A Thugs Wish ( A Must Read )

[C.Wrighter]

A Thugs Wish just to make it to heaven
A Thugs Wish just to stay Alive
A Thugs Wish just to live and say good-bye before he die



A Thugs Wish just to make it out the gutter....
cause niggaz in the hood only know drugs bakein soda..n butter
bread in sandwitch meat..carrie'n heat
chewin ur finger nails cause you starve'n to eat
summertime thugs outside no A/C you die'n of heat
everyday like halloween suck in the streets
lyric's mean shit when you struggle'n for keeps
niggaz riden thro 6 or 7 deep
1 car people lookin like thes nigga look like mexicans
........they way they packed in the jeep
A Thugs Wish just to make it out the's streets
cause its like a action Movie they why it be


A Thugs Wish just to make it thro without hitt'n a cell
A Thugs Wish just to stay Alive...without makeing bell
A Thugs Wish just to live and say good-bye before he die...n hell


A Thugs Wish live'n pass 25 not hitt'n a cell
cause Emotions ova run lookin at ur daughter
...through a picture of you sitt'n in hell
plus no respect when you tryna keep fagits off ur tale
in the way life is know A Thugs Wish is like Damn!!!
..................i hope this niggaz dont tell
cause the feds is watchin us creep
black in the streets....Reach in ur pocket in you dead u see
tryna look decent for a job interview and you aint had none at all
just got off the streets and put on your cloths aint even change'd ur drolls
just tryna get some cash to buy your daughter some dolls



A Thug Wish to live through a 9 to 5
A Thugs Wish just to live and say good-bye before he die
Betta yet...A Thugs Wish just to stay Alive



Links

http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=312481
http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=292407


i wanna do a part 2 but i want 2 people to feature on it

[Spoken]

this was a nuce drop...good flow mettas and multies in there...you got creative with this piece.....you could have not made your strucure like thag..next time try a new one..other than that..this was a nice drop

[hacker]

good j-o-b man nice flow and keep going man its was 7/10
ur bra. k-i-d

[C.Wrighter]

thanks peeps

[Bing]

the metas was pretty coo', had some real decent multis, aint gonna front, the whole thung'gangsta thing aint really appeal to me, but your drop had some real coo' creativeness and imagery in it . . .

niggaz riden thro 6 or 7 deep
1 car people lookin like thes nigga look like mexicans
........they way they packed in the jeep

lol that was hella funny, coo' line


an yo if them 2 places aint filled yet im down to get on it

[C.Wrighter]

Ok then ^^^ hit me up with ur verse and i tell you whats up

just use like same format i used when thinkin of ur verse

[Truth Iscariot]

nice C, it was short but nice, good title, nice topic, good structure, good vocab, it is one of the best i have read recently yo thats a good thing i have read some really good ones lately,good multis, you were repeating some of your rhymes wich threw me off for a sec but this was a good original piece keep it up C mad props on this piece

if you have time hit up my Om in the sig

[C.Wrighter]

^^^ i'mma check it out ...and thanks for the feed

[Tragedian.]

pretty nice...one of you're best so far...this actually caught my eye...it pretty much matches thoughts of a thug...you caught there emotion really good and i was feelin it..it was alright on topic...didnt do anything to creative....flow was nice through out the whole drop...vocab was a bit simple not much parts of it were complex at all...though this was good check out brotherly love and leave some feed keep up.

[C.Wrighter]

word imma check out urs and truths know

[DaMicSnatcher]

this was a nice piece....i especially loved the reptition of the "thugs' wish" part...it had emotion and it flowed well...i enjoyed it immensly, keep writin

[C.Wrighter]

^^^^thanks Damic

[C.Wrighter]

uppin tryna get a little mo feed i promiseto Rtf the feed just drop links

[Atti]

alright, to put it nicely - no one cares. when you write text it's a whole different standard of what to accomplish. no one particularly wants to hear about the things that work on audio tracks, with thugs and heat and niggaz ... textual writing/open mics are more about storytelling, detail, and depth. there are so many ways to put across what you want to say and what you've done here is picked the most generic and underdeveloped way to do so. strive for a concept and storyline, creat a character and make a story about this life that you've just described here ... but just go into great detail to paint pictures and really involve the reader instead of just giving vague generalizations you know? your basics aren't bad - flow and structurings, so really you just need to break out of the obvious and start creating works that are more individualist and creative. so, keep your sense of self, keep the ghetto lifestyle a main point of your pieces ... just make sure you're doing it differently than any predasessor has. keep at it.

if you would, Abstanti Collective's newest collab ...
"Anathema"

[916_mami_510]

this is 1 Of the best i've seen sO far..
i think u captured mOst Of what a thug's life really is and the true meaning Of the definitiOn "thug"
Overall i give u 2 thumbs up lOl