Goodbye SS...

[Born To Kill]

I rattle when I battle, cuz I'm simply toying with kids...
Who don't understand life yet, barely outta their bib.
So I live my life daily, knowing more than they do...
But not cuz I'm smarter, it's what I've been through...
I no longer relate to, what they live and breathe now...
Emotions and situations, I couldn't dig with a plow.
S'why I'm moving on and leaving SS altogether...
Because the topics lately, rain on me like bad weather.
"Growing Pains" and "Peer Pressure", what's next to expect...
A verse with the title, "I Haven't Lost My Virginity Yet"?
I'll save my breath, cuz I've been there, done that to death...
And it was so long ago, that I put that shit to rest.
I've moved on, grown up, now my topics currently read...
"My Shoulders Hold The World", and "I Must Water My Seed".
Because that's real life to me, I don't vibe with you, see?
And I don't feel my work warrants judgement by teens.
But funny how it goes, when irony's at your nose...
All in my face, cuz I still want props for my flows.
Where would I go, if I didn't come here to post...
Would I just write on looseleaf only seen by ghosts?
How could I boast, without feedback from friends...
Who's respect let's you know, it's not just on lend.
I guess it's best to say it's a cruel game of give and take...
I give wisdom in return for age jokes and disgrace.
But that's ok, I know outside of SS is Open Mic...
A place where elevation is allowed to take flight.
A place where the barbs are few and far between...
Becomes the only place my skill will be seen.


I've left feedback on...
Baby Blue Eyes, by Freeman
Offers, by T-West
Alter Ego, by Feeble Minded
Ode to RB's Greatest, by Grisly Virtue
Stage Fright, by Ace of Aces
I Remember, by LM

[The Beat Mod]

Your my new favourite Open Mic'er =)

Damn man, this is another crazy piece by you.

And it's so true. This piece really hit me...I was kinda thinking the same thing.

""Growing Pains" and "Peer Pressure", what's next to expect...
A verse with the title, "I Haven't Lost My Virginity Yet"?"

^Lovin this piece to the fullest. Very good drop.

As always, got what was expected of B2K...impeccable flow with great use of multies throughout the entire verse. You gotta start doin sum audio man...this is the shit that rap needs right now. Revitilization.

Vocab. was real good too. I would of used different words in some places...but hey, that's just my style. Shouldn't take note on that.

Sad that your leavin SS man...After readin 2 of your drops today...I see you can really use these words.

Great piece. Get some more open mics up so I can go peep them.

[Whitelightning]

Yo dizzle..

BTK is pissed...

My love for you dawg...Good Shit. Loved It Once Again.

[Born To Kill]

Not enough peeps have seen this...

So, uppin.

Peace

[FormulaMC]

Great piece. Flow was, wow. So fucking fluid, shit just rolled off my tongue, loving that. Structure was perfect. Nice blend of multi's to even increase the illness of the flow. Content was nice, glad to see your switching from SS to Open Mic, your dopeness is needed my friend. I was really feeling this piece.

I've moved on, grown up, now my topics currently read...
"My Shoulders Hold The World", and "I Must Water My Seed".
Because that's real life to me, I don't vibe with you, see?
And I don't feel my work warrants judgement by teens.
But funny how it goes, when irony's at your nose...
All in my face, cuz I still want props for my flows.
Where would I go, if I didn't come here to post...
Would I just write on looseleaf only seen by ghosts?
^ ^ Felt this string of lines right here the most, flow was incredible. All truth in this piece, West is right. . Audio is calling your name. Pz man, i'll be sure to check more from you.

- Check this piece, "I Cry", feedback appreciated. http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=121013 -

[Freeman]

iight..

Here we are again, my man..

Once again you get slept on.. This sucks.. OM is RB's pillow..

Anyway..

Flow.. As usual was on point through-out..

Smooth transitions added to the flow of the piece..

Your leaving SS.. Damn.. That sucks..

Liked the lines..

"Growing Pains" and "Peer Pressure", what's next to expect...
A verse with the title, "I Haven't Lost My Virginity Yet"?

Was very funny to me.. Lmao..

This deserves more people to read and drop comments on it.. Who knows.. This up might get some more feedback for you..

Hit OM in my sig.. "For The First Time.." It is my SS verse for this week.. So hit it in OM or in SS.. Either or both, my man.. Lol..

Thanks..

Pz..

[Born To Kill]

Thanks, my man...

Much appreciated!

[Its Illytizzle!™]

The realest OM iv yet read..

but at the same time the least relateable to..

a very specific topic.. u went indepth an really exposed your feelins well.. alot of personal shit was worded well an came across with alot of feelin.. easy to read cos of its simplicity.. an this was wot made it enjoyable..

good job dude..

your fast climbing the ranks as a respected OM'er.

