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Thread: 99 Leagues Under The Sea ft. Psykosis

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    99 Leagues Under The Sea ft. Psykosis

    Psykosis
    Cornea



    99 league's im about to go 100 nemo thinks he can get deep?
    just like lil john the only time he get's low is in his sleep
    yeah i feel overwhelmed trapped in this fuckin tin can
    as the helm buckles from pressure shit sounds like a bed pan
    i mite go out for a walk take some deep breaths
    the captain slaps me as we pass record depths
    enviroment changing light turns to darkness
    open sea to canyoning my mind can't bear the stress
    this circle of steel wane's sound's become unbearable
    if i survive this ordeal it'd most likly be a miracle
    my liver begins to pain sea salt in my brain
    pluging hole's from the shattered window pane
    the sailor make prayers encompassing my hope
    as the temprature drops deeper, can my body cope?
    my frontal lobe bout to explode
    relisation my life's shorter then a chode
    as it mound's an begins to stack
    everything fade my world turns black
    i could never get that deep again pulling back deep breath my head blank
    fuck that im never ever putting my face back in the fish tank




    Chemicals chain as the toxins in my brain make me cope
    React as I try to subside the attacks from the harsh facts
    Swung around flailing, I hit bottoms up, but I stay afloat
    I crash my head down now; my ears sound with hard blasts
    Looking out towards land, I bask in the moment and weep
    Lost a wife to the sea, but the again it was my own fault
    Slurping the water, gasping for air as I plunge down deep
    With my lips chapped and cut, I am burdened by the salt
    Kicks now became weaker, faintly I grew tired and slothy
    The fish almost seemed to slither like serpents even then
    As if the demons themselves were there trying to stop me
    Knowing any further would be the beginning and the end
    Weightless; imploding with fear as I exploded with panic
    Love or hate? Up or down? Gravity stay the hell away from me
    Life's not to be wasted, but how's life down here managed?
    I gave up on her and so now I give up on this life blatantly
    Depths rise as I fall progeesiely toawrds the dark abyss
    Wondering why I had even wanted to have ever started this
    Wishing icould swim, but I'm losing weight with the faster fall
    Hush now child and relax for heaven is not so far after all

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    Last edited by Chris White; November 3rd, 2006 at 04:06 PM

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    ok nevermind...uppin
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    uppin this shit...and I have one link up there now....I'm gettying the other now...CMON don't sleep on this

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    wow...a dope peice being slept on like always...the first verse was alright the rhyming and vocab was pretty simple most of the time and had nothing that stood out expect a bad strutre..but the flow was nice and had some real good lines that caught my eye that was it...Cornea came real dope with you're verse i was feelin it.. wasnt to simple nor complex but i like the way you laid you're verse out with A-B-A-B i tried before and just couldnt do it..you're verse flowed real nice and had some real good lines then some meh lines...but i was feelin the creative of this peice deff not played topic at all. hit the sig.
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    Man this was a hot piece....like dj said it was pretty simple for the first verse and to me the flow was a little choppy at sometimes...you get to the second verse and you include everything in their and it's amazing and it makes me feel like I'm reading a real story.

    Nice work on this piece man.


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    thnaks guys...uppin this again...cmon RB

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    uppin again...you fuckers want feed, but you can't feed...I don't get it...

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    wow...i enjoyed reading this...the imagery and detail made it feel as if i was losing my own breath..lol..but yes the first verse i wasnt really feeling as much as the second...but then agian that's what made this piece decent..nice shyt son...looking forward to reading more from you...rtf on hell's angel's plzz link in sig...gettin slept on badly...appreciate it thanks

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    Hey Feed Here!

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    this is really sad...good collabs get slept on...
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    this was a dope collab. I liked the topic especially, I don't think I've ever seen it done before. I also liked how there were two different rhyme schemes, it worked well. Psykosis had some basic rhymes, but the verses both flowed well and had good imagery and emotion. The two styles complimented each other very nicely, and it was a very cohesive piece. Overall dope read

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    thanks last up

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    fucka last up UPPIN THIS SHYT

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    140 looks and 13 replies...WOWZERS!

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