What's Mine is Yours

[Judge Judy]

Whats Mine is Yours

Left on the motorway, situation is bleak.
My girl looks bad & I can't find a pulse.
No other cars on the road except ours
ingulfed in a bollard. Why me? Why now?

Indication in the air that this day would induce despair
My vital signs stay intact but attack the people that care
Individual mistakes layed bare, pouring guilt of a confession
Hand in hand procession to try & protect my prized posession
Her beauty and grace I mention yet she is worth so much more
Modesty of a saviour which slowly seeps from her every pore
Left to lose her life on a floor, & not to live out her destiny
To shine in a vigure that would be so bright for all to see
Wishing you lay next to me, How I yurn for that tranquility
As your leace of life slips and so does my mental stability
It was all down to me, I crashed the car to create new fate
But we still layed in the lords hands & all he did was hate
& reject a remorseful debate, let my world die in my arms
With no thought or quarms yet a principal decision to harm
Saw through the transparancy of her charm, why let her die?
Take the sparkle from her eye, her sheer quality that mystified?
Leaving me bewildered tonight, not a clue to your actions
What a fatal subtraction .. me minus my precious wont happen
It can't, it wont, it'd kill me, so I'll go with good intention at heart
B/coz I can't picture a day w/ me and my wife apart
We go together like horse & cart, seperation would be fatal
Plus the fact we had only just realised that she was natal
This world is so fucked up, I don't wanna be here to witness pain
So take another life again!! Kill me the I did my wife the same
A god that is lame: COWARD :, I guess I'll have to inflict myself
Take my abrupt health w/ one swoop in full view & no stealth
W/out the lords help I gently walk w/ wife in my embrace
No emotion in her face as we walk to cliffs that get nearer aface
As we got close I left no trace of all the anger I felt at first
It was an emotional thirst, I can feel the gravel pierce & burst-
My feet.. but I deter defeat, and my paces quicken near the edge
A firm pledge to jump of the ledge.. and jump*.. here we go babe
No more mortality, painful days as we distract the Lords ways
Ripped up our contract as slaves, we no longer abide by rules
As the current of the sea gets closer, the further goes ridicule
Just to be w/ you..I get chills from head to toe circling above
An ordeal of emotions better know as a mono-syllable: "love"
Only two feet left and yet I can't stop waiting for it to Cure
Even through the bitterness of death.. Whats mine is yours

R.I.P.
Lucy Taylor 1984-2004
Dean Taylor 1983-2004
Precious Taylor 2004-2004
(unborn)
Love from parents,
Siblings
Family & Friends
Will always live on.








http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...072#post1266072

[Judge Judy]

Stop being sleepy plz.

[Judge Judy]

Uppin this.

[Judge Judy]

uppin this shit.. This forum is dead

[pot1ent]

This should have been replied to time and time over, this site is a bastard for people only reading their friends stuff, i mean i for one dont' have time to interact with loads of people on the net and make freinds with them and know they will reply to my stuff, people should read what is good first of all and this was, now i've nagged, here we go..

The flow was tight throughout man, some v/ apporpriate inners, i didn't pick up on any multis, but the flow held its self with out them, the content was good, not too consistent with techniques, but the horse and cart similie was real dope, the emotion in this piece really shone through, i mean to me, when i rap'd this, i was able to put alot of emotion into it thanks to the wording of this piece, whether this was real and personal or not, it was v. good open mic.

[Chris Black]

Illest shit I've read in a minute. The feeling in this was head and shoulders above the norm around here. The emagery was nice. How the guy felt it was somehow his fault cause he was driving. That was so real. And the part about here being pregnat was a surprise, followed by more emotion. This was just a completely ill piece.

"& reject a remorseful debate, let my world die in my arms"-really emotional and ill
"It can't, it wont, it'd kill me, so I'll go with good intention at heart"-nice shit
"A god that is lame: COWARD :, I guess I'll have to inflict myself"-strong, and I'm sure everyone had felt this way before(god being a coward)
"An ordeal of emotions better know as a mono-syllable: "love"-Yep, ill shit

The closer was ill, aswell. I'm nominating this for piece of the month. Nice job.

Please return the favor:
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=124344

[HyperBole]

Ay man that piece was very deep and emotional. I'm always
impressed when someone can express their feelings.

Just to be w/ you..I get chills from head to toe circling above
An ordeal of emotions better know as a mono-syllable: "love"

I was feeling those words right there.The flow, wordplay, and structure
was off the hook.
Keep up the good shit man

-OnE

[Judge Judy]

uppin

[Trahedy Siphon]

Chamoan...thid was ill..
I was actually swimming in the deep oceans
of thoughts u laid out sonny Jim..

Just to be w/ you..I get chills from head to toe circling above
An ordeal of emotions better know as a mono-syllable: "love"

^^^Made me wanna cry..truthfully..
In a bit Bruv