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    My Pet Desert Eagle

    My Pet Desert Eagle

    Hiding in the grass, camoflauged from head to toe
    Looking, Watching, seeking for a herb to slowly show
    The times come and like a phoenix i rise from the dust
    Slowly aiming, waiting calmly, for precision is a must
    With the flicker of a finger my pet is signaled into motion
    soaring towards the target, his claws sharp and open
    As his war cry sounded with blinding speed he advanced
    Cocky enough to give a warning, a dead man's chance
    because he knew of his speed, which no scope could see
    and of his strength, which no vest could break
    And he knew of his large size, so why hesitate?
    He took into account all the factors of damage
    But realized something as he flew right past him
    Without accuracy, strength and speed mean nothing
    Glock is made big but you ain't hitting nothing
    So go back to the 9mm and you might be doing something

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    Re: My Pet Desert Eagle

    lol, pretty dope idea, similar to the song where jada says his guns talk to him. the vocab wasn't very strong, but you worded it into a unique style... the flow came off decent, not many multis, the imagery was pretty nice tho. the conception is there, just follow thru 6.5/10
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    Re: My Pet Desert Eagle

    Thx 4 the feedback...I should have taken more time with this concept but I'm still somewhat happy with it
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    Re: My Pet Desert Eagle

    i like this idea, pretty cool yo, i liked this alot and i saw imagery and emothion. good piece.
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    Re: My Pet Desert Eagle

    uppin'
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    Re: My Pet Desert Eagle

    I don't know man, far too simplistic. I think these guys who are saying that they like it are more audio oriented people. because on a text stand point, this fell quite a bit bellow the mark. concidering it's brevity I figured it would read very quickly.. but somehow it felt as if it was a 60+ line piece. and, that's because I was bored. one thing to work on, is try to up your vocab and ween off of the overtly casual speech. also, work on using more descriptions to create your atmosphere. also, try and play with some more complex rhyme scheme and meter forms to beef of the flow. that's an easy way to speed up the pace of a read.

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