User Tag List

Showing results 1 to 7 of 7

Thread: "Why I Play With Dolls"

  1. #1
    BRB, Jumping Ship Baron Mynd's Avatar
    Join Date
    Oct 1985
    Location
    Bilston, Wolverhampton
    Age
    34
    Posts
    15,327
    Battle Record
    11-5
    Awards 1-2 Punch HW Champion Legendary Member Legendary OM OM HOF SS HW Champion LLL Champion - Award Request Accepted

    "Why I Play With Dolls"

    I refused to answer the door when the pounding began ..
    .. And my fear seemed to intensify the louder it rang.
    I'd been left at home for the first time on my own that night ..
    .. and as the front door crashed open, my body froze in fright!
    A thick cloud of smoke entered first, that was tinged with the glow ..
    .. of the brightest light I'd ever had the dis-privilege to know.
    A dark, cloaked figure had followed, sweeping me off the ground ..
    .. While whispering low and soothing,

    "It's okay, it's okay. I've got you now..."

    It was several minutes before I'd even started to embrace ..
    .. The simple fact that the whole of our apartment was ablaze.
    The fireman carried me to a barrier, where I sat and assessed ..
    .. The roaring rosin flames which spat and scorched the back of my neck.
    "What's your name, honey?" he asked, to which I calmly replied ..
    .. "Samantha Reynolds, sir" while the gold flames bit hard at the night.
    "Sarah was in there," I exhumed, as the consummate heat wavered ..
    "She was a special doll from my bestest friend...
    ...Please save her."


    *****

    - Flashback -

    I remember the clouds breaking up, to reveal a vibrant glow ..
    .. Rather anxiously, I'd b.olted back out the door minutes after arriving home!
    I ran to the playground, where my jovial mind spent copious time ..
    .. Amongst the sturdy red-brick buildings, where a young girl sat alone on the slide.
    I joined her for a moment and said nothing, before she turned to me ..
    .. "I bet I can make you sick on the swings!" she teased quite churlishly.
    Suddenly our eyes connected, "Bet you cant!" I jested after a while ..
    "My names Samantha, what's yours!?"
    "Call me Megan,"
    she beamed back with a smile.
    Then for hours we played and we flounced, as she chased me about ..
    .. before dusk drew near, and my new friend asked me to stay at her house.
    "You can have one of my dolls" Megan insisted, cutting brief the discussion ..
    .. And we talked into the small hours, before falling asleep on the cushions.
    I woke to find her crying, a trails of tears travelling past her light hair ..
    .. So I reached over to console her, thinking maybe she'd just had a nightmare.
    Megan choked back her tears, but her sullen state had raised alarms ..
    .. And there in her bedroom we made a pact,
    That our dollies would keep us safe from harm.
    "I've never told anyone this before..." she began with a sigh ..
    .. Struggling with her own conscious, as cold tears ran from her eyes.
    "...my father rapes me." Megan sobbed, while meeting my silent gaze ..
    .. Both of us whispering softly, as we discussed how to end his violent reign.
    We decided to tell my mother, who then that night alerted the police ..
    .. Megan's teary eyes shimmered, under the veil of brown hair they were curtained beneath.
    Her rich green eyes were consumed in darkness, and though the brute was heartless ..
    .. Her father's hold on her was so strong,
    That poor Megan soon withdrew the charges.
    Within days they moved apartments, her shoes and garments deeply thrust ..
    .. and packaged into cardboard boxes, along with dreams to keep in touch.

    *****

    - Flash Forward -

    The clacking sound of a diesel engine increased to a roar ..
    .. Tyres screeched on the floor, as the fire truck proceeded with force.
    Lights flashed as it flied past, with it's sirens blaring their sound ..
    .. And in the odd rotating red hue, I noticed it lay there on the ground.
    It was Sarah, the patch-work doll I was given with its faceless charm ..
    .. The one Megan had sworn would keep me safe from harm.
    I stared at the burnt building I once called home, and thought "Maybe she's right..."
    And maybe Megan's gratitude is ultimately what saved me tonight...

