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    "From Da Hood" (a real short verison)

    Lol ah shit jo

    This shit is insane......mind games played by the lame
    In all! niggaz still cant recognize the name
    This be D son, mo, money or where ever you from
    I can’t believe this shit niggaz out this bitch now a-days is strictly dumb
    I try to be calm n cool, respective but collective
    But what the fuck, I ain’t from the hood because I went to Progressive?
    Like I don’t know bout bodies stretched out in the street
    Like I don’t know how to duck when them strays putting niggaz to sleep
    I ain’t from the hood cause I went to private schools?
    But where I lived for 8yrs.?...
    ........ seen so much blood I could make a backyard pool
    Crack house across the street, but quick there’s no time
    5’0 coming down the street to mark another niggaz chalk line
    2 bed apartment dead babies on the second floor
    Got my mother screaming and yelling “Daniel go lock that door”
    Security, Security no help because they not around
    Around here only protection you got is the Bible or a trey pound
    Round and round quick nigga get down
    Run to mom and dads room before a bullet makes you one with the ground
    What’s going on?.........Shit I don’t know
    All I know is this is a routine route for me and sis to go
    But I don’t know shit because I went to private school
    I laugh simply because only if these mothafuckaz knew
    A menace in three schools, got kicked out of all three
    Hate to say it but I guess the hood? maybe a lil in me
    I watched niggaz on the block package and sail
    Sad because in my hood niggaz wasn’t fortunate to make it to jail
    Apartment building on the news ,shit, more then I can say
    Someone say “D we saw your home on T.V.” the next day
    Southeast, DC living on Q street right off of Good Hope Rhode
    Living with possums, rats, and roaches shit only God knows
    But like I said before Progressive Christian was my home
    A school where I decided to keep the hood shit unknown
    Kicked out but at least a nigga still doing good
    I laugh because only if they knew.........
    ......that your boy ain’t from no block or street but the mothafuckin hood
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    There's nothing to it man. You just said the things that we hear everyday on the radio, besides the progressive line. I mean, I didn't find anything in here that can make this piece be YOURS, this whole gangstah gangstah shoot em up this is so beyond played out. You could write about the exact same content but get into descriptions or emotion and then the piece has your personal touch on it and its original and yours. Right now this piece is just a percentile... 25 Cent. Pieces like this are just boring because there's absolutely no creativity to it. Just a bunch slang and misspelings that in the end amount to all of nothing. Nothing that will be remember because it doesnt have to be, something exactly the same will take its place. So, strive for something your own man, get out of the stereotype and invent yourself... Cuz work like this will do nothing. Stay up.

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    lol wasnt going for the whole stereo shoot em up type, just writting what I felt homie
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    this was alright..ya rhymes were aight..flow was descent...topic was a bit played..too similar too all the other topics..not creative....not that interesting just boring really...no offense of course..but next time choose a different topic....ok..anywayz...vocab was not exactly here i saw sum attempts for good vocab and complexity but not really hittin it on point.....rhymes were pretty nice and more multies could have been used..overalll this was descent..keep elevating..peace~

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    man, this had a dull topic..
    i wasnt feelin the wordplay ethier
    and if this is the Short Version plz dont post the long version

    ok maybe what u should do next time is Center ur piece this will let it flow better
    n what i got mad was bcuz ur mixing Phrases with words that dont belong 2gether
    like this..dont use Simply N Motherfuckerz in the same Sentence..Simply iz a UpScale Word MotherFucker iz Negative that thru off ur Wordplay..juss work on improving ur wordplay & Topics

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    thankz. uppin
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