Hidden Inside feat. Lost Soul

[FreeThinker]

Hidden Inside


Eki:

Behind the smile that embraces my face- another world exists
Depression, Anger and Hate fill up the population list
This other dimention has been controling its parallel side
taken my smile as a hostige- because it needs to hide
When these worlds collide- and noone else is present but me
i can finally take back my smile- let my true feelings free
but public makes it stronger - the dominant race...
Cleansing all the happiness and joy to a simple smile on my face
My eyes are the windows to the hell that I posses...
look deep past my smile.. youll find a awfull mess...
thoughts tangled.. really a walking wrack.. behind natural lies
my soul is struggling in pain... letting out unheard cry's
Looking into someones face... With such a happy impression
making my whole existance a lie - through a fake expression
This will stop when i stop the lies, and show this ugly place
till that day, happy-ness only lives through a smile on my face


Lost Soul:

Deep below where my thoughts creep and grow, theres a darkness..
My face doesn't show, you'd have to be me to know, that i'm a carcus..
No marked wrists, i've felt pain why feel more..there's galour in store..
My sadness reaches its core, i now relate life with Tupac Shakur..
This feeling keeps me in shackles, my life line is tangling up..
All i ever do is lose battles, and i'm restrained with strangling cuffs..
The devils got me on hold and God's hangin up, why's it so tough..
The struggles enough, why pain too, God i hate you, this isn't bad luck..
After i felt dismayed, the feeling never went away, it stayed and gained..
Who's to blame? I don't know why i feel like this, i'm far from sane..
I must have a disformed brain, things can't be always like this..
I never did anything deciful i was tame...so treat me rightous..
God why must you create such a feeling, like my insides peeling..
It's starting to become revealing, it has me on tha ground kneeling..
My souls been robbed but whos been doing tha stealing?? God..
He put me here to rot, i should quit being christian and switch to Jihad..

[FreeThinker]

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=116143
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[FreeThinker]

uppin

[ELEETE]

This was nice..........I liked the content an the way you both approached the subject........

Eki....I like your use of words an the imagery you put into this......i could picture a lot of what you were saying....

Cleansing all the happiness and joy to a simple smile on my face
My eyes are the windows to the hell that I posses...<--Nice

Lost Soul....i could feel the emotion coming out of your verse which made it stand out a bit more....

All i ever do is lose battles, and i'm restrained with strangling cuffs..
The devils got me on hold and God's hangin up, why's it so tough...<--Nice

Overall this collab was good in my eyes....dope job........hit my collab with Dev up in my sig.......thanks!

[Bigg E Z]

your pieces felt a little long (Line length)

but, u both kept it nice....

Keep it up, the both of you....

[Endeva.]

both verses content wise, were decent.... lost thught yours had the better scheme, flowing a bit better with some decent internals n shit.... eki, yours was a bit simpler, but not over,.... the topic was decent enough, but im getting sick of this sorta thing personally..... decent effort from both tho.... keep at it

[FreeThinker]

upin.............................................. .....

[Reason!]

i liked this peice,
and the content of it,
had a nice meaning to it,
and the imagery really stood out,
and thats what i like in a peice.
overall i give this peice a 7.5/10
props.

hit up my peice called " - 712 -

thanx.
pz.

[L0st S0ul]

Thanx for all tha feed back uppin...
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[L0st S0ul]

Uppin 4 some more feedback...
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