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Thread: Intimate Collab (SMZ & Mag...): Media

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    Intimate Collab (SMZ & Mag...): Media

    This is a drop on the media.. how it's perceived from within and without... I actually am a news announcer so I thought it would be interesting...

    -(SMZ : The News Watcher)-

    It's a big world - but I can only see to the horizon,
    And I hardly hear anything - like an inverse Verizon,
    With those two cases combined I guess it's not surprisin',
    That I think it's nice an' relaxing to listen to you,
    Tell me all about the various conditions that are new,
    It's good to know that everything you say is true,
    What else could you do - I mean you're the news,
    Hmm...
    Palestinians are still throwing rocks at innocent Jews,
    Those snotty French types won't pay us our dues,
    And I'd be healthier if I drank - that brand of booze,
    ...
    Interesting things to peruse - I'm glad you did it for me,
    There's four other stations but you won the tourney,
    So you're my travel guide whenever I let my mind journey,
    And I feel no worry 'cause your voice comes from a box,
    Freedom Of X-pression - that's the meaning of FOX,
    Or I think so - let me first hear your thoughts...


    -(Mag... : The News Announcer)-

    Im like double talk, a barney rubble mock, and verbally stalk
    The truth which brings a shock, examined like a hubble rock..
    So.... ...stop, listen what words were willingly twisted,
    Now I missed it... and was supposed to hold on double fisted
    I'm blacklisted... fall back to the minds eye's shadows
    Cosmeticly cover up... before im discovered in the gallows
    All hallowed be thy name... the freeze frame... the replay
    Another scene change... a sensational screenplay..
    Because it seems these days, everything is pre-scripted..
    Perspective shoplifted, not once, but twice shifted...
    To the left, and what's left but this journalist is now bereft...
    Of any honor, secrets are close kept, so you're deaf to the deft..
    Lies dropped like a bomber, on minds, so why bother...
    Well I need to pay the bills and give a tenth to the father
    Damn im so cynical... not to mention hypocritical..
    Stabs a pen so clinical.... with intention so subliminal...

    so this is how it is...

    Like a dream I arrive at the crime scene to investigate angles
    Not what it seems... ill leave facts in cracked seams to dangle
    Lost forever or until unearthed by some others endeavour
    But, it's for the better... now let me think...how to make this clever?
    Maybe I'll target the young men black and white, a real fight,
    Yes... they have the appetite, for the social left versus the right,
    Or i just might, find a sex scandal rock the tv with a mic handle
    Create a seductive blaze in context, Britney couldn't hold a candle
    Next to, cuz it's not a game to see how much they respect you
    It's a paid programming popularity contest to see if they'll elect you
    Infect you with schematic propaganda proposed to the youth
    Ensure we keep them guessing at what's really the truth
    To Jews.. who've paid dues to a Western culture confused
    Guess who has been abused? Was it Palestine or you?
    A break through... Im only here to entertain with thoughts of terrorize
    Not to organize so beware..In my lair you gotta open your eyes..


    -(SMZ)-

    I'm glad I listened to you - you changed all my thoughts,
    It's disturbing - like I was a hen in a room with a fox,
    Nah - the situation was worse - change the word room to box,
    Then opportunity knocks and takes my mind on a journey,
    I realize that I'm the sixth member of the information tourney,
    You're right - from now on no one else will think for me,
    Mentally whore me - or suppress my wits like booze,
    From here on out - only I determine my don'ts and do's,
    I've reached my Promised Land - took half as long as the Jews,
    For me to finally formulate my own brand of news,
    And now I refuse to just believe that what anyone says is true,
    Studies show it's safer to check up on anything that's new,
    I'm glad you told me that - I guess I can only trust you,
    They'll try to change my view - I won't find it surprisin',
    I'll decline to hear them now - I'm switchin' from Verizon,
    I'll follow my own voice - and find truth on the horizon.


    thanks for anyone who replies... this is our first collab for our new topical crew Intimate... we still our looking for a few members...
    Last edited by Mag...; March 10th, 2004 at 10:51 PM
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    You need to leave 2 links of replies or this gets closed, Thanks.

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    i kind of liked it mag i got new respect for u
    except for ur sig. (shitty)your flow was prob
    the best aspect, some lines were sick but
    i really liked the flow, did u get a name change
    or something? or mabey i just slept on u
    but smz :/ u need to up ur vocab i liked
    ur verse more on what u had to say, even
    tho it was abit, weird seeing as a person
    doesnt give into the news like a groupee
    . .. thats just what kind of vibe ur verse
    gave me. . .. Either way tight collab.

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    iight..

    Erm..

    This was quite interesting for such a boring topic.. Lol..

    SMZ.. To be honest.. Ive always liked the way that you write.. But you do need to up your vocabulary.. If you wrote your verses in the same way that you critisize mine.. Then you would be very good.. Lol..

    Mag.. You have a wierd style.. You do in my eyes, anyway.. Erm.. But both your styles complimented each other to a certain extent.. Also.. After reading SMZ's verse.. Mag, your lines seemed stretched.. On your own, this wouldnt of been the case..

    Anyway..

    Nice collab, children.. ..

    Pz..

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    thnks for the replies... i only felt one or two of my lines were stretched... it's really in the way you say them... but it's hard... cuz im left breathless after spitting these two back to back...
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    Dont worry.. It was a good drop, my friend..

    Pz..

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    ^^^
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    back to the top...
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    and it goes like .... UP!
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    well then... im only replying cos you took the time with mine... but i aint in a good mood, so its gonna be short..... well,.... SM, your verses were quite smooth in flow, but you lack emotion a bit, and it seemed quite boring, id flip it round more, expand in the vocab, but as a piece it was quite well balances, minus the vocab...
    mag, yours seemed a bit more complex, but again, i wasnt really feeling the whole concept... id think up some better topica to roll with.... also, i hate people who use a coloured font...lmao.... but no all in all not bad,
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    thanks for the reply ... i'll remember your name... and his...salam
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    Unlike the other 2 replies you've recieved here... I thought this was great..
    I never thought I'd be so interested in a topic about MEDIA.. but u did it.. very nice
    I like the way you both set it up.. and layed everything out in the verses
    The colored fonts WAS good.. cause it put you directly into the other persons perspective right away..
    nice vocab use.. SMZ had a little less vocab.. it probably would've been nicer if u both had around the same amt of good vocab useage in this..
    flows went nice together.. nice transitions.. great piece
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