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    Abstract

    Jetstream of spindle twisted love, a sea of burning smiles,
    That fester, bubbling undercoat beneath cover of emerald eyes,
    A wonderfall of passion, with embarrassment looking in,
    Staring through candied fretwork, chewing on plastered skin.
    In ecstacy of nothing, equlibrium between the senses,
    And sight can smell what taste can hear, and all break their defences,
    In unison with nobody, a gaze drifts beyond vibrant scapes,
    Beautiful, glistening splendor from which fantasies take shape,
    Blacks and whites and dazzling reds a palette free from grease,
    A bristled edge that glides and swerves, a meaningful release,
    Distorted dreams of virtues laced between shaded bright increase,
    Opposites collide and blend forming a pattern to the piece,
    And sharp edges contour over, never stabbing, drawing blood,
    Never fading far from vision, never despoiled when ink did flood,
    Accidents aplenty, and all were covered up by smudge,
    Perfection ruined by the limitation, that nobody understood.
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    well this was a piece which definately lived up to its title. this wouldn't sound out of place on a wu track. great vocabulary and some crazy imagery but i have to ask: did YOU know what you were talking about? coz i certainly didnt. i got the idea of the piece i think, and it was definately original. a few multi here and there wouldn't hurt, but you're a notch above a lot of the cats on here with or without them.

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    i could see this as an intro acapella to a good drop but as far as hearing it in my head over a beat its pretty hard.... i mean it was well thought out absract to the tee... sounds more like a poetry verse though...

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    yeah, it is really more of a poetry verse, and to be honest Johnny 6 feet...i didn't have much idea about its content, it was weaved between art and secrets i guess, but reading back through i i guess i can uncover a hidden meaning thats personal to me. Interprate it how you like, i'd like to hear what people think.
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    well titled fanta, it was somewhat abstract, and definatley poetic, but i liked it, it made for an interesting read

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    thanks devsta! whats with the name change anyway? and i aint just noticed i just thought i'd ask you now?
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    not bad, good vocab and ya should make it longer and maybe a better subject. ya can improve and its not bad. you can do better but im not hatin on it. you have potential.

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