Code Of Geneva [SMZ & W1CKED]

[Chris Black]

The Code Of Geneva...

No duress techniques, as I’ll inject this sheep
By making metal pins and his flesh just meet
Under his fingernails while his chest just beats
Viciously, & he lets screams escape his lungs
Right as the last small pin penetrates his thumb
Then tied to the chair, I begin to heat the pins
I smell flesh cooking, but he can meet the ends
Of this torture if he decides to speak the sins
And secrets of the nation that sent him in...
I feel him about to break; such a sweet sensation
So I uncover his mouth and begin interrogation
“Tell me, Where is the N. S. A. Intelligence base!"
The filthy coward replied with spit to my face...
So I grab the revolver on the table. Spin it & shoot
By his shaking, I can tell he’s beginning to spook
I’ve electric shocked him, & drilled his kneecaps
But he needs more physical pain...I can see that.
*put revolver back on table*
“I’ma go get more torture devices... I’ll be back”

*walks out of room*

Pain - Agony - My soul whimpers from the hurt
Strange lights blur my sight - he's done his work
I know I can end this by speaking just one word
I’d let my secrets be heard if he’d allow me to die
Just finish what he's started and shroud my eyes
I'm too exhausted to continue voicing aloud lies
Hands - twice normal size - nerves overloading
However in my mind familiar words are floating
Animating my mind - they curse with foreboding
Slowly loading - they say I’m not a quitting man
"allegiance... flag... Republic for which it stands"
There’s a nation to safeguard - Forget my hands
Unshaven - I call down the strength of a Nazirite
Gather myself and then wrench with all my might
The bands tear easily as if the hemp was starlight
I can’t fight - thus escape’s not even a possibility
So I clutch the revolver and fire a shot at eternity
It’s truly sad that this heroism...
.............................will be forever lost in memory

Replied to sludge & outwrite

[Chris Black]

Wicked first, then SMZ.

[Freeman]

Lol.

This wasnt too bad.

I liked the things in the asterisks and quotations the best. (in the middle of the two verses.) They really aided the story.

The imagery was good here, as was the flow and structure.

Not exactly up to breaking down at the moment.

Nice drop, guys.

Peace.

[Steven William]

ok this was very good...

Wicked-nice verse good protrayl
of the man tortuing...Nazi I think
approach form both wus good Imagery
was just crazy and dope...goodvocab
and multis and internals was nice...

SMZ-Dope Imagery also good vocab saw
the multis and internals also form you
your gettin better now way better than before
keep it up man you portrayed the role of the
victim very nicely keep at it...

[Chris Black]

Thanks for the feedback. Uppin'.

-W1

[Wakiyan]

Damn that is ill shit I can't believe it's getting slept on.

The imagery is like whoa. I was drawn in immediately. The two different aspects compliment each other real well and it flows nicely. There's nothing I could suggest you do differently. Nice collab. 9/10

[SMZ]

thnx - drop links if there's anything you want peeped

[Lingwistik]

wow this was a good piece, great concept and story, really good storytelling, a really good collab. gflow was tite, vocabulary was good, creativity was great,

thats all there was to say really, everything was good

keep it up definately

peace

[ILLunatic]

Pretty nice piece, different kind of writting style than usually seen
Concept was pretty good.. w1cked's verse was sorta harsh to the sheep
but eh.. it was very enjoyable, and interesting to read

SMZ had a different concept of writting as well..
..his eternals were pretty good as well.. i liked his use of wording
some could have been worded better, but eh.. it was good

Good drop.. keep it up

[Andrew..]

Wicked had a good verse and so did SMZ. SMZ had good imagery in his peice. Flow was good for both. Wicked had some very nice vocabulary, so did SMZ. You both had some good stuff to go with the quotations in your verse. Nice Peice.