Love at first site: verse 2

[Ace Of Spades]

for those who haven't read it or wutever.
here's the first verse:

Love at first site: verse 1


Verse 2
Either procure flight with this angel, or burst into tears//
I confided confidence in myself by submergin my fears//
Slowly embraced paces I reaped my courage for words//
Somehow everything seemed like a reoccurrence at first//
Introductions were absolute, I felt I knew her before this summit//
The very entity of my dreams, I was already equipped to commit//
Deprivation of previous depression, my heart resisted dismay//
Till this I was insensible to the fact that bliss existed this way//
I breeched supreme glory when I conquered her askin me//
An emergent of miracles, my aspirations converged veracity//
Insurance was superfluous, my feelings became explicit//
I had no real reason to subsist until she became listed//

its about actually speaking to her. the third verse will be up
later. and for those who don't know:
verse 1- when i first saw her
verse 2- when we met
verse 3- where we are now and where i want to be

threads i replied to:
My bitch
I'm ready
U ain't a rapper

peACE

[Ace Of Spades]

no feedback huh...cmon peepz...i could really use some...
this is for my princess...and i want to know if you guys like it or not...
so i can show it to her...thanx
peACE

[Mistral]

This was good i thought...it was something i could relate to cause i write a lot of love songs lol but i liked this...You had good emotion in this i thought, you said what you needed to and got it across good..i felt this verse though...everything seemed good overall....keep at it man.

[noncentz]

this is as solid as anyother track here regardless of topic...emotion imadry sincerity poetic concept everything linked well and paints a great perception of love ...great work

[Amarant]

nice drop, very well thought up. gr8 vocab(sounds like u swallowed a dictionary lol)
good structure and wordplay, and multi's, keep it up and thanks for the reply.

[Ace Of Spades]

thanx for the feed back. much appreciation. this came from the heart.
i enjoy writing about how i feel or felt. and this was the result
thanx again.
peace

[E-Lude]

i thought it was good great picture and flow. you used a good vocab and it seemed like it had alot of feelings in it.

[Ace Of Spades]

thanx man, i appreciate the feedback. i enjoyed writing this. so i'm hoping
people like it. i'm glad that you do. thanx again.
peace

[Dios de Hip Hop]

Either procure flight with this angel, or burst into tears//
I confided confidence in myself by submergin my fears//


^^u piece of shit that was a got damn nice line.
felt that one for sure
im jealus .

keep up that shit hopin the third verse keep s up with this
.....nice 2 verses
respond to mine in my sig.

[Ace Of Spades]

thanx dao. i luv you like a brotha. hahaha.
that line is deep. don't you know. its wut makes
and breaks the situation of love.......
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peace

[5hifty]

yo this was a great verse.. keep it up dawg.. i was feelin it crazy style

[soprano]

nice drop good flow I was feeling it

[-uski-]

yo that was a nice Open Mic I liked the first one and and the second......nice flow....Allround Nicely Done wasn't Long Like All The Others I have read today.........But I have to say Thats a good idea Posting them sewperatly.......9/10 counting the First One too Peace Out Kuz

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[Sir Skiddz SoPhrenic]

A nice solid verse, you displayed good abilities by keeping people interested which is something important. You didn't drown yourself in emotion which is good because it becomes to personal a piece, Good drop.

[-->FreeBasE<--]

excellent vocab and good topic

nice wordplay and rhyme scheme

it represents your record

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