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    |WarHead| Christmas Special.

    |WarHead|

    I rapped it up & gave it to my oldest son.
    A simple gift, a complex Christmas.
    I walk forward, although I’m told to run.


    Twilight across the sky, the waters edge is cold and empty
    I stare to my reflection’s eyes, and gently drop a penny
    I’ve always gave, I’ve always helped those shut from life
    It’s not recognition I crave, but It would warm me up tonight
    The ripples in the water create; form a reality worth living
    The smooth crisp foundation’s waves, brace a word’s birth beginning
    I shout to my mind… but it’s repulsive, ugly & timid – afraid
    I’ve collided with thousands of houses, still my home is phased
    And my family is persistent, although they visit me not often
    It seems I am resistant, but I persist to view my rotten coffin

    “You can be a legend,
    Willingly, you have the will – and will power,
    To kill us all.”


    Why must I reminisce, surely the past is no future, said God
    But the galaxy stood in a bowl of shit, so what was one more bomb?
    A tear trickled down my chin, I wiped it away and sobbed
    One more simple gift, or a Christmas gone to piss and rocks?

    As the radiant glow on my face grew brighter,
    I saw no light, nor darkness…
    I saw,
    .
    .
    .

    Nothingness.


    Joseph, his name was, my oldest and most beautify minded
    I lied to him because, I was colorless; absent – blinded
    “Open this on Christmas, it is the angel.. and the devil incarnate”
    My words were long, dead & twisted, and my vision lethargic

    The death I envisioned…
    At first sight of this warhead,
    MY warhead
    Was.. overwhelming
    So I ran,
    BUT THEY KNEW I would speak no evil.


    The scientists of terrorism, a nuke on my right.. power
    Less the fact the world will die in seventy seven hours
    Time flies when your hopeless, but fuck.. It’s about that time
    Damn the torpedoes world, we have a nuke to bend our minds
    Literally… we’ll rip to pieces.. How lonely will I be?
    The only man in hell, and still… heavens doors released

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    .
    .


    I sprint, in countless directions.. shaking with rigor mortis
    Its twelve o’ clock,
    And Joseph reaches for the box, the key.. I nourished

    .

    I’m laying facing skyward, my emotions are unknown
    He Tears open the gift, like a dog would a meatless bone

    .

    A paper falls from the black box..

    Joseph, I love you more than life itself..
    I have placed in this box the future,
    All you must do is simply;
    Open it.

    - Dad.


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    I watch the stars explode, along with my soul.
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    Ill get links tomorrow

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    yea dat was bumpin.....

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    ^ lol. thats exactly why I took up audio. j/p
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    pffft up.

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    man, that shit's pretty phat, it was makin me tripp, lol man, i'm fucked up

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    Upin.

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    yes very nice poetic essence here.. i probaly go for the more explicit revelations myself.. but still this a pleasant reading... had a good dose of multies.. and consistancy was spot on.. the structure/format was also light and pure poetry..
    nicely worded.. which is what i would say is one of the major parts of this tale..
    nicely stated mettas.. and aliterations was good i like those
    yea ending was pretty good.. leaves it like it could continue at a later date or something


    if you could drop a progressive feed on this joint i would appreciate it

    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=259790


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    ^ word, good feed, up.

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    I loved it dude, you had a lot of imagery and emotion in here and it related to everyday life, it was good. Great storyline, and it was definitely an enjoyable read. Nice job on this piece.

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    ^ word, thx for the feed homie.

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    quit sleepin' up.

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    very poetic, great word-usage, and good flow, vocab wuz hot and so were the word-usage, it helped the structure adnt eat helped the flow. also, good stroy, keep writin'

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    ^ thx for the good words, up.

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    Aight Make shit was real nice i loved this piece it had great imaginary i was loving it from beginning to end this was hot,your flow was real nice i liked how it almost switches up on me and came back all smoothe hot i seen my self thier while i was reading this peice yeah you got it back after a ling time of writen jayy dont forget who i am Hoe

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