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    Haste.. [Ft.. Maven]

    Viscosity:
    Emptiness lurks, but the shadows dissolve
    evolve from the depths of the earth
    Problems and fantasies, trying to be fulfilled
    from the smallest to the top.. we build
    Architechture blueprints, must work with haste
    blood, and drips of sweat on the face
    Fast is the only pace.. no slowness is laced
    keep workin till ur at the end of the wall and braced
    Winning is the only solution, cat & mouse as I chased
    style unduplicated, cant be traced.. problems faced
    And foe's beaten... so I keep building, till im complete
    its almost obleet, but the feat, will be matched
    Undefied levels will be patched.. and beat
    demons & devil.. must work faster.. to achieve
    happiness after.. stress will relieve..
    Then we will share the laughter...

    Maven:
    we need to quicken the pace of this welfare society
    which is lacking in heart, programmed for propriety
    attempting to live quietly and die in the same way
    as their father before them, can't forget him today
    simply cause the world is heavier than can be fair
    sitting on the floor cause we can't find a handy chair
    settling for second best because it's all we achieve
    in life we retrieve from children who have been deceived
    by ones who taught them reading, writing and arithmatic
    divided we fall back to future; together we must stick
    so we can show the generations that we amount to more
    than the scientific breakthroughs, the blood & guts & gore
    over clouds we must soar, where inflamed brains give way
    to a better brighter future that will overlook today
    but the freedom will be lacking after we have had a taste
    don't continue in the status quo, break out & make haste

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    up!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

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    I liked this piece a lot ... Liked the meanin'/concept ... Dope idea ... Gotten across dopely ... Well written ... Flow was easy to follow in both verses easily ... Piece seemed well thought out ...

    over clouds we must soar, where inflamed brains give way
    to a better brighter future that will overlook today

    so I keep building, till im complete
    its almost obleet, but the feat, will be matched
    Undefied levels will be patched.. and beat
    demons & devil.. must work faster.. to achieve
    happiness after.. stress will relieve..
    Then we will share the laughter...


    I liked those parts of the verse the best ... They stood out to me ... Nice job here to both of ya'll ... Keep em comin' ... Peace

    A.i

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    thanks man...

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    cmon... uppin this shit lets go

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    good stuff.........2 different entirely diff angles, from welfare reforms to demons........both verses had decent flow, easy to read, both rhyme schemes were solid...could be improved, but i think it was a good drop....keep it up, stay real, peace, 1

    p.s its kinda funny that soft focus did a collab with word perferct before we have the crew battle

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    haha.. Maven is coo so it dont matter...
    thanks fo reply tho

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    upp

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    up!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
    This is a dope piece cmon

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    Wat The Fuck Up

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    Grrr you don't need so many ups..Delete the other upping posts

    Oh and twas a nice collab you two, you bothed worked well with the concept and managed to keep it diverse...I'd reply more in depth but I'm in a hurry(how relevant to the thread) LOL

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    lol^^

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    yo u fuckers reply

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    thats like the illest thing ever

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    This was pretty cool. Vis came decent with it. I wasnt feeling the rhyme scheme at the beggining but it turned out pretty good. Maven came nice with it as well. This was a nice read.

    Fav lines from Vis:
    Undefied levels will be patched.. and beat
    demons & devil.. must work faster.. to achieve
    happiness after.. stress will relieve..
    Then we will share the laughter...

    Fav line from Maven:
    attempting to live quietly and die in the same way

    ^That was the illest line in the whole piece.

    Nice work fellas.

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    Ps. are you the same Vis from Lyrical War and RTM?...
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