Nightmares

[Spoken]

Nightmares

Sweating, my heart beating rapidly and so off beat
Woke up horrified and jump directly to my feet
Scared out of my mind was this a dream or what
Seeing something so horrific was this a thought
No, this was a nightmare that I might have died in
Trying to wake myself up, trying to fight it
Calling out Jesus name to come save me from this
Preying to angels and asking to wake up was my wish
What have I done wrong to deserve a dream so unreal
Being somewhere like another world what is the deal
God please help me, this is something absolutely new
How can I save myself from this what exactly shall I do
Ive never been so scared in my life, what I saw was just
It was just not meant to be seen, once i first saw that dust
Then dead bodies all over the ground, they looked like rust
Then they woke up like they wanted revenge, it was unjust
What shall I do is the devil after me, jesus where are you
They’re all piled over me, im terrified, I have no clue what to do
I don’t believe what I saw, was that just the devil at the side
Pulls out a knife and disappears right off to the side to hide
Crying and pushing my way out at the same time tryin to escape
It was like I was being attacked, killed and then raped
Blinked for a second the devil is in my face laughing then lifts his hand
Strikes the knife to my face I close my eyes, waits, did it land
Open my eyes back up and im in my bed covers over my head
Oh my god this was just a nightmare, thank god I aint dead

[Spoken]

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show....php?p=4762501
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=302888

[Soule]

this was dope. Liked the wordplay and the structre. Loved the flw and story. Had a crush on the creativty and imagenary. And as amazed to see that you had what it takes to stay dope unlike most former dope topical heads that lost their skill. 9-10. Keep it up. Hit up Voodoo.

[The Vortex]

yeah this sum tite writin form n flow f'sho............ had plenty of poetic rythm to it as well, and sum smooth rolling wordplays gave the lines life and feel.. story rolled well in its structure and had sum cool and constant imagery . i'm not too sure or impressed about the ending tho.its just i seen so many people ending joints with "it was all a dream" in this case a nightmare. even tho that was the case it being a nightmare. it could of ended on a more dramatic or original note............ all in all had plenty of clarity and inagination was dope and wrote tite

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