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    Walking Before God, In The Devils Footsteps

    Walking Before God In The Devils Footprints

    "The doing evil to avoid an evil cannot be good."
    -Coleridge

    Doing Wrong For All The Right Reasons:
    He was born a spawn of the light, avoiding his fall to darkness
    Tormenting the pawns of heartless, an scorching all un-charted
    Voicings wrongs through targets, a purpose vanquishing sins
    Somewhere he thinks an begins, for days that's safe in the end
    He's using strength to defend, for this hellish army is vast
    Rebellous parties would clash, him jealous, hardly will last
    He'll sell'em out if he has, thoughts seem to be favoring satan
    He dreams ways to be tainted, schemes, to slay what he's think'n
    Breathes pains in the aching, spilt blood soils the atmosphere
    Plunged, spoiled n' rotten here, floods royal n' locked in tears
    Mess broiled in pots of fear, conclusions knowing no cost
    Delusions roaming across, including disowning the cross
    He'll do it, avoiding a loss, strike a life in the hate he would
    Then sacrafice many to show a strive for the greater good

    Heavens Angel Within A Hellish Body:
    Golden armor stained with blood, a weapon of mass destruction
    Each second he slash contruction, he'll step on a class of justice
    Wreckoned, his mask adjusted, appearance vaguely discribed
    His spirit faced to combined, no fear but hate in his eyes
    The tears he faced was a tide, surface surrounded by enimies
    Progression potential energy, aggression suspended endlessly
    Wing span length the horizon, his pressence eclisped the sun
    Nightfall during the day, essenced of hell expelled from lungs
    Attempts to mirror his opponent, would surely lead to his demise
    To think is one thing but acting...could bleed the souls of cries
    Seeds from vulgar lies, spends most of his time on assumptions
    How do you fight like one, and not be one, and get nothing accomplished?

    Angel
    "I'll fight like him if i have to, but i've become something else, and still
    can not over power this being......myself"

    "He who will fight the devil with his own weapons,
    must not wonder if he finds him an over-match."

    -South.
    Where the fuck was I fore they found me?
    Floatn in a meadow, dragonflies all around me
    Seeded in a ghetto, smokin cigarellos
    Stress oceans try to drown me
    Walking on water like when Christ did, glidin
    Mic in my plam like the trident in the hand of Poseidon

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    Where the fuck was I fore they found me?
    Floatn in a meadow, dragonflies all around me
    Seeded in a ghetto, smokin cigarellos
    Stress oceans try to drown me
    Walking on water like when Christ did, glidin
    Mic in my plam like the trident in the hand of Poseidon

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    Re: Walking Before God, In The Devils Footsteps

    Well let me be the first to say dope the strcuture and build were on point as usaul, i liked the rhyme scheme you used it was different and i liked it you also used multis in this it enhanced it i liked the qoute this altogether as very original very nice great quality piece i can't wait till thew day we collab on One malice great drop

    If you have time

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    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=317377

    Oh yeah i wanna nominate this For HOF
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    Re: Walking Before God, In The Devils Footsteps

    Kinda a short read, But still good none of the less. You've been elevating alot fam. Strucuture was good wich helped the flow, And nice multis usage. Topica is kinda played tho only really bad thing I can say about this, Likin ya vocab too son. Nice drop.

    He'll do it, avoiding a loss, strike a life in the hate he would
    Then sacrafice many to show a strive for the greater good

    ^^Nice

    Wing span length the horizon, his pressence eclisped the sun
    Nightfall during the day, essenced of hell expelled from lungs

    Good imagery.

    Keep up the work fam, Get at me sometime for a collab. - Peace Easy.
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    Re: Walking Before God, In The Devils Footsteps

    ups for feed
    Where the fuck was I fore they found me?
    Floatn in a meadow, dragonflies all around me
    Seeded in a ghetto, smokin cigarellos
    Stress oceans try to drown me
    Walking on water like when Christ did, glidin
    Mic in my plam like the trident in the hand of Poseidon

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    Re: Walking Before God, In The Devils Footsteps

    uppin.
    Where the fuck was I fore they found me?
    Floatn in a meadow, dragonflies all around me
    Seeded in a ghetto, smokin cigarellos
    Stress oceans try to drown me
    Walking on water like when Christ did, glidin
    Mic in my plam like the trident in the hand of Poseidon

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    Re: Walking Before God, In The Devils Footsteps

    Dope. Fav. Bars have already been quoted. Kept pretty consistant throughout the whole thing, good imagery, nice Vocab.
    Internals/Multi's and meta's were good.

