[SS] Fiction.

[Maven.]

I was just a little girl before he unfiltered the light,
and in my sheltered plight,
I'd pilfer moments of the night
sitting still for hours that were unmeasured and uncounted
devouring books of sour crooks and fantasy fountains
and my hopes were amounting to none by way of true escape
magic texts of frozen lakes
were where I'd skate but never break
through the ice and feel my heart stabbed
with broken frozen stakes...
...and he said it wasn't rape,
but I felt a thousand hates
every time he'd spread me wide and say "I love you, Kate."
Only Kate wasn't my name...she was my mom and she was gone
the pain of birth put strain on her that hadn't lasted long
Left Dad a refrain on repeat,
the chorus without the song,
on a family record, waiting for the needle to move on
to somewhere other than that bachelor apartment
locked, heartless window lights played across the carpet
at the feet of my escapist bookshelves
with unlaced adventure shoes
and I'd repress myself, tie them tight
and search the night for Truth...
but Her whispers would elude, and Dad's whiskers would intrude
against my innocence and my softened cheeks of youth.
I'm not sure if he knew, but one day as he climbed off
he coughed, moved towards the window
and opened it from the top
there was hope I couldn't stop that overflowed from me
I rushed to the fresh air that I longed taste and breathe,
and I dreamed children from my novels into the hovel close to me!
but outside, instead of dream seeing what I chose to see,
I reached out...and grasped nothing but a deserted street.



I was just a little girl the day he unfiltered the light
and the grayness of the landscape swallowed up the black and white.
Now not even all my fantasies can plant the seed of freedom
human lives are my apartment; dreams can never help you leave them.

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...25#post5379325
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...=317284&page=3

Thanks.

[Maven.]

goin up like a stevie wonder horn arrangement

[Maven.]

y'all are dropping z's like LL Cool J

[Maven.]

up.

[Atti]

I really like your style. I came into Rb later than you, so I never really saw your work.. but just heard about you. Recently I've seen you around SS and stuff though, and I love the poetic brilliance of everything you do. To me, you're almost the Sole or Alias of Rb- in the sense that, your meter isn't anything spectacular, it's just enough to do the job; but the content that you create is just so utterly thought provoking and meaningful. A lot of insight and very well put together lines. I liked it.

[$Dolla$]

that was iight

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- Atty

[Maven.]

up...

[Spoken]

nice drop man this wasa nice creative piece right here how you portrayed sucha storyline with your metaphors and vocabs man.....its great do up bruh...its a nice tad on shit man really i liked how you controled the emotino into this piece making it kinda liking a curiousity shit man like every line that passed was like damn and making me wanna read more it was really intact with everything man nice job man my second time reading something from you yet it still stood out nice job

pls hit this up
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=321025

[craz-E-]

creative but a little poetic ...RB lyric style .imagery was tight
concept overall was good ...keep your shit straight less sentence
more point,...an it would have 1 hell of an impact....later..
craz-E-