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    21 Birds Eye View


    My Heart lies in Dark Tarnished Forever
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    Not even a spark of Orange to Weather
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    Disconjoined Cartilage is Severed
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    Pride dosn't Allow the parts to Harness Together
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    Farthest from Heaven; My kness Buckle the Block
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    How do I fight the Street? Why Muscle the Rock
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    The Cops. The Shots. The late night Hustling Lot
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    Amongst Fustering Rot and Economic Suffering Plot
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    The Tougher I Got, The Hood Soaked in my Fiber
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    The Blood-money and Drugs Envoking my Fire
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    As the Concreat grew in me the Hope Retired
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    The Angles Sang but I Choked the Chior
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    If a nigga Inquire, I've seen the Dire fall in the Underbelly Pit
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    The High and Mighty Mauled and Ripped
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    Trapped between Addictions Jaws of Grip
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    Over-Dosing and Dying All too Quick
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    I've Seen Police Raid with Mossberg Pumps
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    Jail Birds stay Lost For Months
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    Rent Money vanish at the Cost For Fronts
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    Captured Felons layed Sprawled and Roughed
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    Call it What you Want I've seen it all and Thats Enough
    You've only seen it in Birds Eye View
    21 Lines for you Herbs Eyes Too
    ~Loch Loco~
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    Last edited by Loch Loco; April 25th, 2006 at 06:04 PM
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    dam dawg nice drop
    nice word scheme
    the flow was good
    all around agood peice keep up the good work

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    id appreicated if ya hit this up and leave some feedback
    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=288907

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    i was really feeling this .... emotion was great .... liked the wording choices and the way it flowed... not to crazy about the structure (FYI- concrete is spelled that way)other than that good drop was really feelin it .... could be a little more in-depth with vivid imagery you know


    EDIT: ^^^ FUck all that i understand this i understand the flow scheme 21 birds eye view.... its crazy now that i get that concept i'm really feelin this its str8 up original nothin wrong ..... keep it up
    Last edited by AngelHaze; April 25th, 2006 at 07:34 PM
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    thanks for the feed.

    Yea NY I wasa hopin' people would understand the concept and the meaning behind "21 Birds Eye View"
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    well the vocab was really good, it was new and different from what i see in other pieces so i like that, the imagery wasnt great but it was decent
    the structure was neat but i didnt really like the asterickz though
    i cant really say anything negative about ur piece
    i like the feeling and emotion that u put into it, seems like u put a lot of work into this so just keep that up homie ~l8er
    Last edited by chitown_mex11; April 26th, 2006 at 01:05 AM

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    thanks
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