaseless]

well dope work on this..props to both ya'll

BtK - dope verse, story is told in a great way... I had the images front of my inner eye...and man that don't happen very often..so word to ur verse

Eddy - good verse too, though I didn't feel it as much as BtK's, I think it lacked a lil flow, keep on

the chorus is aight but the thing bout this is that I couldn't imagine it on any beat, but well thaz none of my business I think...
good piece

I'd really like to hear both ya'll rappin it on a beat of mine...
peep the open-mic in my sig if u like...
peace