10 lines
I go first,,
you must drop within 24 hours
good luck..
10 lines
I go first,,
you must drop within 24 hours
good luck..
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edit: (things to know)
(1.feeble just cut me from origin ill and wits end in one day)
(2.Feebles name used to be Limits Of The Yak Pak,, yak pak is my old crew)
We were friends on lif.. but then you started this tif
Feebles more of a sellout than a market.. you bitch!
I'm your target ooooh shit... Taktik... he see's the signs
He said make cuts... but meant the length of your lines!
You said that I made you... then expelled me from the crew
Your name said you were mine... before you were you!
So drop a ten minute key.. coz theres a dickride demand on
How can he kick me from the crew?... without a leg to stand on!
Gives me advice... the fact he's wack isn't stopping him
Feeble told me to elevate.. and I landed on top of him!
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^ all I can say is ..
I made no cuts in OI .. evolves leader of OI dumbfuck.
Read his sig, for maximum effect of my punches ..
ur cut from W E .. feebz arrives & they're fit to get whored
& your sig explains your skills ... "click if your bored"
you have no job or life ... & no one hails this comic ass
cuz com ran out of finance, like a failed economics class ..
I'll drown u till u say ur sorry, make you a serene apologist ..
& give u a new look at ocean bottom, like marine biologists
com you suck, and its the truth .. any real vet knows this
'world rejects real rappers, so coms morally excellent ..
all across the site.. from me to taktik.. this little bitch is hated
so he's got just about 2 / 1 friends .. made reciprocated
Man, expected a lot more from both of you. Anyways, I'm cool with both of you, this is pure honesty.
COMs verse.
We were friends on lif.. but then you started this tif
Feebles more of a sellout than a market.. you bitch!
Nah.
I'm your target ooooh shit... Taktik... he see's the signs
He said make cuts... but meant the length of your lines!
LoL. . killer.
You said that I made you... then expelled me from the crew
Your name said you were mine... before you were you!
Blah.
So drop a ten minute key.. coz theres a dickride demand on
How can he kick me from the crew?... without a leg to stand on!
Played concept, decent flip.
Gives me advice... the fact he's wack isn't stopping him
Feeble told me to elevate.. and I landed on top of him!
Above average
Feeble's verse.
ur cut from W E .. feebz arrives & they're fit to get whored
& your sig explains your skills ... "click if your bored"
LoL, nice but could hit harder.
you have no job or life ... & no one hails this comic ass
cuz com ran out of finance, like a failed economics class ..
Boo.
I'll drown u till u say ur sorry, make you a serene apologist ..
& give u a new look at ocean bottom, like marine biologists
Decent.
com you suck, and its the truth .. any real vet knows this
'world rejects real rappers, so coms morally excellent ..
Didn't rhyme, and the punch was ehh.
all across the site.. from me to taktik.. this little bitch is hated
so he's got just about 2 / 1 friends .. made reciprocated
Decent.
Overall this battle was really half assed. Didn't seem like you tried much Feeble. COM, you had some aight lines and a few good ones, that's why you won this. Feeble, your punches were borderline wack. A few decent lines but nothing really stood out from you. The opener had potential, but wasn't worded well enough. Vocab was nice though, made me break out the ol' dictionary.
Anyway, Feeble you really came weak here, maybe you just didn't give a fuck? Not sure, COM wins due to better punches.
....Originally Posted by Taktik
tak don't hate me,,,, dont know where you got that from
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We were friends on lif.. but then you started this tif
Feebles more of a sellout than a market.. you bitch!
...meh kinda played
I'm your target ooooh shit... Taktik... he see's the signs
He said make cuts... but meant the length of your lines!
lol...decent
You said that I made you... then expelled me from the crew
Your name said you were mine... before you were you!
decent
So drop a ten minute key.. coz theres a dickride demand on
How can he kick me from the crew?... without a leg to stand on!
blah....half played
Gives me advice... the fact he's wack isn't stopping him
Feeble told me to elevate.. and I landed on top of him!
decent...
ur cut from W E .. feebz arrives & they're fit to get whored
& your sig explains your skills ... "click if your bored"
had a lot of potential...it was decent but coulda been good
you have no job or life ... & no one hails this comic ass
cuz com ran out of finance, like a failed economics class ..
come on feeble??...this was like his market punch: played
I'll drown u till u say ur sorry, make you a serene apologist ..
& give u a new look at ocean bottom, like marine biologists
wordplay on concept was there but explaining it made it lose luster
com you suck, and its the truth .. any real vet knows this
'world rejects real rappers, so coms morally excellent ..
not a punch not a personal nothing at all...but it does rhyme...in an indirect way
all across the site.. from me to taktik.. this little bitch is hated
so he's got just about 2 / 1 friends .. made reciprocated
not hard hitting...slightly average
Com best bar:
I'm your target ooooh shit... Taktik... he see's the signs
He said make cuts... but meant the length of your lines!
Feeble best bar:
ur cut from W E .. feebz arrives & they're fit to get whored
& your sig explains your skills ... "click if your bored"
Well feebs since you gave me good feed, I thought I return the favor. This verse was not like your regular verses. You down-played com a lot, and well it proved to be your downfall. You had some punches that were waiting to be great, but one way or another didn't get delivered. Explaining the punch over and over loses its luster and illusiveness. On the other hand your flow and rhyme scheme were nice for the most part, but this aint front lines so it doesn't mean enough.
