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  1. May 23rd, 2006, 08:11 AM #1
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    from tha heart

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    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...43#post4497043


    God speaks to use every day but do we dare listen
    sirens muffle tha message corruption impares vision
    temptation drives wishes while goals get distorted
    on a mission for this dough so quickly goals aborted
    then u're mission thwarted.....u left with nothin
    and tha only green u got is tha green u puffin
    and u back to hustlin tryin ta make a meal
    gettin back on tha grind dreamin for a deal
    so do u feel me...can u hear me
    I'm tryin ta lift tha spirits of tha weak and weary
    eyes teary from tha stress of livin a life restless
    missin out on tha fun cuz u not on funs guestlist
    nested in tha ghetto livin in tha project
    keep u're mind right don't lose u're ghetto logic
    u can knock it but in tha end
    u gonna look back and c tha streets were u're best friend
    lessons of survival lessons of death
    lessons of hell heavens tha only lesson left
    deaf to tha teachins deaf to tha preachins
    deaf to appraisal...all I hear is screachin
    leachin to tha fact that I need tha lord in my life
    leachin to tha fact tha I need to pray at night
    Jesus Christ I love u u're my savior
    spittin this verse was a new satisfyin flavor
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  2. May 23rd, 2006, 12:58 PM #2
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  3. May 23rd, 2006, 01:19 PM #3
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    yo this was good really good flow and consistent with it to great job on that the concept was fine and i could see some more poetic lines in there which is always good vocab was decent i think it was better towards the middle the wordplay was nice good usage so overall good peice keep it up
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  4. May 23rd, 2006, 03:58 PM #4
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  5. May 23rd, 2006, 04:17 PM #5
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  6. May 24th, 2006, 01:00 PM #6
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  7. May 24th, 2006, 06:23 PM #7
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    flow was good continuesly throughout....good job on that....rhymes were very good and same with the multies you had....topic was intereesting..i liked it...overall this was a nice read..i enjoyed it..keep it up man...peace~
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  8. May 24th, 2006, 06:27 PM #8
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    rhyme scheme was ill...wordplay was ill...i liked tha multis you used...you had some good complexity in it..all in all this was a very ill piece....a little short but you stayed on point through out tha whols piece...keep elevatin adn droppin.~1~


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  9. May 25th, 2006, 07:55 AM #9
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  10. May 25th, 2006, 08:03 AM #10
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    concepts been seen, but other then the used concepts i liked it, u had good imagery and i liked ur flow and u had exellent wordplay.

    good multis with the rhymesheme.....good work
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  11. May 26th, 2006, 07:58 AM #11
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  12. May 26th, 2006, 08:00 AM #12
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    good wordplay, nice structure, ill flow.....man u did good on this piece homie, keep up the good work
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  13. May 26th, 2006, 08:09 AM #13
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    The beginning and middle were SOOOOOOOOOOOO much better than the end. The vocabulary was mediocre. This could of been a DOPE piece, u just fell off towards the finish, and U got a lil too soft w/ the Jesus is my savor ish. U could of worded it to hit a lot harder. The first half was superb, the end was shit.
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  14. May 26th, 2006, 12:43 PM #14
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