[Fresh]

I rattle when I battle, cuz I'm simply toying with kids...
Who don't understand life yet, barely outta their bib.
So I live my life daily, knowing more than they do...
But not cuz I'm smarter, it's what I've been through...
Great metaphorical use and wordplay.. toying with kids, and the bib... Second bar is nice, simple, but the way you said it was like, whoa whats this guy been thru..
I no longer relate to, what they live and breathe now...
Emotions and situations, I couldn't dig with a plow.
S'why I'm moving on and leaving SS altogether...
Because the topics lately, rain on me like bad weather.
Nice metaphors... Those emotions must be really deep, not being able to dig em witta plow... Nice imagery in the second bar.. Puts an image in my head of you gettin stressed out wit all these topics coming at you...
"Growing Pains" and "Peer Pressure", what's next to expect...
A verse with the title, "I Haven't Lost My Virginity Yet"?
I'll save my breath, cuz I've been there, done that to death...
And it was so long ago, that I put that shit to rest.
I liked the first bar, made me laugh.. Making fun of the stupid people in SS... Nice second bar, Its saying to me that your getting sick of the same old shit on different days.. Nice imagery..
I've moved on, grown up, now my topics currently read...
"My Shoulders Hold The World", and "I Must Water My Seed".
Because that's real life to me, I don't vibe with you, see?
And I don't feel my work warrants judgement by teens.
So all this shit your doing at SS is puttin a big wieght on your shoulders, you gotta lotta senseless problems too deal with... Great imagery and metaphorical use, this was a really nice bar...
But funny how it goes, when irony's at your nose...
All in my face, cuz I still want props for my flows.
Where would I go, if I didn't come here to post...
Would I just write on looseleaf only seen by ghosts?
So its ironic how people be in ya face cause you want props, when they want the same thing when really they ain't that good... I think thats what your saying.. Metaphors kinda hard to catch... Second bar was nice with the ghosts...
How could I boast, without feedback from friends...
Who's respect let's you know, it's not just on lend.
I guess it's best to say it's a cruel game of give and take...
I give wisdom in return for age jokes and disgrace.
So you boast bout ya shit, but you have the right because you get honest feedback from friends, and they dont jjust give it too you so you can give it back... I liked the second bar! I saw somewhere something about you being in your 30's.. I think thats cool as hell, my dads in his 30's and he gives me shit for having rap music too loud.. But neways, you give wisdom back because you know what its all about... You dont care how old you are.. Probably do this at work or something.. Its like subliminally, your making fun of all of them without saying shit.. I find these lines very funny, but at the same time wise, and if people understood this line it could almost be life changing... Thats getting right into depth with it, and not many people could do it like me or you... This is quoteable shit, very sick..
But that's ok, I know outside of SS is Open Mic...
A place where elevation is allowed to take flight.
A place where the barbs are few and far between...
Becomes the only place my skill will be seen.
Very real.. Going from SS to open mic now.. second line was pretty much filler, but its true.. Ended it nicely.. This I guess is the only place your skill can be seen.. Dopenes..

Wow.. Thats what I have to say about this piece.. Came straight from the heart... Emotional and deep... Kids could learn shit from pieces like this, if they actually went in depth with it.. The concept of this piece is original, and true so it makes it that much sicker.. Only things I'd say to improve upon is your flow on a couple lines, and maybe add some multies.. But in a piece like this it doesnt even matter.. Dope shit man, keep it up..

Can you peep a piece in my sig? itd be very much appreciated.. Thanks.

Peace.

[Freeman]

Knew it would work, Born..

Replies galore.. Lol..

Here is a nice, unnecessary up for you.. ..

Pz..

[ELEETE]

Wow Born...That was raw...Your like RB's Wiseman...Your talent is truly great...As one of my favorite writers on RB you show me what real knowledge is...All these young 15, 16, year old kids droppin shit about subjects they know nothing about or havent even experienced is kinda funny an ironic to me...I mean im only 20...Ive barely begun to live...Theres so much shit i know nothing about...But your real dawg...Your passion for the music is there...Youve been there...youve done that...(soundin like dre an shit there lol) But your piece was amazing man...My hats down to you...Great job...

If you get the time check out my SS VS Kwizikz...Thanks...
Kwizikz VS ELEETE

[LM]

Wow.......brilliant.

This blew my mind. The flow was great and the vocab worked so well with the piece. Not too much not to little.

Definatly one of the best I've seen in ages. Props.

[Born To Kill]

Thank you, Freeman...

Sorry I didn't get back to this earlier...

Left work to finalize some moving issues.

So, I'm only now seeing the new responses that came in...

Thanks much, everyone, for liking my verse.

I'll start peeping ya'll's work as well and dropping feedback in return.

Thanks again, dukes.

Peace

[FormulaMC]

*steps into thread*

Just wanted to compliment you again on a dope piece. . can't wait to see your next one. .

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show....php?p=1285422

The Right Path. . since you're a better writer than me, i'd rather have you leave feedback on what I think is what of my best pieces, sorry if this pisses you off. .

*leaves thread and waits for the next BTK drop.*

[Endeva.]

i can relate to this... more than most i read... good job born, you really touched on it this time... im getting sick of SS..lol... but i think this was really well thought out... your flow was smooth, couldnt fault it and wording fit nice.. all in all good shit....