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    40 Cal. Ripken
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    Renovate.

    it's the new season.

    im the new reason, so everyone pay attention to who's speaking
    you dude's eating mighta built the house, but the roof's leaking
    the walls wobbly, yall steal clappers never seen a hawk, probaly
    law watchin me, most of yall REAL rappers, probaly never saw poverty
    better start gettin yours ..dont even know what they spit in this for
    it just isnt raw when all you need is a credit card to get in the door
    i want mine kid, wins low but sure enough ...im gonna up my wins
    the windows are boarded up, can someone please let some sunshine in
    please let someone sign him, cos' i rep hard speaking
    they take me as being shaky, just cos' the steps are creeking
    if it aint about money and hoes, its about the coke, weed, bottles
    but that shit is honestly getting old, so i hope we re-model
    and talib, common, mos ..nope, im not even reppin these dudes
    cos' i dont really lisetn to'em but when i do, they get repetive too.
    but word is, you need to stop serving the dudes that need rock
    grab a real hammer, some nails ..and nail'em in some sheet rock
    so beat asses, send the rest of your best heat at us
    ..save the best for now and get the rest of the leaks patched up
    cos' we dont gotta rebuild, and thats something im quick to say
    that shit is gay cos' what hapened before us makes this what it is today
    1/2 of The Hearty Boys

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    im the new reason, so everyone pay attention to who's speaking
    you dude's eating mighta built the house, but the roof's leaking
    the walls wobbly, yall steal clappers never seen a hawk, probaly
    law watchin me, most of yall REAL rappers, probaly never saw poverty


    if it aint about money and hoes, its about the coke, weed, bottles
    but that shit is honestly getting old, so i hope we re-model


    ^stand out lines^ the rest was good... decent read, nice play
    overall flow was good and easy to read... got it goin on

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    THIS WAS A GOOD READ. IT WAS A NICE SOLID VERSE. GOOD VOCAB, FLOW, STRUCTURE, AND WORPLAY. I THINK YOU COULD WORK A LITTLE ON METAPHORS AND CREATIVITY. OVERALL I LIKED THIS. GOOD JOB

    MY FAVORITE LINES WERE

    Quote Originally Posted by Mets
    but word is, you need to stop serving the dudes that need rock
    grab a real hammer, some nails ..and nail'em in some sheet rock

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    I completely agreed with Stay-Z on which lines i thought were the really good ones, that made you stop and read them again because they were so lyrically enjoyable and came together very smoothly. nothing else was as good as those, but the entire thing was solid and I thought very well done.

    Also thanks for keeping it to a 16-bar kinda thing, I hate the long drawn out things on this board sometimes, you approached your topic and summed it up pretty quickly. hope to see more of ya.

    A.I.

    "She managed to extract from the restriction itself a further delicate thought, like good poets whom the tyranny of rhyme forces into the discovery of their finest lines."


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    40 Cal. Ripken
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    i keeps it simple and to the point, thanks fellas. leave some links and i'll hit it up.
    1/2 of The Hearty Boys

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