Fallen Angels Ft. ELEETE

[-IsIs-]

ELEETE

Im found astound an amazed, confound ina daze...
Asleep sound ina cave, deep underground ina grave...
Bound in decay, my vacant spirit lifts from its coffin...
Resurrected from a locked box that was tossed ina garden...
As I walk in the darkness, earth's clouds part with sun rays...
Its display perfect some say, the birth of a Sunday...
Now I con-tain the pain to change the world for the better...
Bringin' prohecies from the spoken word to the form of a letter...
Through the stormiest weather, I comfort the thunder an lightning...
A one-winged angel divine an enlightening...
Scared though you might be, I came to spare you no harm...
Embrace grace in a place where calm takes place in both arms...
Keep strayed from cold hearts, and I'll guide you...
I fight to enlight you, For now I'm walkin' in Christ's shoes...
Strive to define truth, birth'd to bring faith to the people...
Earth's religion lives in Church, but it strayed from its steeples...
Their minds are feeble, an media is what feeds the disease...
Fallen angels ready to lead the world to believe...

-IsIs- (Self Emcee)

So the pain I gain, strains brains in your mental,
feel rejoice as my voice brings a choice to your temple,
I hoist the question, stressin one word back to its essence,
blessins recieved from the mighty day of christ's reign,
twice slain, he rose'n delivered me the most terrible of cats,
unbearable to that, I chose to fall into the undersides parable traps,
until the stakes were raised, and fakes were phazed by us elite,
we strayed for days and sprayed are praise for your rough defeat,
must complete, the words of god, that were hidden in text bits,
for out life is tormented by evils, written without exits,
the fallen angels, remain callin fables, an stallin tables,
forever stain brains with the calm an able...
strong with angles, pyramid structures of religion,
puncture your position with arrows of culture rewritten,
vultured visions, pierce peoples cerebrals with evils,
contract roots of satan, rude rewaken, we primeval,
retrieve you from labyrinths of steeples of upheavel,
Fallen angels ready to lead the world to believe...

[-IsIs-]

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=292345

[-IsIs-]

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=292317

Enjoy..

[Syk.iLL]

Well Well the next collab. Both of you have upped the ante a bit for this one. i liked Isis's last line the best. Really said something. I wished you had supported the line a bit more though. Overall there was a crazy amount of internals. I mean litterally it was crawling with them. I think you could have take a ew out to clear up the diction on this piece. It would have helped the reader follow it easily. So just work on that. Imagery was on point but I think the emotion gets lost in the words.


RTF The Tragedy of Sargon if you have time:
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=292751

[-IsIs-]

thanks for the feed and ill get at that om as soon as possible.

[-IsIs-]

uppin for some feed.

[Engivale]

i liked the internals and enjoyed this piece all and all. Good work, I wouldn't really put one of you over the other.

[ELEETE]

Yo your verse came out ill son, Yo this shit was mad ill, Yo I think I found my collab partner...Your it...Yo speakin of which ima hit you up with an idea...something thats bound to be hot...Sick verse kid...

[sILLable]

one word:WOW!!!...very ill piece...not a flaw in sight.....of course comin from yall...im just gonna tackle both verses in one...both verses had ill complexity and rhyme scheme.....ill multis....dope vocab.....tha collab was ill in its self...tha piece was original......both verse vibed together perfectly.....i congratulate you on a very ill and flawless piece....keep droppin tha hottness.~1~

[DrunknMonkey]

Damn!!!! ya'll work nice together.....What I liked about this piece has to be the flow and the vocab usage...again you have proven how talented you both are when it comes to topicals....the imagery in this piece was crazy....I could visualize every thing going on .....and that's really what turn this from just a good piece to a great one...Good Job on the development of this piece .....Elevation is the key and ya'll up this a notch from the last one I read of ya'll..

[-IsIs-]

Yo your verse came out ill son, Yo this shit was mad ill, Yo I think I found my collab partner...Your it...Yo speakin of which ima hit you up with an idea...something thats bound to be hot...Sick verse kid...

yo b it did come out ill man. ahahahah.

and for yall who left feed. much appreciation and props for yall for real.. uppin for some more.

[-IsIs-]

uppin for feed yall..

[-IsIs-]

uppin for some more feed...shit.

[Sfinx]

I thought this was pretty cool.

The multies were a nice addition, but in some cases threw me off from reading, and i had to go back and read it again. But in some cases it was really dope, especially in this:

I hoist the question, stressin one word back to its essence,
blessins recieved from the mighty day of christ's reign,
twice slain, he rose'n delivered me the most terrible of cats,
unbearable to that, I chose to fall into the undersides parable traps

I thought those lines there were the best of the peice. They flowed really well, and the rhyme scheme was dope.

Overall not a bad piece, Keep writing and stay up.

Hit my peice : When The Ink Dries.

Thanks