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Thread: The 7 Sins: Gluttony

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    The 7 Sins: Gluttony


    The 7 Sins: Gluttony


    Client as Gina Gluttony, Verse 2
    Pakaveli as narrator, verses 1 & 3

    “Fresh Delivery for Miss G”

    Mounds of ripe fruits cover the rugged tables
    Converted stables store the canisters of maple
    Sweet glistening honey drips down the cables
    Carrying down edible delicacies fit for fables
    Rationed food is an idea to absurd to think
    With the added distraction of chocomel drinks
    The rice hurries down and jumps in her throat
    While the wine gushes down the trachea boat

    “Godly marvels let me adore you”

    “A need for everlasting sensations contributes to gluttony
    Parasites infest in my tummy forcing me to stay hungry
    The taste of chicken is so juicy; my taste buds sweat and melt
    As the vanilla ice cream is digested its artic presence is felt
    These parasites keep eating away, making food my infection
    As a child I felt rejection but always found food to show affection
    Even if I was a parasite free, I’d still have a connection with food
    Because theirs a rush in stuffing my face like walking around nude
    Without food I’d be crude and rude, I can’t live without its sensation
    Adam and Eve paved the way so it’s only right I give into temptation”

    “The food for thought”

    Rushing to finish her meal she grabs the plate
    Slates of watermelons only stir to levitate
    Her hunger to devour more got her hexed
    That caused her to eat the chicken unchecked
    Gobbling down the leg then the breast part
    Allowed the rogue bone to pierce her heart
    There she laid, the victim of her own hunger
    To gluttonous to even realise the sorry blunder


    RIP Lady Gina Gluttony
    The children will enjoy the foods.


    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=306906
    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=305341


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    the vanilla ice cream is digested its artic presence is felt
    These parasites keep eating away, making food my infection
    As a child I felt rejection but always found food to show affection
    Even if I was a parasite free, I’d still have a connection with food
    Because theirs a rush in stuffing my face like walking around nude
    Without food I’d be crude and rude, I can’t live without its sensation
    Adam and Eve paved the way so it’s only right I give into temptation

    this part i really felt this part stuck out to me man againt another nice part damn your shit as very desriptive mann if you ever stop writing imma kick your ass cuz you have a nice talent mann this piece was very visionary mann i could visual my self in this topic nice piece bra once again
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    Quote Originally Posted by Xplict_talent
    the vanilla ice cream is digested its artic presence is felt
    These parasites keep eating away, making food my infection
    As a child I felt rejection but always found food to show affection
    Even if I was a parasite free, I’d still have a connection with food
    Because theirs a rush in stuffing my face like walking around nude
    Without food I’d be crude and rude, I can’t live without its sensation
    Adam and Eve paved the way so it’s only right I give into temptation

    this part i really felt this part stuck out to me man againt another nice part damn your shit as very desriptive mann if you ever stop writing imma kick your ass cuz you have a nice talent mann this piece was very visionary mann i could visual my self in this topic nice piece bra once again
    Give Client porps for that, as that is his part.

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    This made me hungry.. lol

    Nice vocabulary. I liked Paks flow, Client's was diffrent though. Pak, you're was very well written, flowed precisely, and made me hungry. Client, you're was more like a rant, but still flowed pretty nice, didn't make me as hungry, but it was definatly a good verse. Pak, I think you are at your peak. Keep writing, I love it. Client, you still are elevating, and getting better every time you write, so therefore, keep writing, I look to see you in the HOF in the future.

    Good job guys.
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    Thanks appreciate the comments, stay up.

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    ^^^

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    I'm guessing you saw the Court TV movie with Brad Pitt and Morgan Freeman.

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    this was very interesting i did something like this awhile back and it was a lot of fun for sure good read kept me intune the whole time which was good. Creative nice vocab as well liking the narrating and the imagrey im with Jon Jon makes you want to eat some food which is a good thing

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    Quote Originally Posted by P A S S I V E
    I'm guessing you saw the Court TV movie with Brad Pitt and Morgan Freeman.

    I've seen that, but that aint whree i'm pulling this from na mean..Thanks for the comments Tim.

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    ^^^

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    uppity up.
    Kiss me through the camera lens.
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    Wow pretty good Pak & Client I have been seeing some cool shit from u two man damn I'll be leaving feed on all of your 7 Sins OM's Pak and this is the first and I must say its pretty dope man great imagery concept is cool and a very good chance to put some creativty in there in which you guys did very good I really liked the pictures incldiong for even a more clear vision although the shit was quiet vivid throughout this whole peice and the structure of it was good cool multi here and there but thats what was you guys' weakest aspect of the whole peice but you guys still made up for it so don't worry I also like the vocabulary choose on this peice,OM's are a bit like college papers if you keep writing the same words over and over it seems boring and bland nothing live and divine at all but I'd say you brang a great deal of passion into this nice peice guys...keep dropping dope(although ur leaving Pak )
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    Thanks don't worry i'll have left quite a bit of oms before i leave.

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