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    .Skribblez.
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    I spit a lines wit a couple or a few verbs
    Skribbz is a vegiterian so i'm devouring all the herbs
    Rip emcee's and bounce to the next like bad checks
    Ya'll know i'm the shit cuz I party in toilet bowls
    My games like squad cars cuz i'm coppin all the hoes
    They call me Mister Rogers cuz I'm jus too nice
    My flows hott like volcanic eruptions it'll melt ya ice
    Skribbz lines are like fallin of a bike so you can't handle-my-bars
    Don't claim to be gangster but I packs more heat than heaters in the trunks of cars
    Got madd of hoe's on my dick like havin sex in a garden
    Rhyme's are ubsurd. . . Cuz i'm droppin hotter shit than over heated terds. . .

    played topic I know, but I edited a verse I posted awhile ago.. twas' incredibly w.a.c.k so I re wrote it.. btw my structure's fixed
    Last edited by .Skribblez.; December 15th, 2003 at 10:12 PM

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    They say I'm a fight risk A.T.'s Avatar
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    mainly... just make sure your lines rhyme...I seen a few and
    I was like... wtf... wheres the rhyme... not too bad though...
    your structure still needs a lil work... but you had some nice
    wordplay in there... just keep elevatin dawg...
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    .Skribblez.
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    There was only like one time that I didn't rhyme.. lol

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    .Skribblez.
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    Feedback would be niice..

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    NONCENTZ AKA WORD~PERFECT noncentz's Avatar
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    YOU GOT POTENTIAL AND YOU NOT GARABAGE JUST FIND YOUR STYLE AND DELIVERY
    to love something,is to die for it ,if you do, your a martyr , but these days music is morbid, false carters ..prohet's for prophet no lie, look how our last martyr was crucified. to put it in it symplicity, you aint true...you wouldnt sacrifice a few dollars for authenticity..

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    you got the structure now just fix your vocab
    stay up
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    decent drop nothing really facinating about the piece...Pretty much a typical hype verse at a low form...

    1-
    softfocus



    while you write to rapbattles I perform on stage

    How's it feel to lack in comparison?............

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    .Skribblez.
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    Thx for the feedback ya'll..

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    Eye Am Dope Walter Wall's Avatar
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    Ya'll know i'm the shit cuz I party in toilet bowls
    ^ewwwwwwwww

    you came too basic
    but you have potential to be a decent battler
    you had sum ok wordplay
    keep dropp'n
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