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Thread: ''Remembering'' A Piece to Proof''

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    Lightbulb ''Remembering'' A Piece to Proof''

    When There Is Truth In The Booth, Theres Proof In The Booth
    Catch A Fist In The Tooth, Rush In N Put U Up Thru The Roof
    Ill Put U Underground, But U Couldnt Make It Underground
    Youll Be On Their Found Dead List, I Be Perfection N In Sound
    But Lord Forgive Me, I Let The Beast Within Get The Best Of Me
    Cant Beat The Peace, Ill Set The Past Aside, Just To Remember Me
    Reliefed Of My Deception, From The One Above, Thats All I Need
    Call Me Constantine, Cuz Hell Wants Me, Heaven Doesnt, Earth Needs
    Me In This Time, I Constant Line This Wall With Bottles Ive Drowned
    I Fall With Sorrows, No Matter What It All Comes Back Around
    Thats A Thing Called Karma, In My Pain, Thats In My Brain, I Contain
    These Lastin Memories That Go Over N Over Again, But I Maintain
    This Sanity, The Hunger Inside Well Reign Main, The Rain That Clenses
    Drain Back Census On The Defenseless N Dont Take, Give Back To The Less
    You Shouldnt Never Closed Your eyes til Your time of Death
    Try to Catch time and eslaspe it back but u never found peace
    Better Days Like My Momz Said And she Always Knew u was Gang Bed
    But we Miss Ya Now and Proof Go with God and Take Ya Bow



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    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=287212
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    this was aight. it had emotion an some imagery but not much imagery. it had more emotion in it then anythang. it flowed pretty well but it was choppy at times. but you brought it back by gettin it back on flow. you did thang an i ain't mad at ya. could you return the favor an check out my new om. it's called the wraith.

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    Danm...dat put me in deep thoughts.....Everything Is on point but stucture

    Wordplay...Good
    Vocab....Good
    Flow...Good
    Punches....Good
    Structure....Naw..fix dat

    Overall.....Nic drop kid dats dope

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    Quote Originally Posted by big j da fat boy
    this was aight. it had emotion an some imagery but not much imagery. it had more emotion in it then anythang. it flowed pretty well but it was choppy at times. but you brought it back by gettin it back on flow. you did thang an i ain't mad at ya. could you return the favor an check out my new om. it's called the wraith.

    Yeaaaaaah she got dem lookz lol.....Nice....^^^and blocks flow had imagery 2

    Thats wat I call deep thought

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    yes sir.

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    I liked this piece, it was really deep and well thought out. Everything from what I could see was on point. Your structure was decent and nice wordplay used to rhyme and still be on point with the topic. I especially liked the part:But Lord Forgive Me, I Let The Beast Within Get The Best Of Me
    Cant Beat The Peace, Ill Set The Past Aside, Just To Remember Me

    that shit was nice keep it up
    Close dis shit:

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