  2. #2
    BRB, Jumping Ship Baron Mynd's Avatar
    Join Date
    Oct 1985
    Location
    Bilston, Wolverhampton
    Age
    34
    Posts
    15,327
    Battle Record
    11-5
    Awards 1-2 Punch HW Champion Legendary Member Legendary OM OM HOF SS HW Champion LLL Champion - Award Request Accepted

    Re: "Why I Play With Dolls"

    Archive this shit NOW!

    Flames.

    WORD P e r f e c t !


    RESERVOIR GODS


    To view links or images in signatures your post count must be 50 or greater. You currently have 0 posts.

  3. #3
    ...practice makes poetry
    Join Date
    Sep 2003
    Posts
    2,700
    Battle Record
    4-1

    Re: "Why I Play With Dolls"

    this has to be baron mynd
    Hence Forward

  4. #4
    Banned
    Join Date
    Feb 2007
    Location
    brooklyn, ny
    Age
    38
    Posts
    546
    Battle Record
    3-2

    Re: "Why I Play With Dolls"

    wow... i dont understand why people are sleeping on this... what an incredible piece. very good usage of vocab. i see people fall off alot when trying to fit so much of it in. not you though.... i enjoyed reading this. everything flowed together perfectly.. i really dont know what to say.... overall- pure dopeness. its one hell of a read, but shit... very good work, bro. i dont see this name often... stay active... i plan on reading more from you soon.

  5. #5
    The Witness. Witty's Avatar
    Join Date
    Mar 2006
    Location
    Northern Ireland
    Age
    33
    Posts
    17,788
    Battle Record
    11-10
    Awards OM HOF

    Re: "Why I Play With Dolls"

    Quote Originally Posted by Mag...
    this has to be baron mynd
    it is

    hahaha sup mate, man this piece was ill as fuck, I read it a few days back, and was just amazed. your story telling abilites are very clear in this piece, it was very captivating and original. Rhyming and flow was off the hook as usual, and this was just an all round dope as fuck piece

    *nominated*

    To view links or images in signatures your post count must be 50 or greater. You currently have 0 posts.


    24 x OM Hall Of Fame

  6. #6
    I sing the body electric. Maven.'s Avatar
    Join Date
    Apr 2003
    Location
    Toronto
    Posts
    3,513
    Battle Record
    16-12

    Re: "Why I Play With Dolls"

    Oi, Ian, whattup?

    It's good to see that you haven't lost your touch. Your story is interesting and hopeful-although, at the same time, it leaves you wondering what happened to megan after she moved away. The reader is given the same lack of perspective your protagonist has...which is nice, because noone cane really relate anything to anyone else objectively. It's all just as we see it, and that was highlighted nicely in this story.
    Your flow seemed conventional for most of it, but I've always dug how you can incorporate conversation into stories without disrupting that aspect.
    Good work-I liked your description of the flames.
    wordperfect?
    ..o0Pure0o..

  7. #7
    Dokusei no ai - 毒性の愛 Blayde's Avatar
    Join Date
    Feb 2007
    Location
    UK
    Posts
    293

    Re: "Why I Play With Dolls"

    dope drop like i said on RA lol pretty much flawless just an incredible peice which deserves more feed overall 8.5/10 i can't pick quotations the whole peice was y fav.
    Twelve13 Designs
    Established 2004.

Similar Threads

  1. New Southern Beat!! "how To Play"! Free Download!!
    By Nick Knox in forum The Studio
    Replies: 5
    Last Post: December 22nd, 2007, 01:41 PM
  2. New Southern Beat!! "how To Play"!!free Download!!
    By Nick Knox in forum The Studio
    Replies: 0
    Last Post: December 10th, 2007, 10:56 AM
  3. "Why I Play With Dolls"
    By Baron Mynd in forum Open Mic
    Replies: 0
    Last Post: February 25th, 2007, 11:11 AM
  4. Replies: 10
    Last Post: June 4th, 2003, 01:50 PM

Posting Rules

  • You may not post new threads
  • You may not post replies
  • You may not post attachments
  • You may not edit your posts
  •