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Thread: R.Corey & W1cked: Life After Lust

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    R.Corey
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    R.Corey & W1cked: Life After Lust

    R.Corey
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    Inmate: Dexter Talib Johnson
    Sentenced: April 1984
    Crime: First Degree Rape & Attempted Murder
    Released: August 1996
    Early Release: Due to rehab' program


    I feared freedom when I thought my reason could be taught
    Why I took innocence from others when my own could not be bought
    To the highest bidder come forth, I regret my evil actions
    Raping a mother and daughter did not give me the satisfaction
    That I craved for days in klaxon, when would death finally sound?
    Looming for hours on the ground hoping they’d never be found
    On a sin permitted to be bound, from the pits and downs of quarries
    Lying beneath the branches of Hollis, there was Alice & her Molly
    How remorseful is a “sorry”? It’s energetic but pathetic to know
    Inside the mind of an apology is a dangerous lust waiting to grow
    & Shit I don’t know, if I’ve finally got over my fetish for pain
    One thing I learnt from confinement is that I’ll never be the same
    See I gained a fragile grain, which was to grasp life in rations
    Regain the society passion on how to live with what happens
    In the daily grind I’m mappin’, where I should go from here
    As I leave the place I love, a gulp appears & a tear draws near
    Still hanging on for dear.. life.. Eclipse the strife of the past
    Banged up in Philly, committed in Delaware, how will it last?
    As I walk up my path, I sense the very haunting which I loathe
    My mind and door slam in darkness as my door has just closed

    "What?, who's there? wh wh where are you?"

    “Don’t forget.. Blow a kiss.. Blow a kiss”

    .. In a dark room, back to the wall, besides a door
    I Wont be denied the score; see, I redesigned the core-
    Of my heart to be cold blooded, but I’m still new to this
    It’s easier since noone will care if they loose the prick...
    I rationalize, when the handle starts to move and shit
    He walks in and doesn’t see me.. Then I blew the kiss,
    & kicked the door shut.. then he ran to the light switch
    But I cut him off & as he met my blade, he cried; “Bitch”
    With a hi pitched screech that made me jump back..
    And with a 9 inch in his stomach, his emotion runs flat
    He hits the ground, so I cut the lights on to unpack
    Only to run back to his limp body, smothered in red...
    “Dexter Talib Johnson, finally we meet again”, I said...
    “Remember!?.. Well, guess what; Your buddie’s back!”
    He didn’t give a reply, but I straddled his bloody lap
    “Remember blowing kisses as you raped me, fucker!?”
    “Remember me saying stop & you’d reply: make me, love!?r”
    “Well!.. Well!.. I’m Back, and here to abuse you, prick!”
    And in a crying fit, my next knife removed his dick...
    I don’t remember stripping him, or the torture, right?
    But the funny thing is, I know it happened that night...
    All I remember of the torture is me growing colder & colder
    As I Insanely screamed “make me, lover!.. Over and over
    ...I got off of his bloody, disfigured body & moved to split
    But before I left his dick-less body... I blew a kiss

    “12 years in prison wasn’t enough for rape, anyway...”
    I said to the jury, “I’ll do life for killing scum like him, any day”

    -28 year old, Alice Day, from the witness stand,
    at her first degree murder trail in January of ‘97.
    Last edited by R.Corey; June 26th, 2004 at 11:37 PM

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    Last edited by Chris Black; June 26th, 2004 at 11:42 PM
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    wow, this was pretty good man, i think that your rhythem in this was really good bro, i was reallly feelin your structure, which allowed me to be able to read it smoothly, i think that you were right on track here in lettin the readers know exaclty your point overall good piece

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    ^Didn't read it. Lol.

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    R.Corey
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    didn't comment on any part. & he refered to us as bro'.
    Its fucking plural dumbass. Feedbk^^

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    corey.. i thought your opening bar was very good, really set the verse up nice.. made me wanna read on... same with the second bar... i liked how you brought into it, him trying to live life normal again after his evil deed... but not knowing if he will offend again... i think thats what you were saying... is it?...
    wicked...lol... your verse was unexpected... quite sick.... it followed from coreys good tho.... in coreys hes set free, in yours you get your revenge thru quite a graphic verse...lol.... i liked the little quote at the end... ended it on sort of a sombre mood... i thought you could really see the hurt he had been thru in your verse, to committ such an act....
    ...i have to say i really enjoyed this collab... both had nice contrasting verses... well put together, and linked well.... again good job....
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    Thanks.. & Dev yea. A guy who regretted what he'd done & was
    trying to put himself bk into society. Then ma boy W1cked was
    the victim he raped not giving a shit to whether he was rehab'
    but to gain revenge finally for what he did to her and her daughter.

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    R.C you always had that flawless flow as long as I've known you,
    This piece was no exception,although I think you are capable of writing something much better LoL,I really like the concept in this piece another thing I like about your writing always something interesting
    Wicked did a very good job to compliment R.C's intro with his verse
    Few pieces I've read from you has been quite impressive,
    In this piece you maged to finish the tale with a very strong ending

    I feared freedom when I thought my reason could be taught
    Why I took innocence from others when my own could not be bought
    Opening line was very very strong with both showing the struggle and pain...

    *Congrads on winning the RSTL tourney this year..
    You lucky I wasn't there LoL *
    Last edited by Paperback; June 27th, 2004 at 12:50 PM

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    damn that was some good stuff
    point of view from a suspect and his train of thought put into a flow this good with so much detail, I've never seen that before and thats what made it such nice work

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    Thanks for all the replies.

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    Bk up there & what he said^^^

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    this was rather nice

    the first verse was very monotonous at the beginning although i caught the rhyme scheme early the descriptions seemed a bit vague and blah...but then it started to get some heat in there... the final line was very analitical to me i thought it was such a contrast and very ironic very nice

    the second verse WOW that shit was just fire man... the emotion, the impeccable writers voice... this shit was sooooo just descriptive so dramatic, infact i would be able to see this in some sort of spoken words play act...very aggressive and relentless

    good shit

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    i was really feeling this open mic collab....it flowed so consistent...everything went well together...the imagery was very nice also...the first bar of w1cked's verse was full of imagery...how you worded it put you right there in the room with him....very good choice of words throughout the whole thing....structure was very good...only choppy in a couple lines...besides that this was a dope piece...the multies made this stand out and so did the wordplay which gave it more impact...overall this was a very good open mic and definately worth the read

    ~!1!~

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    Damn this was hot. Nice collab RC & W1CK. Both came amazing & I loved the concept everything went well together. Nice work.

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    just letting you know ima edit with feed later....too much noise in my
    house to thoroughly read this piece....for i have no concentration skills..woot.
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    around a call but when I pick up I don't know what to say"


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