    Meh, what the hell...

    He's using strength to defend, for this hellish army is vast
    Rebellous parties would clash, him jealous, hardly will last
    He'll sell'em out if he has, thoughts seem to be favoring satan
    He dreams ways to be tainted, schemes, to slay what he's think'n
    ^That was some good ish too man. Keep up the good work.
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    Re: Walking Before God, In The Devils Footsteps

    thanx for the feed i'll rtf for those who drop feed
    Where the fuck was I fore they found me?
    Floatn in a meadow, dragonflies all around me
    Seeded in a ghetto, smokin cigarellos
    Stress oceans try to drown me
    Walking on water like when Christ did, glidin
    Mic in my plam like the trident in the hand of Poseidon

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    Re: Walking Before God, In The Devils Footsteps

    I like everything about this, except for the format. The way the piece was structured with the camas breaking the center of every line really distracted me, and took away from the fluency of the piece. It sucked, because contectually the piece was pretty on point, but the flow really undermined your fundimentals and left the meat of the piece kind of flowndering. So, overall it was a dope piece, however, I think it would have been times greater if you used a more cohesive rhyme scheme.

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    Hollywood ft. Darfur
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    abstanticollective.

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    Re: Walking Before God, In The Devils Footsteps

    thanx for the feed and i've returned favors to those who left links
    Where the fuck was I fore they found me?
    Floatn in a meadow, dragonflies all around me
    Seeded in a ghetto, smokin cigarellos
    Stress oceans try to drown me
    Walking on water like when Christ did, glidin
    Mic in my plam like the trident in the hand of Poseidon

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    Re: Walking Before God, In The Devils Footsteps

    Dude, We need to collab. What ya say?

    Topic: Devil's Memories
    Lines: 20-30
    Due: Next hour or two.


    as for this peice: Perfect, truely you're best peice yet. The Wording was magnificent. The Flow was very nice and activly smooth. The Structre was nice and basic. The Creativty was amazing. The Imagenation let out a cry; bringing a movi to life. I loved this peice, and will nomionate it for HoF. Keep writing, halla with an answer for the Collab.

    ~Bell.

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    Re: Walking Before God, In The Devils Footsteps

    yep, this was definitely a very good read, it was enjoyable and it had all the factors that make a quality OM. I loved your story line, it was different, you went for a fresh approach and brought a lot to the table along eith it. You had a dope flow which didn't really fall off drastically at any point, which made the peice very fluent and easy to read. i agree that your rhyme scheme was very simple, and definitely not universal enough for this peice, it could have been sooooooooo much better with a more comples rhyme scheme, you had the multies, you had the imagery, and you had basically everything esle too, dope peice my man.

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    Re: Walking Before God, In The Devils Footsteps

    thanx for the feed continue if you can and i'll rtfs shortly
    Where the fuck was I fore they found me?
    Floatn in a meadow, dragonflies all around me
    Seeded in a ghetto, smokin cigarellos
    Stress oceans try to drown me
    Walking on water like when Christ did, glidin
    Mic in my plam like the trident in the hand of Poseidon

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    Re: Walking Before God, In The Devils Footsteps

    nice this was mos def a nice read, let me just get
    the bullshit out the way i liked all your writing
    mechanics so thats a given, what id like to speak
    on is the message, which for me was fucking deep
    i was like at the start of the piece when i saw the
    two wrongs dont make a right quote which ive
    never really made any sense myself, as it seems
    to be the warcry of the person who did the first
    wrong, so i was like i know were this script is
    going , but to my pleasent surprise you put
    the twist in the shit the devils side was like
    yerr normal ruthless behaviour, and i was
    sure i knew what was going to be in the next
    verse naamely the opposite, happy i was wrong
    as his realisation that the only way he can win is
    to fight fire with fire, but ultimately due to his
    own beleif systems he will lose either way
    well thats what i got from this piece fam...
    thanx for the read,woudnt mind knowing your take
    keep rippin those scriptz RTF hit the link...peace

    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=316236

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    Re: Walking Before God, In The Devils Footsteps

    wow....thas has to be the most grateful feed i've recieve in a long time
    Where the fuck was I fore they found me?
    Floatn in a meadow, dragonflies all around me
    Seeded in a ghetto, smokin cigarellos
    Stress oceans try to drown me
    Walking on water like when Christ did, glidin
    Mic in my plam like the trident in the hand of Poseidon

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