Last Note

[Quest.]

Last Note

Boy:*Walks in*
Dad:*Your nothin,filth,tired peice of shit*
Boy:*No Worry*
Dad:*Go to your fuckin room*
Boy:*Walks*...*Closes room door*
Boy:*Pulls out loaded shotgun*......

Back Track......

Earlier that day...

Boy:*looks in the mirror*

As i wake up,another day,another breath wasted
to many I'm usless,shouldn't have even been created
so many times I try,but failed,these marks on my arm show
my mom's gone,all I got is black eyes from powerful blows
in school nothin changes,in eyes of students,label me as other
it once was pain,but slowly boiled over to a level much futher
hatred in my heart,I see to many enemies
no feeling in my soul,no longer flow inside of me
sittin by myself,rethink back over my life
I'd change many things, in order to make it right
but i can't, I guess it's gotta end like this
all the friends I once had, quickly turned to Urban Myth
its like a marathon of thoughts, so much pain I can inflict
smiley faces, turn em upside down will be a good fit
like the razor blade I slide swiftly across my wrist
adrenaline pumping fast as I watch my blood drip
It's a sad feeling but hell I gotta reveal
cause I hold fate right now, many lives I gotta steal......

After Lunch

Boy:*Walks down the hall*
Jocks:*Fuckin freak*
Boy:*Turns around*.....
Jocks:*Yea you faggot*
Boy:*Take your last breath*
Jocks:*HUH!*
Boy:*Pulls out uzi*....*BYE!*

As the trigger I pull rapid,18 years of pain released
head shots at point blank, put many to rest in peace
yellin and screamin,I feel like god cause I have control
many body parts detached,bullets rip through to show bone
pipe bombs I use to distract,forcin my prey to one way
gun smoke clears,thousands of holes in the body as they lay
reloading fast,just to up the murder rate
findin them hinding & scared, don't wanna lose life today
so much takin for granted,now they beg for mercy
now it's time for me to close their mouth,PERMANENTLY!

Home

Boy:*Walks in*
Dad:*Your nothin,filth,tired peice of shit*
Boy:*No Worry*
Dad:*Go to your fuckin room*
Boy:*Walks*...*Closes room door*
Boy:*Pulls out loaded shotgun*......
Boy:*cocks it*....*walks out*
Dad:*WHAT THE FUCK*

Sorry,but this has gotta end,short and painless
aimed at ya head,your stupid,i'ma leave you brainless
so much for the fathers days,cause I don't need you
disown you from my life,after this hollow tip perce through
you did this to yourself,this is not my choosen
beatin me everynight,left my whole body brusin
so take a seat,i'ma enjoy seeing you in pain
SCREAM LOUD BITCH!,ya life won't be the same

Boy:*Points gun*....*Aim*.....*Pow....Pow...Pow*
Boy:*Smiles*
Boy:*last note of my life*...*Great way to end*
Boy:*puts gun in his mouth*....*Thanks for listenin*.....*POW! *

Writen by:-Quest

[Quest.]

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[Plain-Thug]

wow....this was wicked good...i was feelin the whole time...excellent imagery and excellent vocab...nice flow and sick rhyme scheme..you had complexity all over the places..really good thing to have..shows you have skillz..topic was interesting..this peice was pretty creative and i liked how you had what the boy was doing and how his life was staged...really feelin that...points for that..

overall this was tight..i enjoyed reading it....
i give it a 9.8/10..keep it up homie, ur good
and thanks for the feed on my OM...peace

[Quest.]

wow....this was wicked good...i was feelin the whole time...excellent imagery and excellent vocab...nice flow and sick rhyme scheme..you had complexity all over the places..really good thing to have..shows you have skillz..topic was interesting..this peice was pretty creative and i liked how you had what the boy was doing and how his life was staged...really feelin that...points for that..

overall this was tight..i enjoyed reading it....
i give it a 9.8/10..keep it up homie, ur good
and thanks for the feed on my OM...peace

thanx for the feed....uppin

[Spul Ka Trinde]

Damn man this was off the hook freal

Hell of a topic for ya om man

very creative and plenty of emotion and very good vocab use in ya wordplay. good strucutre and I liked the whole story line when you say he walks in the room etc.. good vision in this piece as well actually can relate to what goes on in the world today in some families. Very well planned out events from the house to the school back to the house, shows signs of pain n ya piece as well as relief at the end of it for your charector.

Good flow it was very consistant with your strucutre and jus rolled wit it, overall this was a damn good piece man, ya came wit it thas fo sho

gonna give you a 9.5/10
damn good drop homie
damn good

[CrosT Over]

NICE DROP, I truly felt the emotion and the depth of this piece, this is the kind of stuff we need more of, the type of stuff that could reach heads before they go insane.
Imagery was on point as well as your vokab, however my personal favorite in these lyrics were the way your formed the structure together, as well as the convo's that took place, ill drop man, keep it up!
overall 8.5/10

[Quest.]

thanx for the feedback fellaz....rise for more

[Soule]

Yo man this was a really nice peice. I really liked the structre and flow. The Woerdplay was godly (Metaphor term That is). Keep it up. Loved The Stroy alos peeps getting great strory latly.
9-10

[Quest.]

thanx for the feedback cuz...rise for more

[Killa_King]

First of all let me say the topic I was really feelin that
Dope ass piece all together,Imagery was real it was 3-D to me good job
Complexity was the whole piece,Anytime you have a topic this deep your gonna have the complexity,Nice structure,Hella nice Metas,Good rhyme scheme,Nice wordplay,
Intelligence at it's highest level keep elevatin,Keep spittin
Also loved the little in between line skit's that was dope too
Stay up kid 100

[Quest.]

thanx for the feedback....

[EyeBite]

yo man dis was a dope ass piece good shit i aint even know u could write topicals this good man you had a dope structure and consistent rhyme scheme man dope piece i like the direction you took the topic in also.

overal 9/10

[Influx]

Unusual. Actually, I was reading a report in college today about two boys who had been repeatedly bullied at school for being different and one day they decided they'd had enough, took guns to their school and sparked a full scale massacre, it was carnage..wierd that I was only reading it this morning and your piece brought back my train of thought.. I think the way you wrote it I could imagine it being a video, you know? with the guy talking and all the actions you put in there, that was an unusual touch that worked well, I dunno, perhaps if you had a video camera...the only thing I'd say to you is try to expand on your vocabulary, I'm not saying throw complexity in there for the sake of it, it would have just been nice to read something a little less simple, the emotion was nice here but with a greater placing of carefully organised words you could'a made it better..see what I'm saying?

[Linex]

This was good. You had a very deep and dope storyline going on in here. I could like also really imagine what kind of stuff this kid was going through. It's like one bad day and the only way to solve it was to just pull out a gun and end that persons life. The structure in here was fine, to me you don't really need to have dope structure to have dope pieces. This one right here was average and was really good. It probably could've been better if you had put some big vocabulary words in it, it probably would've made it more interesting. This was good, keep at it.

-Linex.

[eyeQ]

yo man...i was definitely feeling this piece...i really think u need to step up ur multi game to get to that next level...I mean other than that no qualms...feeling the topic...the flow....everything was on point...good story telling...but like I said...step ur multi game up...check out some of my shit u'll see what I mean. Late.