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    "The Discontinuation: Smile" ft. Mindless

    Regular - Myself
    Itallics - Mindless

    Black tar asphyxiation giggles in the womb
    Of tomorrow's saplings before yesteryear
    Conquered the art to mind the sodomized.
    Concrete reverence drowning in constituents.
    I arranged marriages and tangled veins
    within the reigns forced into the mouths
    of handmaids chomping at the bit of crumbs;
    flirting with a crown full of sympathies
    ruled by stolen jewels to dull the imagery.


    Your bane is eternally inbred beyond
    The yokes and minnows of this shallow gene pool.
    Sedative motion, mind that heaven's
    Only short two few contusions away.
    The braille's perpetually abstract emphysema
    Invokes the lungs of theories aborted.
    Coloured in transiet blood, the grotesque
    Paint the town red singing that of the hung.

    Suffocate the abacus with patternless fingers,
    The count to cadaver needs a trilingual origin.
    Melted mannequins finger paint the obese
    Notion of manic upon the obscure diligence, of non.
    Clean your green thumb and bleed over
    the pitfall of another plum like Autumn.


    This epitaph is my pinnacle; first conscious
    Battalion of self to ever elate gray footsteps
    Across the opaque snarls of malignant staffs.
    Effort sequestered for the sake of flooding rivers,
    My epitome is a bastard, and she's beginning
    To coagulate in the zeal of 25's ignorance.
    She had a lust for dusk after the Sun
    had a miscarriage and recieved glamorous
    allure to assure the conglomerate that
    their cancerous degenerates had raised
    Hades into a child who became conscious.


    Metal contemplates the brevity of shrapnel...
    Oh well, this passion was a waste to begin with;
    Embrace the discontinuation: Smile.


    Abst.Co
    po'ethics /
    abstanticollective.

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    Ok I thought this was an excellent poem.Very well displayed and creativity was top notch.Really....I was glued to it from start to finish.The wording the two of you guys used was excellent and imagery was great.Imagery was the main thing here for me.It was amazing and it made it a great read.I am so glad I peeped this because this is something worth reading.Reallt nice drop guys and I think it deserves a HoF.

    Plz rtf nd drop feed on "Natures Features"
    Heard about the guy who fell off a skyscraper?
    On his way down past each floor,he kept saying to reassure himself
    So far so good.....
    So far so good.....
    So far so good.....

    But how you fall doesn't matter
    Its how you land

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    Vocab was superb. Had to read a couple of lines twice a bit though. Your imagery fitted well within the theme. Great piece

    please check out my piece: http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=294322

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