Back In Time ( Memories )

[J.J]

{ HOOK }
Theres so many memories in life that I wanna get back to
I dont wanna go on with life but oh well, i have to
It would take weeks to write all these times wit a paper and pen
I wish i could go back in time and relive all these moments again

{ Verse 1 }
Im in Middle School now, but i feel like goin back to Elementary
Its only been two years but damn, it feels like a century
You have no idea how much those moments had meant to me
Life is full of memories but i guess thats how its meant to be
Bad times come but good times come in greater amounts
Im 13, but I dont give a fuck about how that sounds
I always find myself thinking about the past, but never
The future, 'cause memories are known to last forever
I remember even the moments i dont want to remember
And i do it everyday, every year, from January to December
My middle school is the school that im at right now
But elementary school is where my hearts at right now
So right now, no matter what you wanna think or say
Im not changin my mind so dont bother tryin to turn me away

{ HOOK }
Theres so many memories in life that I wanna get back to
I dont wanna go on with life but oh well, i have to
It would take weeks to write all these times wit a paper and pen
I wish i could go back in time and relive all these moments again

{ Verse 2 }'
If I was an inventor, my very first invention
would be a time machine, so I wouldn't have to mention
These memories, but instead i could relive them
But thats impossible, so you must think that i should forget them
Like times like my first day of school and first friends and when i met them
How can I forget them, when they're the ones who keep my life together
Theres nothing better than knowing that someone always has your back
In fact, let me tell you somethin'......................................... .
To me, thats my friends and family, i wouldnt trade them for nothin'

{ HOOK }
Theres so many memories in life that I wanna get back to
I dont wanna go on with life but oh well, i have to
It would take weeks to write all these times wit a paper and pen
I wish i could go back in time and relive all these moments again



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[Big C.]

eh. this was good. i liked it....topic was interesting.
flow was nice throughout..i felt the emotion throughout.
good rhymes and nice multies. overall this was good
I liked it..

my fav lines were

Bad times come but good times come in greater amounts
Im 13, but I dont give a fuck about how that sounds
I always find myself thinking about the past, but never
The future, 'cause memories are known to last forever
I remember even the moments i dont want to remember
And i do it everyday, every year, from January to December

^that was tight

keep it up.

[J.J]

thanx man i appreciate the feed, uppin for sum more

[J.J]

up.....

[J.J]

uppin...

[The Apocalypse]

shit wasnt bad
...nice flow going on in there.....nice wordplay.......................................ove rall really nice shit mann

keep it up .................

[J.J]

thanx man, uppin

[Illus']

Ok simple piece...

considering that your only 13 gives little reason
anyways not going to say use a better flow scheme
cause to behonest this felt more like a poem is my
opinion.... Your content could bet better if you re worded
your sentences showing more passion by using better
vocabulary to express yourself or if not vocabulary use better
word order, which can be hard to do but with practice it is
very possible I am trying to accomplish it still and I;ve been
writing for awhile.

You stayed on topic which is always good ok structure nice
and neat easy read. All I can say is keep writing and reading
real good work to help you elevate.


peace..

[Kidanimus]

Yea This Peice Was An Interesting Read, Nice Topic(original)..i Like Your Use Of Wordplay, You Got That On Point..emotion In This Piece Was Also Ite, But For Me It Was The Flow That Impressed Me The Most, I Got Put You On The Game Instrumental Playing And It Flowed Perfect With It( Probably Not The Right Track To Put It Too Though)..but Yea, You Should Lock This Down On Audio..

Overall 7:5-10..(nice Work)

[J.J]

thanx to both of u for the feed and advice, k this is my last up...

[J.J]

fuck it, everyone sleeps on oms and everyone over ups so its not just me..uppin

[J.J]

wow this is unbelievable, quit sleepin, uppin for the last time i give up