Com your verse wasn't too bad, but stay away from played concepts. Some were flipped well enough to polish them up, but others weren't. You should try to use more direct punches, and yes I know the whole verse was direct, but some of the punches could have been edited to say another users name. Oh and there is hardly no point in telling us what we need to know, because we should be able to learn that from your verse.
vote - com for consistantcy
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Com...you did the same here as against me
Your punches have potential...i keep seeing your idea's
But you dont get them across as well as i know you can
But...nice verse 2nd line was dope...
Nothing wrong technically..just your punches need developing
Feeb's...i've seen you do better, an overall good verse
A few good punches, opener was dope...
i kno you to be better than this...
Feeb's gets my vote for an overall more rounded verse
w/ a couple of slightly better punches...
V/ Feeb's
asking you to vote on my battle w/ com
Its a good battle w/ no votes....
Oh and CoM i still Wuv u
feeble can vote in our battle as long as he votes fairly........ i suppose i trust him that much
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COM
We were friends on lif.. but then you started this tif
Feebles more of a sellout than a market.. you bitch!
...yuck...never use the word tif again, 4/10
I'm your target ooooh shit... Taktik... he see's the signs
He said make cuts... but meant the length of your lines!
lol... cute 7.5/10
You said that I made you... then expelled me from the crew
Your name said you were mine... before you were you!
ight 6/10 ur lines definately show potential
So drop a ten minute key.. coz theres a dickride demand on
How can he kick me from the crew?... without a leg to stand on!
i hate these lines... u always do'em, too, lol... 6/10 but still wit
Gives me advice... the fact he's wack isn't stopping him
Feeble told me to elevate.. and I landed on top of him!
whack 5/10
Feeble Minded
I made no cuts in OI .. evolves leader of OI dumbfuck.
Read his sig, for maximum effect of my punches ..
ur cut from W E .. feebz arrives & they're fit to get whored
& your sig explains your skills ... "click if your bored"
lol 7/10
you have no job or life ... & no one hails this comic ass
cuz com ran out of finance, like a failed economics class...
hmmm... interesting..so ur sayin he ran outa money? 5/10
I'll drown u till u say ur sorry, make you a serene apologist ..
& give u a new look at ocean bottom, like marine biologists
I dont feel the "i'ma kill u lines" 6/10
com you suck, and its the truth .. any real vet knows this
'world rejects real rappers, so coms morally excellent ..
lol, cute 8/10
all across the site.. from me to taktik.. this little bitch is hated
so he's got just about 2 / 1 friends .. made reciprocated
a stretch but a personal 6.5/10
COM how come u dont come like this all the time? This battle
was very very decent. Usually I'm upset with you cuz I think
ur fallin off and this one made it seem like u were comin up.
Feebs you definately didn't drop your best. This was poor for
you. I've seen you come so much better.
I'll tally the numbers.
COM... 28.5/50
Feebs... 32.5/50
but an impressive showing by COM.
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Aight.. This was much nicer than expected.
COM came with 4 damned nice lines.
However the closer was just a flipped Quotient line....
Also that leg to stand on is played, and that first bar was just bad
Feeble also only came with 4 nice lines.
However his other lines were just a bit less played.
Feeble gets my vote for more consistency in a very close battle.
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I'm seeing replies & peeps are looking at Consistancy as the main factor, which is true, but it is such a fine divide between COM n Feebs in this that its swaying either side. Props to both for an aight battle but both know cudda been harder n more effective.
COM-you came good and straight to the point. Your stop/start style can be good in most parts but sumtimes the punches jus aint hard enuf
E.g
We were friends on lif.. but then you started this tif
^^its a gr8 set up but none the less its a filler in which every line shud be
a decent punch
Anyways you came partial to your ability but still hit good
& CONSISTENT
Feebs-I think you came w/ the best bar in the match but once again dint
hit like am used to seeing. You seem effortless, cud be good in sayin ya still
won in coming half assed but you only jus edged this. W/ slightly better punches & CONSISTENCY
Best Bar(My Opinion)--
com you suck, and its the truth .. any real vet knows this
'world rejects real rappers, so coms morally excellent ..
V/Feebs
Ok, here's tha breakdown:
COM
We were friends on lif.. but then you started this tif
Feebles more of a sellout than a market.. you bitch!
^^weak opener... not creative, use of the word "tif" should get you shot LOL
I'm your target ooooh shit... Taktik... he see's the signs
He said make cuts... but meant the length of your lines!
^^nice punch... semi witty
You said that I made you... then expelled me from the crew
Your name said you were mine... before you were you!
^^shows some skill here.. could have been better but OK punch
So drop a ten minute key.. coz theres a dickride demand on
How can he kick me from the crew?... without a leg to stand on!
^^love this one.... set up was good, nice punch
Gives me advice... the fact he's wack isn't stopping him
Feeble told me to elevate.. and I landed on top of him!
^^elevate is to rise... landing on is to fall... blah
and FEEB
ur cut from W E .. feebz arrives & they're fit to get whored
& your sig explains your skills ... "click if your bored"
^^^nice opener... good punch
you have no job or life ... & no one hails this comic ass
cuz com ran out of finance, like a failed economics class ..
^^^not too creative here but OK
I'll drown u till u say ur sorry, make you a serene apologist ..
& give u a new look at ocean bottom, like marine biologists
^^^Illest punch in the battle, niiice
com you suck, and its the truth .. any real vet knows this
'world rejects real rappers, so coms morally excellent ..
^^LOL
all across the site.. from me to taktik.. this little bitch is hated
so he's got just about 2 / 1 friends .. made reciprocated
^^^ok closer...
this one was close for me... I think Feeble dropped below his ability, COM seemed like he wanted it more, but at the same time, Feeb hit harder to me. I have to give it to Feeb - more personals, and Com that opener really sucked. Good drop though by both, vote goes to Feeb
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