10 lines, no more, no less
i set up
you spit first,
i will start keyin up after your check in peace
good luck
Art Official
menolin
10 lines, no more, no less
i set up
you spit first,
i will start keyin up after your check in peace
good luck
damn hurry up an spit, i thought u wouldn't check in so i keyed up, an ur still not droppin?
is u gonna show
Art Official Reppin B-Town, California......
God Save the queen if menolin is who they choose to rep they kingdom
Like "RZA", Witness "The Birth Of A Prince", And wait till the true king come
Menolin spread his shit more than "Grey Poupon"
Stepped To The Official and got SHIT on
This site is not where foreigners belong, I proved that alreddy when i killed
puertoricanelly.
Give it up you not Slick Rick The Ruler, You'd Be Better off writing "Children's Storie's"
I write "Stephen King" thrillers, make em extra gory
And make "Wes Craven" look like "Dr. Suess"
Doin Drive By's on Elm Street straight lettin loose
Fuck "2pac", Nigga I got the "Juice".
the only official i make, is the first, loss i give you,
the kid couldn't lace me up, his mother does his school shoes,
if illness, was measured in pounds, art boy would be anorexic,
his other battle was so bad, it turned me into a dyslexic,
these little dogs come in, and think they can piss on the big trees,
this guy so weak......
..........he the type that after keyin up text, starts to show fatigue,
im hurting him like 'strokes', leaving him near 'brushes' with death*
i police the front lines, i take away your stress, give you a-rest**
crush this cat, like collapsed buildings, an natural disasters,
im like a kids braking a vase....
.........i leave 'art' poorly fixed, like a young child by using plasters
*stroke an brushes have a conection with art,
**hopefull you should get it a-rest=arrest
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WHATS UP YALL GOOD BATTLE VOTE ON MA SHIT AND HELP ME OUT THERES THE LINK, IM A HAVE TA GIVE THIS SHIT TO ARTOFFICIAL BASED ON THE FACT THAT HE USED BETTER METAPHORS AND KILLED MENOLIN WITH THE LITERARY BOOK PUNCHLINES, SO MY VOTE GOES TO ART OFFICIAL
Uppin for votes. Peep My slick rick Reference. Only True Heads Will Get This One.
official, you came pretty decent in this battle, your structure and flow was kinda off which made it harder to read your verse...your punches were a little played but some where creative..all in all not a bad drop...
menolin, you had decent flow and structure, some of your punches were kinda played as well such as the anorexia line but other then that you stayed pretty creative and had a little better personals....
overall:menolin takes this battle with harder punches and personals
Thanks For the constructive criticism DIVERSE. My structure is killing me in battles But I'll get Better.
menolin takes this hands down he had better punches..
his flow was on point..and he had personals..
art ur shit was to streched... and ur flow was off...
ur punches was hittin...
vote:menolin
plz drop a vote on this..since i took time to hit yours
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nice nice battle here.....both had good flow.....but art official loose the quotes and shorten your bars.....good punches you had......menolin ='d better punches tho.....his personals hit you hard.....your punches were less direct.....work on mixing your personals and punches.......vocab was solid from both......structure wass good for M.......not so good for Art,.
vote menolin..................
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damn..menolin took this battle..shit was funny...art official fix ur format and make ur bars shorter and u got deep potential to be a nice battler....however in this one i belive melonin took this with witty punches and simile's..study his art...and try it...
v/melonin
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3rd time uppin......... drop votes an links
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Art Official..your structure made it a struggle to read ur verse..
& when i finally got into it..i was running for the exit.
..Not that bad though especially for a FL piece but..
Sometimes the creativity was of such a low level.. work on it.
menolin came wack as ever.. But better then Art Official.
..Guess his experience keeps giving him the upper hand..
But thats..obvious..when battlin newbs.
..Some ok..punches .. witty.
So for a overall battle verse..
Especially better punches.. & structure.
vote menolin
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