lil bois

[StoOoOne420]

shiit im tired w/ these lil bois tryin act all that/ but they aint nothing like biggys fat/ they b sayin im all hawt/ just cuz they want me to suck they cock/ n i b like hell no i dont want some lil boi wit his lil ass toy/ man wut happen to the real guys/ who just wanna lay there starin in my eyes/ wudnt care if i never fucked around wit em/ i want a guy whos sly like eminem/ got skills/ n can pay they bills/ i want someone who can b my better half/ but the only bois i see just make me laf/ bein so poor they gotta front a dime bag/ n only wanna b w/ me if i aint on my rag/ im tired of gettin played by these lil fools/ who cant even graduate from elementary school/ tired of these bois just talkin the talk/ but they aint walkin the walk/ thinkin they sly cuz they in a gang shiit u must b crazee if u think that will get u a bang/ y is it that guys think they sly for sayin sum gay ass pick-up line/ shiit they shud just sit there asses down n just fuckin resign!

by Jess!ca.StoOoOne<3

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=323673

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...84#post5449384

[StoOoOne420]

bump!!!!!!

[El Spic]

this is bullshit wack and i only read 1 line

[IsRael]

G.a.y

[P. Mortuus]

Hmmmm...Okay...

Firstly...until your spitting..it would make it easier if you have a more universal structure..as in it's easier to read your verse. Though reading it...the content wasn't to my particular taste....okay..so it's about lil bois...how small..and why would small boys wanna fuck..give em a hard slap and it's all sorted...this piece seemed more of a channeling of desperation...i think i may have said that before idk..but why write about wanting to be with a big man or real man...i mean that's trivial :/....Theres nothing here that i could relate with. The main thing that would help you write better..is thinking over your rhymes and adding cultural, social, racial and historical refreneces into your piece na mean. Other than that, Stay up^ and keep writing.

[StoOoOne420]

cccch fuck u all... n man dont even bother replying if ur jus gon read one line

[J. Butler]

This is one shitty ass song, go ahead tell me to fuck off, I don't really take offense to it sense you suck. No one cares what you want, maybe try women.

[Tebo]

lmfaoooooo wtf was this lmfao....

[StoOoOne420]

try women=S wtf r u talkin about... i have a man now... this is old=S i dont want some nasty ass dyke

[P. Mortuus]

cccch fuck u all... n man dont even bother replying if ur jus gon read one line

I tried lol...I tried giving you sound advise and this is what i get. :noor:

[Issue]

I noticed another piece from you, which I thought Id check out. What i said in your other thread applies,


But, lady, Baron tried to help you, if you come at people the you do then you're gonna get nowhere. Instead of saying 'Fuck You' to people, elevate & do what you can to win them over. The other people who replied, such as Tebo, Isreal, El Spic & J Butler, ignore what they say. Honestly, that type of bullshit feed is something that should be erased as soon as its posted, report it if you have to. Netbeef is fucking dumb, & the longer you feed off them, the longer you'll get drawn into this & you wont learn anything. If you want to develop as a writer, or as a rapper, you should learn to discard bullshit like that. I hope you do, too, for your own sake.

[StoOoOne420]

no he was saying stuff that wasnt tru... but that post of me saying fuck em all wasnt even about him... but thnx i will

[P. Mortuus]

no he was saying stuff that wasnt tru... but that post of me saying fuck em all wasnt even about him... but thnx i will

Tut Tut...i didn't say anything..i questioned and also they too were rhetorical.