I heard it through the hoarsest mouth [Take I]

[Issue]

I heard it from the Hoarsest Mouth.
Take I.

he who is heard whispering words of such the heavenly of melodies.





(Whispering to whoever follows, take all & every guess away.
Just so nobody'll ever know why they all said no t'yesterday.
Better yet, they'll never get t'know why it was a yes t'today.)
To all who care, dare to feel free & stare out of the window.
Share your afterthoughts as you've watched the wind blow,
But please be fair, after all, you can't just let everything go.
Bingo!! Thing'yo's a racist! & Bin Laden is an escape artist!!!
How come we've only just learned that celebs ain't martyrs,
Blood stains carpets when the dog in the house's heartless?
They say kill all bulldogs! I say Bull! Dogs ain't the ones 2kill,
I say kill those Fathers of those breed-starters for starters,
Don't let anyone breed so only the smartest shall breathe,
& the sharpest nail will show the artists' portrait we believe,
Leave it hanging in Iraqi museums for those wanting to see,
"Here hangs the head of a president, a 1-party ruler & me."
& so I have waited forever to feel the pleasure of this freedom,
Now, here I am in Heaven, picking flowers at the gates of Eden.
Seeing beauty is really believing it, right here brings all of it out.
But still I hear the singing, singing through the hoarsest mouth.





http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=324448
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=324274
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=324191
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=324197
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=324071

[Issue]

The take I thing, its unfinished, I just got bored, but felt like posting as Id prefer people to get to know my work, more I post, more see it etc etc.

Ive been around already, but I was gone for an age, so now I have to do all this again. Check it out.

[Pious]

This was good, lacked alot of imagery because there wasn't much of a storyline to it.. It was stilla decent - emotion felt abstract piece..

these lines grabbed my attention:

I say kill those Fathers of those breed-starters for starters,
Don't let anyone breed so only the smartest shall breathe,
& the sharpest nail will show the artists' portrait we believe,
Leave it hanging in Iraqi museums for those wanting to see,
"Here hangs the head of a president, a 1-party ruler & me."

^great wording and smooth flow. I like the rhyme scheme throughout it was nice. I'll watch out for part II

[Issue]

Thank you, dude.



Up.

[mr_puti]

yea son that shiit was prety good

[Issue]

Helll no,


Bump?

[Young Punisher]

i liked it ma nigga.
i cant wait 2 see da finish product.

but heres ma feed:

da story line wuz a lil hard 2 figure out, but i pretty much got it at da end
da rhymes were gud 2, nd da piece flowed perfectly.
{one of da best flows i eva came across}
i agree wit da otha dude, da imagery wasnt there.
but overall this iz a great piece, try 2 finish so we could see da rest.!
much love ~1~

[Tebo]

I agree with Young Punisher, I had to read it about 3 times to understand where this was taken place & what exactly it was just about (mighta been just me), you leave the details to let people figure it out, it might stump some people. Besides that once you know what the story is it is good, it flows well & it is also another origional thing I've seen on RB. You said this wasn't a finished product & so far it looks good... Continue & nice job here.