Till Eye Die Anthem (struggles)

[Masahiko.]

{Hook.. i guess lol}
I know its hard...
to step in a kids body with a mind of a man..
I know its hard...
but god send me a message.. a sign of a plan..
I know its hard...
to keep away ya skill an overflowing wanigan..
I know its hard...
But these are my struggles and i will conquer them..


My song my athem compressed with emotion
All those past years did it have a different notion
Why fight for somthing not there.. i gotta stay focused
Please believe.. I'd Rather state this motion
Sealed within my soul, I dont hold the answer
My uncle died when i was 10.. no not from cancer
Suicide...... his thought of life was rancor
I still stay with my pen and paper.. my deadliest weapon
I rep my asian backround.. pride till death kid
My life normal, but consolidated with conflicts
I'm a rebel, a hero no i cant let this harm stick
Pain Sorrow and Hate all together condensed
Math im x......... the way i never stay constant
I'm never noticed matter a fact im impersonal
Nobody knows or cares and that is the worst of all
First Born........ does this mean im first to fall
Am i cursed........ or is everyone ill-fated
If I ever have a chance to make a difference i will state it
This is my song, my anthem, in epic porportions
I speak the truth im not fake I will inform this
This is me, my rules........... i will inforce this........
Please Believe

{Hook.. i guess lol}
I know its hard...
to step in a kids body with a mind of a man..
I know its hard...
but god send me a message.. a sign of a plan..
I know its hard...
to keep away ya skill an overflowing wanigan..
I know its hard...
But these are my struggles and i will conquer them..

[Masahiko.]

up it jeez feedback would be nice

[Ace of Aces]

well done. the beginning was the best part of this i'd say. some of
the rhymes were lost but it still made for a good verse. i was actually
impressed by it, seeing your record. but then again, records don't
mean diddly squat if you think about it. but i got several images in my
head from this one. the structure and flow was good, with the exception
of rhymes missing. the vocab was nice, and i felt the topic, it had heart.

hit this up in return plz
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=113569

keep writing. pz

[Masahiko.]

up it

[Masahiko.]

up it

[Masahiko.]

feedback pleez

[M.Perror Ming]

This was a good Open Mic. I like how you put your struggles into it. It was good and had good vocab.

[Masahiko.]

up again

[Nic Caesar]

This is feedback...

lol jk... nah this was actully ok... vocab lacked... but it was nice dunny... i mean i read it so it had to be atleast decent... (lol jk)... i'm such a joker...

Peep out my H.E.l.l. OM ... its nice too

Caesar - On3

[Brother Blue Collar]

nice drop had a good flow and nice vocab while i was reading it it was like struggles were mine it gave me that type of feeling

[SMZ]

Several nice lines, liked the emotion you gave. As mentioned there were some missing rhymes. Liked this line:
Math im x......... the way i never stay constant

...and what's a "wanigan"?

Hit something in my sig - thnx. (Broken Metamorphosis if you haven't yet preferably)

[Masahiko.]

a word..
definetion..-a chest for cherished items

[G£s†U®£s]

o man this is better than i thought.....lol.......hellz keep reppin azn pride.......yo this shyt was hot, but i didnt know wat a wanigan was untill i read the post^^^lol.....overall i liked it so it pretty good.....check out mah collab with krogenix called....was that ur aimmm..trust me its worth reading

[Masahiko.]

hey hey thanx for the feedback lets get some more...