NeW ChiK PeEp ThA SkiLLz

[bRi SkEe 42o]

when it comes to crews u wont find nobody hotter/aint no way you can compete, so dont even bother/bitch talks shit? i already got her/her girls wont even recognize her the next time they holla/hoes get sick of us/cuz they cant get rid of us/its so conspicuous/tricks wanna b like us/but hoes they gon' fuck/and chickenheads they gonna suck/too bad bitch ya outta luck/cuz i just robbed ya kicks and now ya stuck/they say bri skee she comes out wit the hott shit/who dont kno bout me, u seein me pop shit/im walkin down the street im seein u drop ya shit/now u lookin for police just so i wont knock ya shit/ppl think that a chik cant hold her own?/i aint one of them bitches who talks shit on the phone/ill have a chik cryin on her knees even if shes full grown/and im sayin trick please just crawl your bleedin ass home...

old shit but well see wats good!

[Mistral]

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Work on your structure...dont put it like that, try line on top of line, it usually works better.

[bRi SkEe 42o]

iightcho good lookin out even tho im still confused bit its strizz

[Born To Kill]

when it comes to crews u wont find nobody hotter/
aint no way you can compete, so dont even bother/
bitch talks shit? i already got her/
her girls wont even recognize her the next time they holla/
hoes get sick of us/cuz they cant get rid of us/
its so conspicuous/tricks wanna b like us/
but hoes they gon' fuck/and chickenheads they gonna suck/
too bad bitch ya outta luck/
cuz i just robbed ya kicks and now ya stuck/
they say bri skee she comes out wit the hott shit/
who dont kno bout me, u seein me pop shit/
im walkin down the street im seein u drop ya shit/
now u lookin for police just so i wont knock ya shit/
ppl think that a chik cant hold her own?/
i aint one of them bitches who talks shit on the phone/
ill have a chik cryin on her knees even if shes full grown/
and im sayin trick please just crawl your bleedin ass home...

Aside from having a fucked up structure, no wordplay, no metas, and no style.

I guess this was ok.

For a newbie.

Peace

[Chrit.]

Not good...
Work on everything, and I mean every aspect of writing

Umm stick with it I guess?

[Mistral]

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