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    The Cycle [Euthanasia]

    The Cycle: You Kill Me, I Kill You


    Intense sunshine, a shower of heat…melting my sweat glands
    Til’ they Open…
    Drenching with sweat, my body is a miserable wet land
    I’m hoping…
    That the downtown area is full…that’s a first…
    Because I usually hate people…
    But today I’d love to gather up humans to burst
    And so I Curse…fuck this day…I’ve battered my life.
    My country shatters…
    And leaves what always mattered behind.

    Our flag forgot about us.

    And I thought…what mattered was me, and all people looking for purpose.
    Peasants now drowning,
    helplessly sinking away from the surface.
    I’m sweaty, prepare for attack…my backpack heavy, alone on the steps
    Of a federal shack, the downtown area acts…
    clueless of the following events
    My final prayers show…that my life’s been filled with bleeding and flaws.
    And a cool wind blows…
    Confirming that I’m finally speaking with God.

    Backpack ignition is lit…I catch my final glimpse at our star
    My memory... eternally lost. Blasting me and my companions apart.


    *My country is justified, WE were wronged by terrorers*
    *Their freedom rights mixed with their songs and hysteria*
    *I must religiously cleanse this country for the cause*
    *Plus bigotry and mens money hinder my course to god*
    *My course or not, Fate will not intervene with gods plans*
    *We were forced and fought, my hate gleams for loss of man*
    Dan enters the bus with his mind racing every which way
    *Focus,centers a must,* his hate is encasing this day
    Dan sweating profusely feels his heart rate quicken
    Peace embedding,rooting, he starts to state his vision
    Fist clenched his knuckles turn white from pressure
    +This Bitch ends!+he chuckles at the site of the lesser
    The occupants are horrified, as fear turns them frantic
    They start to wince,some pour their eyes, it's sheer panic.
    +Do not detest my actions for in this I become whole+
    +For I rest with satisfaction, god will take up my soul+
    People are shaking,A blood curdling scream is conjured
    +U scream of murderous things? BITCH this is honor!+
    His Fiery eyes provokin death,He opens vest...........
    motionless.......
    Pulls the outlet and leaves the meds with a total mess
    The bus did a 360, left burning in ashes on the street
    yearning for the masses,21st century and still no peace?


    Back and forth, back and forth. It's gotta stop!

    My soul died with Isabel, yet I live this hell-
    Of, only more, vicious tails of missing males,
    Gone kamikaze, so my tattered vision’s stale
    They took here life.. Now my mission’s frail
    Why kill innocent? She was just riding a bus
    I would like to think that her dying’s enough
    But who am I trying to bluff?.. Me.. Just me!
    But you can trust me, that slaughter is ugly
    So "Lets make the peace that we, much, need
    No more revenge! Stop the decent to hades
    Fuck the pretense cause these vents are crazy
    And maybe Allah will forgive when we did sin

    I said @ the town square that her killer lived in
    Peace lookers gathered around to listen, see?
    Peacemaker, huh? Not how I’d envisioned me
    I speak of peace, even though
    .. I know there is much blood still to fall
    And After I gathered a crowd...
    .. I pulled the rip chord and killed us all

    *and the cycle continues*

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    1st Verse: Junio
    2nd Verse: Danny Ocean
    3rd Verse: Wicked
    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...66#post1537566
    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...52#post1537552
    Last edited by Chris Black; July 11th, 2004 at 10:41 PM
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    up. cumon people take a look.

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    Interesting collaboration. Three totally different styles. I think you all brushed upon the topic you were trying to get across pretty well. Junio's verse contained a lot of imagery & diction, Danny Ocean's contained a lot of emotion & Wicked contained a lot of truth in his. Made the collaboration real Unique & an enjoyable raed.

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    nice collabo it was koo took me a minute to get into it but I liked it!!!!!!!!

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    descent work man,, i was feelin it pretty good..your imagery was good and your structure and flow was great

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    very good, who did which part? Didnt care for the first verse all that much...second verse got better and the ending of the third was amazing. 1st had good emotion kinda odd rhyme scheme, second was more of the story...good emotion...flow seemed kinda chopy, good read. third had decent emotion. good flow...and a nice scheme, just nice story and good ending caught me by suprise
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    Damn this was a nice collab. Im feeling all of your different views of the topic. You all had a decent amout of imaginary which was real nice cause I could picture alot of the things you were describing. Flow was good. But the details in this were real nice. Good job to all of you nice wrok...

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    yeah, good job... nice contrast of writing... junio thought your structure was kind of off in places, like not very consistant, but it made for a good read... junio, nice flow, & decent story.. not keen on the + & * tho... wicked, i prefered your structure and line length... again a different take on the topic...
    ....the only thing id say is, i would have had all verses linked, like the same idea, ... but yeah, decent collab
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    ^They were linked.

    The second attack was revenge for the first. The second attack happened on a buss, and in the third verse the guy explains his wife was blown up on a buss(the buss from the second verse). This depicts the Isreal vs Palistine situation. Good looking on the feed.

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    1st verse...I actually like this. Real nice introduction to the piece...I dunno why other dudes ain't feelin' it...I thought it was real good.

    2nd verse...I can see where your goin' and what you are tryin' to say...but I think that your writin' style needs work...I can see that it does hit the topic you want...but I feel that the connection to make it a dope verse isn't der...perhaps it's the wordin...not sure...but sumthi' isn't right.

    3rd verse...I like how you choose to end the piece of the cycle. Anger conquers all human emotions...that's atleast the message that I got from it.

    Great Piece...actually...Now that I think about it...the title does really represent the piece in a very good way. I like this.

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    Thanks t-west for the compliments on my piece, good lookin hitting this up.

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    Dope collab. Junio started it off very nicely. Good flow. Alot of emotion. And the imagery was off the chain. Very nicely done. Danny ocean also had alot of emotion. This is the first verse I have seen from you I think not sure. And I see why you are in Euthanasia. And Wicked. As always a nice drop good flow and structure. Looked like alot of effort went into this. Nice job. Will like to see alot more drops from you three.
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