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Thread: Second Level of Mind feat. TheUnderated

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    Second Level of Mind feat. TheUnderated

    1st verse True Prophet
    2nd verse TheUnderated

    Welcome to the crowd with a second level of mind
    where youll find people designed with a pinnacle of intelligence
    in the air youll smell a high level of brilliance
    With a hint of excellence to accompany their existence
    The stereotype starts with the kid sat at the front of the class
    the one that was harassed just because he could grasp
    equations, and scientific expressions like electrons
    the one that couldnt careless about fashion..
    their interaction limited to people only like them
    From authors to senetors maybe a doctor or proffeser
    A reliance on science.. like a romance, its what they live for
    A crowd where beauty is a weapon of mass destruction
    . . cos its non existent
    and their cleverness is a obstruction to seduction
    The people with a reputation of nose bleeds and four eyes
    like butterflies their beauty is cacooned inside
    but insecurities are created by the divide
    . . between 'cool' and the second level of mind
    ...


    Seperate Planes, Calculating Cognition..
    An OutKast, Scorned by societies division..
    Curiosity in opposite Genders, Youthful Preminition..
    Held back from realization by his very condition..
    Accelerated Wisdom, Refered to as gifted..
    Expectations on his shoulders, to the next level he's lifted..
    Alone..... deep within his psyche you can sense it..
    As he's tested and Programmed caught defenseless..
    Doesn't know what a friend is all he knows is his books..
    As he walks down narrow halls to even narrower looks..
    Does what he can when he can to change his disposition..
    But he knows based on his clothes and demeanor they won't listen..
    They just taunt and they imprison him make him hate his intelligence..
    Not realizing his advantage, or relevance of his excellence..
    Parental Neglegence coupled with Peer Pressure leads to pestilence..
    and his second level mind is lost to chemical elements.

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    I loved this OM. Not just cuz the two of you are in I.J.L but cuz the two of you did an amazing job. The flow from T.P was good while TheUnderRated was bout the sam not the exact same. The wordplay from TUR was a likl better ten profets. But you'r story and structre was great. A 9-10 peice in my thoughts. Keep it up. My I.J.L try out is my new OM. IN or NO? I'll respect you'r oppionion either way. Thank you for the great read. Cant wait to see future OM'S From I.J.L

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    That was sick, Prophet. Had really good vocabulary, a good topic, and flowed really well. Nice job.

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    . . idiot

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    ahhhh the reasons for me not posting in OM anymore are comming back to me.

    You all sleep to much

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    Ack. Sorry this has been slept on, my piece is too.

    Overall, this was a nice OM. Your vocabulary was very extended and professional, and I liked the concept. The only thing that pretty much flawed this piece was the stretch in the structure. It kind of chopped up the flow, but still your wordplay and imagery was awesome. I liked the metty's in here, but I still can't stop thinking of how it could be very dope if you evened out the structure. I caught some spelling errors in there, like *professor, but not many mechanic problems though. All in all, nice piece. This truly was the work of a Second Level of Mind.

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    True Prophet:

    Nice opening and I mean nice like the relevance of
    your lines. Nice ryhme scheme nice word scheme.
    Good discriptive verse and you kept a good flow
    with the discriptive verse so I wasn't bored.
    However your content crontibuted to it as well
    didn't know you could write like this definitely keep
    it up.

    "Welcome to the crowd with a second level of mind
    where youll find people designed with a pinnacle of intelligence
    in the air youll smell a high level of brilliance
    With a hint of excellence to accompany their existence"

    Those lines kept me glued. Nicely well done.


    TheUnderated:

    I like the approach you took on this topic well done.

    "Doesn't know what a friend is all he knows is his books..
    As he walks down narrow halls to even narrower looks..
    Does what he can when he can to change his disposition..
    But he knows based on his clothes and demeanor they won't listen.."

    ^ those lines caught me good.
    Nice discriptive appraoch and I haven't
    seen you drop anwhile so to drop like that
    is dope. Your beginning was ok to me because
    I hate (ION)-endings however you had good
    meaning so that wasn't a bother.


    You both complimented each other nice collab
    good chemistry this piece shouldn't be slept on.

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    yeah i was suprised at how well Underated wrote, iknow hes a pretty dope audio head but never seen anything text wise before.. thanks for the feed

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    up.. ive replied to alot in this forum aswell

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    I saw it being slept on so I had to drop feed

    This was a good OM.Some nice vocabulary and creative in pieces.You could have been a bit more creative with this though.I think your structure could have been a bit better because the lines were streched in places.I liked True Prophets just a small it more.I felt he put more effort into his piece and it stood out to more.Just work on a few minor thingd and you guys will be flying.Keep it up

    If you could return the favour
    "Children and lunatics cut the Gordian knot which the poet spends his life patiently trying to untie."
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