T-West - "Nigger"

[t-west]

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...41&postcount=6
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...96&postcount=6

Titled: Nigger
Author: T-West


First and foremost...my title does not represent in any way, shape, or form...that I am a racist. I am a black man myself. I felt that this was the best title possible to represent my piece of work. If you don't like...then I am sorry. I reallly do apoligize to anyone who is offended by this title in any way whatsoever.



"thump....thump..." against the cold, rugged concrete...
went the black shoes on the officers feet...
"Different day...same place"...I hated it here...
Everyday I prayed to God hopin' freedom was near...
My cellmate was sleepin'...another cat from poverty...
He was here on charges for armed assault n' robbery
Shake my head as I gazed..."he deserves a better place...
too bad the big picture's often blocked by race..."
place my hands on the bars of my dusty cell...
"Will I ever leave here?"...only time will tell
My son...where I am...I see him pictured...
I ended up the same with no fatherly figure...
what happened to him? well it's really quite easy...
He got a lil' power...and he got too greedy
then the wrong buttons...he started to pound
and you know what goes around...often comes around
"You'll be jus' like ur father"...my mother always said...
"Either doin' time in prison or u'll end up dead"
it stuck in my head...she had such lil' faith...
why do people have kids just to call them waste?!?!
Now I could feel rage buildin'..."Fuck you bitch!"...
Heard the sound of rusty bars with the strikin' of my fist!
on the cell...but really...I had to calm down...
slowly went to my knees...and sat on the ground
a tear down my face...thought "My life was jus' lovely!...
My own fuckin' mother didn't even wanna love me!"
then suddenly...the metals doors swung wide open...
With a tall, strong figure in the doorway showin...
I stood up n' looked...it was that time again...
"Okay...everybody up...Shower time gentlemen!"
Gathered my stuff...grabbed my rag n' soap...
but stopped when I discovered a note...
Underneath my pillow, I wondered what it said...
Slowly opened it up and the followin' I read...

"Dear Nigger...
This is a thanks from the Ku Klux Klan...
For you doin' us a favour, n' killin a black man
Be proud for all the future charges your facin'
Since your destroyin' the downfall of our fuckin' nation!
If niggers kill niggers...that makes no fuss!...
frankly, you only are just helpin' us!
So keep killin' niggers! we really don't mind...
every dead niggers' a step forward for mankind!"

This message was received by a young black youth
Who stayed trapped like an animal, caged in a booth
and it really is sad...that this note hit his hands...
Which shows the de-evolution of man...



"2 heads are better than 1, 10 are better than 5
So if we all work together, we do the most when we're alive"
Quote T-West - "Drawin' A Picture Of Myself"...


Pz. God Bless.
-T-West.

[Emerge]

LMFAO at quoting yourself.

but in serious this was pretty cool nice little story
i am offended by the tittle though... stop calling me
that... jk

the mom bars were the best described to me..
i felt those

keep it up
p[z

[Nephil]

This was better than I expected - imagery was quite good - scheme could of maybe used a little more compelxity - but that probably would've interfered with the imagery - you told the story well - no getting sidetracked - made your point as well - keep writing - peace

oh yeah and the quoting of yourself was classic

[Chris Black]

Lmao. Word at quoting yourself in third person. Buwahaha.

Anyway, dope shit.

""You'll be jus' like ur father"...my mother always said...
"Either doin' time in prison or u'll end up dead"
it stuck in my head...she had such lil' faith...
why do people have kids just to call them waste?!?!
Now I could feel rage buildin'..."Fuck you bitch!"...
Heard the sound of rusty bars with the strikin' of my fist!"

I can really feel this, seeing as how my mother used to compare me to my pice of shit father. This was ill.

""Dear Nigger...
This is a thanks from the Ku Klux Klan...
For you doin' us a favour, n' killin a black man
Be proud for all the future charges your facin'
Since your destroyin' the downfall of our fuckin' nation!
If niggers kill niggers...that makes no fuss!...
frankly, you only are just helpin' us!
So keep killin' niggers! we really don't mind...
every dead niggers' a step forward for mankind!""

This part was ill, as well. This was a good read, homie. I might nominate this for om of the month. This was dope.

-W1

[Se7eN]

Good piece, seemed like an eminem piece, the way ya did it knowing it would offend some but inspire and but kewl to others, good shit T-West, like the imagery, rhyme scheme, everything...............plus it's controversial.....................9/10 good shit I'm gonna vote it on hall of fame 4 this month, juss for it being a special piece, that caught my eye by title and imagery...............pz

[THE DALABIL]

Aight homie...first of all...dont even explain yourself in the beginning...just do your thang...that kinda messed it up for me...but I do understand the reasoning for it.
I thought this was prob 8 1/2 - 9. Especially on being worth the read you dig? This is an eye opener. The intro was like Will Smith explaining "In this movie you're going to hear me cuss, but please understand that's not me...they're paying me BIG BUCKS to do this." Let it flow for its intended purpose, who ever takes it wrong takes it wrong. Good piece. One

[t-west]

Good looks on the feedback ya'll...uppin.

[antidote]

iwas juss splukin through the archives and read that , d it was nice, hot to death.

[Scarcasm]

fa-real T, fuck tha world be unapologetic in your boldness. if you got something to say say it and most likely those who get offended do so because they see weakness in themselves. but besides that this was probably the best poem I've ever read in my short RB career. I like basically everything about it but the whole shower, soap, gentlemen section seemed a bit unecessary. but regardless, hot

[streetbeats]

i usually never read shit from this section....... but the name caught my attention

on some real shit..... if i wasn't white..... id get on def poetry jam and read this shit

[Poetic Justice]

This was a real hott piece... most definately feelin' the whole concept and boldness of the words. It was refreshing to read something new, personal and controversial, but at the same time really well written. Props to you and this piece in particular... it's something special man...

[t-west]

uppin'...I don't get it...ppl like my OM's here...but don't like my SS pieces. Wierd...
anyways, uppin.

[Brother Blue Collar]

that was dope, good imagery i felt it all the way thru, nice story and vocab got the point straight across this should be nominate

hit that up when you get a chance
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=139712

[LM]

This was really good...

Great imagery and flow throughout the whole piece. Controversial title which is good coz it'll attract more readers. It was structured well and wasnt too simple but not too complex...just got the right balance.

"Dear Nigger...
This is a thanks from the Ku Klux Klan...
For you doin' us a favour, n' killin a black man
Be proud for all the future charges your facin'
Since your destroyin' the downfall of our fuckin' nation!
If niggers kill niggers...that makes no fuss!...
frankly, you only are just helpin' us!
So keep killin' niggers! we really don't mind...
every dead niggers' a step forward for mankind!"

That's my favourite part^^

[t-west]

^So...when are you gonna release an OM called "Nigger" now?