Slavery

[Negative]

A white-man's tale over a blackman's kingdom decay
Tailored mind filled foolery, and painful slavery
King that reigned overturned to fit a white new suit
Where white is the angel and black is the witch
Continent invaded divided and inter-enmity created
A history desecrated, black societies destoryed
Replaced by black pupet amputating his own limp
Black man with a painted face singing a white song
Greed and corruption embraced imported by whites
The black victims of hate, of failed black knights
The black land devasted by the black prostitutes
The mental prostitutes brained by the white devils
Foolish blacks humbled by the white lie of schools

What makes or destroys a kingdom is the failure to control.

[Bloom.Quist]

Ayoo aesthetic me illspitta4life nice stuff rite here. Real good emotion in it and thats the main part of poetry. I dont like critisizing poems cuz bein good aint what it's about. All about expression peace.

[shawty"B"]

tha topic is gud, the imagery is mild and theres not alotta feelin here, but it however was a gud read

.......fav part......

A white-man's tale over a blackman's kingdom decay
Tailored mind filled foolery, and painful slavery
King that reigned overturned to fit a white new suit
Where white is the angel and black is the witch

the line that says "Where the white is angel and the black is witch" was so true

keep droppin
return tha favor

....bless

[Negative]

Apreciate it.....

Wun

[BlazinBabieDoll]

You have an amazing way with words. You gave good imagery and depth to a piece with much emotion using simple terms and vague wording. Very well done....

[TherealAes]

who the fuck is this whack ass with my name and quote?
homie you need to lose this shit and make matters worse you stole my sig quote..

fuck outta here you puttin Aes to shame and kilkl ''Wun'' shit thats even gayer


prepare to be whored daily

[TherealAes]

this is whack, and trust kid ill be waiting for you to show your face

[Absolute Power]

werd i was juz gonna ask that...cuz i saw ur post on UF i dunno name if ripped is common but the quote...now thas weird....n e ways...not to be off topic but good piece but seemed to be a lil weak in imagry but otha then that on tap

[Negative]

KIds i got this name from a homey.....and i can murder you wit 1 verse...Where ever u from...i dont really give a fucc.....U born wit the name or somethin....weaklink.....and count on that.....ama get a new name....cuz some fool comes out nowhere bullshittin...

[lyricalchick86]

dont let dat dude make u change yo name he jus bullshitt cause yo poem was hott dats all playa holla

[TherealAes]

lol@ you changin your name, your location and you're quote...fucknig herb if i didnt say anything you would have kept being me....tsk tsk

keep the name(im not buggin bout that so much) lose the ''tm'' though but good looks on not trying to be Aes anymore,,,yeah good poem and you can never see Aes in text, got a mic perhaps?

[Negative]

Kido^^^the name wont do u anyshit is the skill .....work on that...lol

[Bloom.Quist]

Ok im really wacked. How the hell would negative know thats ure name dawg? u prolly just bullshitin so u could get someones name u want.

[Negative]

lol FORGET IT CUZ I DIDNT REALLY LIKE THE NAME AESTH....LOLIS KINDA FRUITY

[Spoken]

anywho boys.....its a web site calm down

anywho the piece, i thought it was a good concept and that it was written well, showing your thoughts well, and had good vocab and flow. structure was simple and basic but worked. i felt there could have been more in the content thou.

~Tera~
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