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    Final Days

    My Logic is Nonsense... similar to a Junky Nam Vets
    Fuck bein' Calmed with Bong Breath... Who can we Bomb Next?!
    Initiating a Threat Level....Obsessing Beyond Death
    Taste the Lead Metal... Gods Debts, Best that we Settle Bets..
    Chewed Thru to the Un-Edible Core... Your Sure to Be
    Left to live life as a Vegetable For...... Eternity!.
    Ya hearda Priest...Bow Strings Sling Disaster when Pastoring
    Open Eyes..... Elevate Minds..... like Tractor Beams....
    Relaying the Chain of Orders.. Invading Enemy Quarters
    Base laced with Brigades of Mortors... Surrounding it's Borders
    Their Corpse's Smolder and Crackle.. Hit with Third degree Burns of Battle
    Slashin' thru Addam's Apples... .... Emptyin' Ammo Satchels
    Close Pages on Worldly wages... As the Chapters are Passed
    Patiently.. they Layin' Dorment.. Like a Cancerous Mass
    When did Prayin' become important?... God Don't Answer Us Back
    Planetary Abortion Act.... Vacate the Planet at Last...

    {{{{Chorus... Repeat 2x}}}}

    The Coming of Final Days....... Society's Primal Rage
    -Some Praying for Tital Waves to Cleanse their Vile Ways....
    In the Coming of Final Days........ Seven Viles of Plagues
    -Some Pray that they Pass Away before their Trial Date.....

    yo...

    Riddling Street Silloquys.... Who will be Out Next?
    Bomb Facility Scout Decks... and Run Route Checks
    Kid, My Artilleries Count-less.. Coppin' some Oddities
    Rape Auxillary Out-lets.....Sonic Sodomy
    Its not a Comedy... I Gotcha Caught in Thee.. Nooses Loop Hole
    Drownin' you Clowns in Soup Bowls.... I Lose Few Polls
    Found face down on the Playground... Screws thru your Pu-pils
    Fuck That Excuse you Told... Faggot rappers that Blew Pole
    Your No Friend..... Magnified in the Eyes of my Scope Lens
    Shotty Blast, packed in Body Bags.... Dispose 'em in Oceans
    Lockin ya Reebok's... to Concrete Blocks as Ya Thrown IN
    Frozen organs... Smash the Beat Box...Broken Components
    DNA Strains of Hatred... Manuever the Vein's Mazes
    I been stuck in this Muthafuckin' Pain Matrix for Ages
    Aint no way to Escape It... Thoughts Brutal in Suicidal State
    Fuedal Rifle Spray... Shots caught ya Vitals from Miles Away

    Chorus... Repeat 2x}}}}

    The Coming of Final Days....... Society's Primal Rage
    -Some Praying for Tital Waves to Cleanse their Vile Ways....
    In the Coming of Final Days........ Seven Viles of Plagues
    -Some Pray that they Pass Away before their Trial Date.....


    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...24#post4399924
    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=289768

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    yeah nice style and flow yo....

    i liked these liiines best from the off-

    Their Corpse's Smolder and Crackle.. Hit with Third degree Burns of Battle
    Slashin' thru Addam's Apples... .... Emptyin' Ammo Satchels
    Close Pages on Worldly wages... As the Chapters are Passed
    Patiently.. they Layin' Dorment.. Like a Cancerous Mass
    When did Prayin' become important?... God Don't Answer Us Back
    Planetary Abortion Act.... Vacate the Planet at Last...


    had sum sic wordplays as well...nice imagery. cool structure..some cool poetics used as well. yeah was a tite lil read f'sho. easy to follow and had some good statements amd phrases throughout........chorus was coo as well.......yeah had humour and seriousness merged in this piece. so yeah was an interesting read coz u brought the lines to life

    keep em poppin

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    Dope...

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    This was very well done....the rage and frustration mixed with the "fuck the world" effect worked excellently in this i.e. it made the reader feel like yeah i see what ya mean. Vocab was good and the rhythm was excellent na mean. I liked the flow and the structure was aight to. So all in all a good job, keep it Poppin' na mean ma dog

    Check this if ya gotta the time
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    Ha, Pretty impresive very unique style I like it and the flow was mad illy. Rhyme scheme and vocab was on point mixed with some complexity. This was my first time reading a joint from you and now I'ma go peep some more of your work. We should collab sometime. You should read my drop "Operation Nonexistence" when you get time while I was reading this I keep thinking of my drop so maybe you'lll like it. Keep up the work and keel elevating.

    Peace Easy

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    Been while....Thanx
    and jus drop a link people and i'll chek it

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    I like this piece a lot actually. I felt you had a very unique writing style while doing this and had a very intersting topic that kept me invloved the whole time. Some of you're lines felt rushed and could have been worded better but it didn't affect the flow that much. Very good use of vocabulary and very good imagery. But I felt that emotion in this piece was the best quality of it,you really kept me in it the whole time feeling what you were saying. Overall fam, very nice drop.

    Drownin' you Clowns in Soup Bowls.... I Lose Few Polls
    Found face down on the Playground... Screws thru your Pu-pils
    Fuck That Excuse you Told... Faggot rappers that Blew Pole
    Your No Friend..... Magnified in the Eyes of my Scope Lens
    Shotty Blast, packed in Body Bags.... Dispose 'em in Oceans
    Lockin ya Reebok's... to Concrete Blocks as Ya Thrown IN
    Frozen organs... Smash the Beat Box...Broken Components
    DNA Strains of Hatred... Manuever the Vein's Mazes
    I been stuck in this Muthafuckin' Pain Matrix for Ages
    My favorite part, dopeness fam

    Hit this up please:
    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=294102
    Thanks

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    i 'll chek ya pieceas well...

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