Corrupted Visions: Dreams (feat. Credz)

[-uski-]

(-uski-)
Every night I close my eyes and dream the life I really need
With all of these things around me its something I nearly see
That the only Way I want to Live Instead of this nightmare
Im Liven My Own worst fear..I will show no mercy I drop a tear
More just seem to fall and in my dreams im bawl I scream and all
Cause in life im deemed a thrall..And starting to lean like walls
I stay in this hypnotising world I get closer till I can touch it
Being called a joke that means I cant really fix it with suicide
I won’t hide away I must just forget it and live with it inside


(Credz)
Every night I just close my eyes…realizing that I just pose in life…
I just want to hose the lies..and let the dreams be my dose of flight…
Because that’s the only way..I will ever be something worth living…
Cause I have lonely days…and I think that my life deserves shifting…
And every night I search lifting..every rock in hopes of just finding…
All the ropes that are binding, that are making me choke so im crying…
Becoming a joke that is dying, since I cant change the past I live inside…
And I give and die with reality to get behind, never to forgive and stride…
Just don’t know why I cant open my eyes and wake from this nightmare…
Only if my eyes would force wide open but the source is broken…
……………knowing that everything is right there…


http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=118346
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=108917

[Mistral]

Um...Upping...Good to see uski back in open mic though I think its been awhile haha.

[Lingwistik]

not bad, nice drop, not a lot of vocab, but i also need to work on that, i liked credz verse better, but they were pretty close, a good amount of multies, good amount of emotion, not a lot of metas, but its all good, nice drop

can u please drop feedback in my open mic, thanx

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...02#post1248402

[Laureate]

Uski- good flow overall...although it fell off a bit in the end...your imagry was alright...but you could improve it....Rhymes were a lil too simnplistic, you used multis very well....not a bad verse by you tho.

Credz- Good flow...very nice use of multis and vocab...the rhyming words were kinda simplistic...but thats ok...first OM i've seen from you....

Overall a nice piece fellas....up ya vocab a tad and try and use more imagry and feeling...good job

Pleas ehit this up http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=118852

[$carface]

i was feeling dis...both verses were decent....like flo said up one da vocab a bit...the flow was good...(exactly how my structure is somewhat)...good drop though...

[Chris Black]

This was a decent drop. The topic was cool, and the emotions were cool in both verses. let the dreams be my dose of flight <My favorite part. Creds flowed a little better but both verses were up to par. Keep doing what you do.

[-uski-]

thanks yall uppin this