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Thread: The Streets We Walk

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    The Streets We Walk

    The Streets We Walk

    the city's coursing veins the streets
    you could feel the tension like heat
    only 100 feet across from each other
    cars and alley ways as cover
    a gentle late evening mist hovers
    the vibrating beat of feet increasing
    the hour of moon has risin for feasting
    soon blood would feed the storm drains
    killing in the name of in vain
    a stain on so many young souls
    tainted to remain in lost control

    a savage demon lives among them
    ravages there dreams at the stem
    send the wrong mixed messages
    bends and contradicts
    with venom dripping from there souls
    the children of the night patrol
    stroll the dim lit avenues
    blood on there knives the only revenue
    few see throught the built fasad
    each night they pray to god
    that the killing will some day stop
    that the bodies will no longer drop

    The east

    A mix of half-breeds mostly white
    a few black among them in the strife
    they fought with club and knife
    slice to kill with only a few guns
    the family ties run deep in these sons
    asleep at the rise of the sun...
    they vow a brotherhood
    beside till death they all stood
    they could turn there back any moment
    but that was for the heart to decide the decent
    and they knew that lonely road
    all too well there old home... shown
    in memory ever lasting images flash
    and now they stand united on nights gone rash

    the west

    All black with a Mexican here and there
    suspected to be east they didn't care
    a steady glare of a predator on every man
    they stand staggered only held by a clan
    though strong they lack companionship
    dog eat dog relationships
    they each had a gun... though numbering less
    the brood never forgot the past they where blessed
    or cursed... to fight there rivals
    the streets a place of survival
    they didn't know how it all began
    but now the blood steadily ran

    a storm of shots echo off buildings
    it begins a tantrum of death reigns
    gains momentum and never seems to end
    as if time itself could stop and bend
    angels don't come often.. hell they send
    souls never to be mend, Satan taken
    becoming a tortured forsaken
    today the west lost less
    but nothing has transgressed
    east still outnumbers and slowly advances
    the dance of pistols at every glance
    a trance holds the people not knowing of peace
    because...
    When West Meets East, The Rest Will Cease.

    Tonight i watched my brother die
    not a clan member my own blood i cry
    with a beaten sigh, i lift my head
    the rain streaming away tears bled
    he always said he would fall for us
    but trust was never broken or rust
    with a gust of breath i remeber...
    as a renegade took him and dismemberd
    with machety he hacked my brothers arms
    i was meters away unable to undo harm
    eventually it was all over
    i slit the other mans throat
    spit on his corpse as rage words i spoke.
    holding my brother in my arms
    his spirit faded as he whisperd
    "i died for hate when i should be living for love"
    after that moment he was taken above
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    too long
    good topic
    flow was off
    basic rhymes

    overall average

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    very nice drop here homie...i didnt see anything majorly wrong..you had some off lines..but made up for it the lines after...had some really good flow..pretty long but had a nice strutre for a smooth read..some good multies..but couldve been more..the topic was alright i gotta say its kinda played but you kept your drop on point and pretty creative with this kinda topic...keep up homie..hit up an om of mine please.
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    yeah good content twista.flow was in need of some serious attention tho coz it diddnt have much impression in that sense to me. but story was unfold str8 and to the epoint so i did feel certain aspects of this joint f'sho. and it had mos def coo poetic imagery. which cud b sharpened sum mo i guess. so


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