Cycle of Hatred.

[Nique.]

Cycle of Hatred


The new `ism.
A taboo of new wisdom in an old abused system
Alluding to cruel visions on a pool of due victims
And the intuitions of few lead to miscues that brew in them
Misuse of truth in them. Sequel of mockery
People are property. We're all equal, but not really
Arguably--still the hint in the sense of skin color
But it's him and his lover that offends the content in which governs,
Our extent as civilized. Our sparing of gratitude,
Parted avenues in the norm deem 'barbaric' altitudes
Where pragmatic views in society hinders the soviets
Rendering ignorance disclosed in whats gender approriate
Catch a glimpse of the phoniest. Their improbable antics
Where mere attraction is psychological, neurological damage
Their hero's toppled and managed. Determined by rival seekers
Klan members conversative, murderers, and bible beaters
Resurfaced in higher regions. What's better to come,
Where hypocrisy and democracy come together as one
We've dreaded this sum. In a path who's to blame,
"We've let the niggers slip away, fags can't do the same"
Crafted ruthless claims. A submissive extent
Reminiscent of lynched killings with malicious intent
A predicted offense. The demented type
Who let us witness the stripping of their amendment rights
An extensive fight. Forcing our peers to react
To avoid the fear, tears, 400 years of relapse
It appears we are back to finding a reason,
Why individuals are still constantly dying for freedom
Coinciding with demons who likes aspiring,
The shame in those who don't meet life's requirements
So I desire when. . .we stop a neglected cause
Whip lashed denied papers, shackled rejected laws
Baffled, regrets, and loss. Ain't many ways to stay tough
When we don't have another Feb., 28 days of make-up
Cuz being gay's rough and we're supposed to pursue action
When hate's being dressed up and Jim Crow's in new fashion,
Memo to the few asking why do we still struggle,
And lie in the stench of hate, abide by the years troubles
Our fears cuddle with hatred. Unfavored distractions
Psychotic decisions and unstable reactions
A fatal attraction. It's bold and near vibrant
Can't deal with the new, when the old is still thriving

-Nique.

[Nique.]

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...40#post4531440

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...22#post4531422

[Philly B. Sparkz]

This was real nice it had nice vocab and multied creativeness with the twist of emotion and storytelling....i liked this it was easy to flow off of and really understandible....
Keep it up!

RTF on the OM's in my SIG!

[Nique.]

Thx. Rise.

[Nique.]

This has to be the laziest site.

[Lurid]

The flo was obviously good and consistant which was obviously done on purpose so good job with that , the emotion was there and i can feel where ur coming from but it didnt seem like u were really comin from the heart so it didnt seem like it was personal, the piece was long and the structure kinda made it dull and i honestly didnt feel like reading the entire thing. the vocab was decent but u should work on more idioms and metaphors aswell as some better and more in depth concepts and avenues to look at ur topic

plez leave feed on my new OM its called I have a choice

http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthre...71#post4534471

[Julius Caesar]

Sup Niquitty?.

This was a good piece. The flow was on point, multi's were good. The vocabulary you used was good, I felt that you over-used them though. The approach was cool, relaxed and laid back, at first you was talking about 'black vs white', and then switched up to 'religious vs gays'..wasn't merley a twist, but it a dope transation. Concept was creative. The Imaginary was complex, but vivid. There's no character but the 'narrator' and I felt his/her emotion, I felt where his/her is coming from. Dope.

This was decent, never read your writtens, this is my first time. This kinda gave me some inspiration for RSTL.

[I Am Unreal.]

Fucking nominated 'cause this was fucking dope. The intro was kinda weak, I was thinking... "What's going on.......?" But as I read on it enraptured me to continue. The piece was really insightful and the ending capped it off beautifully. I thought the way you worded it was perfect too, insightful flow reminiscent of Nas.. I thought, anyway.

Fav lines:

Cycle of Hatred


Resurfaced in higher regions. What's better to come,
Where hypocrisy and democracy come together as one
We've dreaded this sum. In a path who's to blame,
"We've let the niggers slip away, fags can't do the same"
Crafted ruthless claims. A submissive extent
Reminiscent of lynched killings with malicious intent
A predicted offense. The demented type
Who let us witness the stripping of their amendment rights

Our fears cuddle with hatred. Unfavored distractions
Psychotic decisions and unstable reactions
A fatal attraction. It's bold and near vibrant
Can't deal with the new, when the old is still thriving

-Nique.

sexxy.

[Nique.]

Thanks. And Julius, the entire piece was about homosexuality and how it's the new ism, which really means it's the new racism, which also means it's homophobia. Maybe my vocabulary was a little too advanced, but if you pay attention to the lines a bit more I talked about it the entire time. Thanks for the critique and criticism. Appreciate it.

[ExDaGawd]

Bananas, Always droppin gems.

[I Am Unreal.]

one more thing........................













































lets collab.

[Facts Machine]

This was def original with some insane rhyme skills in it. You had a great amount of multies and internals put together and made it all make sense, nothing forceful. This is obviously a very controversial subject but is rarely used in hip-hop which disapoints me cuz it's a big deal you know. What i like about this song is that it supports the gay audience who is often rejected in hip-hop and another thing i liked is that straight folks who support gay rights can relate to this. So this piece shows you're open minded and you got the courage to fight for something you believe is right. So yeah basically the concept and rhyming was all dope so yeah def worth a nomination.

Return favor to the link in my sig "is it a sin to kill an insect?"

[$pitacular]

wow. you touched on a very real subject in an entirely new way. one thing, though, is from the perspective it is written, I would assume you are gay yourself, which if you are, is of no concern to me - however, if you are not, you were somehow able to put yourself in their shoes to the point that you moved people with what you wrote.

bravo.

pz

[Nique.]

Since I personally believe that homosexuality is the new racism, it touches me on every level possible simply because I'm African American. I think it's unfortunate and hypocritical that we're putting a certain group of minorities into the same situation that my ancestors had to go through. And that blacks still have to go through today. Sexual orientation and skin color go hand in hand, so that was basically my point. Anyone could write this (whether they be white, black, straight, or not) and have that much emotion packed into it.

It depends on your character, your personal opinion on the topic, and your ability to write. Don't assume.

[James,]

I really enjoyed reading this piece, you had some very talented rhymes, you had a very good use of words, and vocab, the whole piece flowed exceptionally, it was a very original topic, you kept me wanting to read the piece, I didn't get bored at any point you really kept my attention, your rhymes though really stood out to me the most...great drop man...

If you could please return the favor
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=295280
thanks