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    ||RythmicTendicies|| 'PercepTion''s Avatar
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    If I Was

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    If-If-If I was a...
    If-If-If I was a...

    Rapper

    I’m explosive like trinitrotoluene blowing up the streets…
    Sweating blood, I combust with disgust & burn the beats…
    The pressure eats away at my mind gnawing at my reality...
    I write all day & portray weakness, bubbled up in my fantasy...
    A genocide tragedy when I intensify your mind & grab the mic....
    Speak wisdom, Gods kingdom falls when my intelligence ignites...


    Philosopher

    I’d theorise on events & how to live a divine existence...
    Take 2 entities, 2 identities & provide needed subsistence...
    Speak insistence on my prophesies, they will become true...
    Theorise the annihilation of species, send your soul into-...
    A time warp, you’ll go through a dream of spiritual death...
    I’ll revive hypotheses, a series of gales to give you breath...


    If-If-If I was a...
    If-If-If I was a...

    Poet

    I’d write words with astuteness without rhyming or a flow...
    Meaningful metaphors heavens doors open & send you below...
    & although I’m spiritually cleansed I’ll blacken your spirit...
    The truth unfurls, hear these words & subsequently fear it...
    Revere it as I write to topics no-one else would dare touch...
    A poet laureate my fate is sealed & my perception is fucked...


    Cannibal

    I’d murder innocence & consequently feed of its remains...
    Slice & dice their bodies & play havoc with their brains...
    Torture them with chains & bury them in the back yard...
    Burn them & only return when their intensely charred...
    I’ll be forever scarred but for death I’d have a fixation...
    Consuming human flesh & murdering God’s own creation...


    If-If-If I was a...
    If-If-If I was a...
    Open Mic's


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    I've always liked your work...an enjoyed reading it...its nice to see your still at that higher level...good job on this piece...I thought your topic was excellent...an everything else was nice as well...

    Content: A
    Imagery: A
    Vocab: B+
    Flow: B+

    ^heh...that's the highest I've given anyone on this site so far...^If you do get the chance peep my latest..appreciate it...-Respect-
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    first shit blew me man, easily ya best peice to me, love the way you switched up the point of views that poet's part also was straight fire, philsopher's part was cool but not on par with those 2, cannibal part also blew me away as well man this shit should be nominated to me, internals were refreshing, and the vocab got the point dope shit man
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    Great work here man.. something new and original w/ the different takes on ish.. right from the get-go you had me reading man.. the rapper verse was great.. and the first line was ill.. that`s the way all pieces need to be.. w/ the first line catching you and pulling you in.. Flow was on-point, even w/ the verse breaks.. imagery was real nice.. could picture you going into each role.. this shit was just all around great.. and has my vote for OM of the month. Keep it up duke, Pz.


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    hittin' pieces up now....uppin'.
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    nice one. Like the Vocab, was pretty much on point. Wasnt really feeling some of the multies/internals, but it was a heavy concept. Good job!!! maybe we can collab some time

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    Different roles of different characters. I liked this piece, th0 not as much as some of your others. I felt the poet and philosopher had the best content and the rest was barely above average. Nice flow, imagery, and vocab nonetheless. Please hit up, "They Told Me". Thanks and Peace.
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    This was cool shit. The flow was pretty good throughout the piece. It's a unique concept, so you get plus points for that. Lol@the canibal. That verse seemed to stick out alot more than the rest. Anyway, this was a decent piece. Keep doin' you.

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