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    Polaroid catastrophe



    Polaroid catastrophe- Picture imperfect.

    Makeshift wings sore into flight of disease,
    Take to the skies, only to slice the ground,
    With a ripe mind plucked from sanity’s tree.

    Part One- The way I feel.
    Sliding down a razor blades tender kiss to
    My acidic veins; screams led, blood tagged
    Along for the ride, impure thoughts lodge
    Themselves into a cradle of ivory skull,
    Writing ‘not alone’ on the tapestry of love,
    Only to slice it into a million pieces again.
    My insecurities make acquaintance with
    Memories of a deviant’s juice of injustice;
    Depression seeps in through cracks in
    The child hood picture frames,
    Plastering blistered love to the minds trip.

    The razor assists me in picking myself
    Apart again, along side me as tears
    Evaporate into septic eye shadowed lids.
    Kamikaze teardrops are welded from
    Sparks of life; only to drown in my
    Lifeless wounds; as I sip deep from a
    Cups sharp rim, Sleepless starvation
    Settles in to Sabotage my suicidal serenity,
    & To forever liquidise sanity into a bleeding
    Shadow of a former self, a self of love.

    I hear the clock trying to negotiate a deal with time,
    The hour hand strikes my heart for another
    Beating drum roll of stampeding numbers

    Part 2- what do you know of why I feel?
    Oppressed by the very being delivered to protect.
    Driven into a disorder of insecure collaborations
    With hatred and love, both intermingled with
    Fear; breathing semen through a throat of
    Abuse, six years of age yet in a playground of
    Bed covers, stained covers at that.
    Banished to mentally tortured acidic screams,
    Touched by cloud fluffed pillow cases,
    As the ‘game’ continued deep into the night,
    Moon light came to say its hello’s then only to
    Bed its goodbyes, ‘until tomorrow’ he sang.

    A kiss goodnight would linger towards a
    Sleepless night, my goodnight lullaby,
    Well, it was merely pillow talk to a Childs
    Inexperienced knowledge. Subjected to
    Baby blues, I guess love came at a price!
    Deprived of an innocent embrace,
    A hug of PURITY; glazed eyes of
    Gazing thus gaping heart felt glances.
    Yet I was landed with a violent drunk
    Deviant of an impure, immoral fucking rapist

    You made me what I am; YOU did it…
    DADDY!

    Part three: Tears fall to the clown’s irises
    Farewell sweet sanity, maybe we shall reunite
    In a future life, it’s been nice knowing you
    But your time has expired, no further use of
    You is needed; burn the embers of suicidal
    Tear drops, they also have long surpassed
    Their value. Life shall birth death,
    In the womb of flickering clocks,
    Designed to collect the hours and make them
    Its own; invented to invest in an inventory of
    Insane illness’s irrational insight

    GOODBYE DADDY! YOU RAISED ME WELL!

    Silence violins, I don’t need your sympathy
    All I wish for is a moment in time to die,
    A second to drift away to the screams of past heritage
    But leave the leaves of lost love lingering in
    The hearts of the lost evergreens pulse,
    Fix me a drink for courage, sip with me
    In denial, as I find homage in the bottom of
    A glass; cut me a shard for later use,
    I guess the train has arrived, take me home.

    GOODBYE DADDY! YOU RAISED ME WELL!

    silence at last


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    Last edited by Poeta Demonio; February 23rd, 2010 at 10:09 PM
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    C'mon people, i know it's a long piece, but give it a little thought
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    Upping, A little feed would be nice people. Thanks
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    PWEEASSSE LOL.

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    this was sum dope ass shit. the pic drew me. please tell me that wasnt ur arm?...but the poem was on point. from the imagery to the diction from the wordplay to the metaphors. everything was on point. worthy of H0F for sure. i cant believe that people are sleeping on this
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    No, that wasn't my arm lol.

    And thank you.

    Appreciate you taking the time to read.
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    no problem...PM when u make another one
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    the fuck @ this being posted a week ago, and only having one peice of feed, which was left like 3 minutes ago lol, anyway. Nice peice dude, I really enjoyed it, it's been so long, too long in fact, since I have read a peice from you, you need to get active again lol. But yea I felt that the picture tied in really well with this peice, and added greatly to the over all atmosphere or feel of the peice. What really stuck out to me most about this peice was the emotion, I felt very strong emotion in this peice, and it may or may not have something to do with what you have beeing going through, although I think it might be, but that isn't for here lol. Nice use of metaphors right here, you had some great meta's that really made the peice come to life for me, and you know I love almost all of your peices...so you won't be surprised when I say that I love this one too, although it was quite a long read, it was easily worth it, and you didn't fall off anywhere in this poem. Nice shit dude, now get your ass active again lol

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    Still only two people have fed ...

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    That pictures always makes me shudder a little when I look at it. This was a nicely written piece. It was very up to par, and a current and present piece. The emotion in this was bound to be the starliner of the whole thing, and it was. Good vocabulary and an understandable yet abstract vibe lacing this whole thing. I think the length was the major reasoning in poor feed, but I think length sometimes is good if it isn't taken to an extreme extent. I appreciate you taking the time and writing this man. Good job

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    did this make H0F
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    Yeah i know this probaly doesnt need anymore feed, but I admire this piece alot. The vocab was well shown for this type of theme, and the imagery was very strong and vivid. Made me quench my eyes alittle bit in some parts, which i find facinating; because i can feel what you are trying to say in this piece.

    "Beating drum roll of stampeding numbers"

    I felt those lines the hardest, felt so freakin good lol.

    You really have great talent for words, and i'll be reading many of your other work.
    Great piece.

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    Quote Originally Posted by Hearts.
    C'mon people, i know it's a long piece, but give it a little thought
    this shit made me taer up in the eyes reading it,no it wasn't because of the mood it was beacuse of how interesting it was i love story telling like poems this had very good vocabulary and emotion was over whelming omg i loved this ish,i was able to fully visualize every thing that was happening its an shame i didn't see this in the past sorry,dope poem i hope i get to that status soon.

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