word neglect

[noncentz]

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...24#post3615624
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=257242


DON’T TELL ME ABOUT MAN I SEEN IT KID.
CAREERS LIKE CANIBUS’S Flopped cause of what he did,
makes me wonder if i should still do what i do
in a world where time in this is something I cant recoup-
where your no longer authentic every one dooes it too-
but none of you can lyrically break saliva per every bacteria molecule.
use traits of biochemical diseases cut with ridicule
Sealing your fate over beat breaks showing you how miniscule,
you are... sub par
found somewhere between marginal and micro fragment,
I’m in tangent....indignent...rhymes malignent...
waqnt to relate to something i'll leave you dead like your desendent,
Displaying words that murder making felonies from the 1st amendment.
Breaking the Ten Commandments…. god damn it-
Even if I broke it in laymen’s you couldn’t understand it.
Let’s see I inhale high scale monoxide and regurgitate it multiplied by pie,
Cut with lycidic diethylamide and vocab instigating
The facts if you listen to this and think you can see me your hallucinating.
Issue you the Grammy for displaying the fag factor
Then cast your gay ass rhymes,
acknowledge them as your supporting actors.
Separate your body from matter till your brain waves scatter-
Prove you a joke then wait for the audience to end the laughter.
--------------------------------------------------------------------------pause and wait for fans
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Your career falling off like William shapner,
over charging for your frees like napster,
I refuse to son you my enemies are left bastards
for trying to defy they master.
The cracks my lines make register as bad as earthquake disaster.
The shifting of tectonic plates, separating Cali from the United States,
Describes how I remove your BPM'S from your basic heart rate.
Werdz is a threat to society like aids to Florida teens….
I’m that ill any venue I perform at requires quarantines.
With nurses administering antibiotic vaccines…
I’m synonymous with “off the head” like the word guillotine.
My intelligence shows relevance to Copernicus,
With malevolence in my DNA, plus a Gpa
you aint fucking with like being celibate.
KID YOU NOT IN YOUR ELEMNET
Mentally im 2Pac with 2 Enoch’s
remixed with comical deliverance like Chris Rocks’
Take the 9 out your arsonary, I’ll rip weather or not you’re my adversary,
your label hired me as a temporary mercenary,
Plus the only nine you know means “no” in the German dictionary.

[Spul Ka Trinde]

descent.. wordplay was ight I wasnt reall feeling that topic of the verse though, iverall pretty descent verse, like to see more metaphors n maybe a self representation to this as well, ight punchlines

could be better bet overall it was descent

6/10
stay elevating

[Dope Name]

oh shit, if this was a ketstyle, thats pretty sick dude. even if it wasnt, i liked the flow you used in this man. it sounded something like u were trying to tell others that they cant do what u do and shit, which i like in an emcee, it shows a lot of confidence in ur work. good work man, i loved reading this.

[noncentz]

Spul Ka Trinde
i wonder if you truly grasp the concept of metaphor if so you would see every line was a punchline and metaphor broken by definition. never the less i respect your critique normally i dont do this style like this i like to keep it it simple this was just a more educated design.

dope name thanx for the hook up and love twin hit me up for a collab sometime

[tjbthakilla]

nice song man like it
hey i bet your gooder if you rap battled
good feedback 2 this man he iz a legend at this

[noncentz]

i just started battling again since i have im 6 and 0 but yeah i dropped my first 11 chasing the best when i was still wet behind the ear thanks for the love twin.

[noncentz]

upping before i bounce

[<Supreme>]

nice drop, sum of it i wasnt feelin, but the rest was good
flow - 7/10
structure - 6/10
rhyming - 8/10
like it? - 7/10
overall - 7/10

can u comment on 'Love' in om, first page at moment... i think this is the link http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=257170

[<Supreme>]

[jus addin onto my previous feed, makin it more obvious]
i suppose what i meant was that i couldnt understand it all, but i wasnt sure how to word it, so i put feel it
i re read it, and theres a tiny bit i dont understand

Sealing your fate over beat breaks showing you how miniscule,
you are... sub par
found somewhere between marginal and micro fragment,
I’m in tangent....indignent...rhymes malignent...

like those 4 lines
i aint understandin them...
to other ppl, im only writin this part cus i was asked to explain my previous feed

good piece
peace out

[noncentz]

Sealing your fate over beat breaks showing you how miniscule,
you are... sub par
found somewhere between marginal and micro fragment,
I’m in tangent....indignent...rhymes malignent...

LINE 1; IM ENDING THEIR CHANCES OVER A BEAT
LINE 2: MEANING THEY AVERAGE NOOTHING GREAT
LINE 3: MARGINAL MEANING AVERAGE MICRO MEANING VIRTUALLY DONT XSIST
LINE 4 BASICALLY MEANING MY RAP IS AN INDANGERED SPECIES THAT IS SPREADING LIKE GANGREEN.
HOPE THAT HELPS

[Legacy01]

You a canibus fan? It seems like ya used his style in here with the vocab and tryina come wit punches mixed with intellect.
This was good i figured coz not many people write and spit shit this way. When readin tho, the lines was a lil off flow and the structure was pretty much everywhere.
Not many people understood the words you used in ere either, prolly coz they aint listend to "canibus" as much as some of us have, but i'm a fan, and you picked up his technique really well if you did get the inspiration from him. Good drop man, keep it up
~1~

[noncentz]

You a canibus fan? It seems like ya used his style in here with the vocab and tryina come wit punches mixed with intellect.
This was good i figured coz not many people write and spit shit this way. When readin tho, the lines was a lil off flow and the structure was pretty much everywhere.
Not many people understood the words you used in ere either, prolly coz they aint listend to "canibus" as much as some of us have, but i'm a fan, and you picked up his technique really well if you did get the inspiration from him. Good drop man, keep it up
~1~

actually yes i tried to do something different by giving his style a shot

[Legacy01]

haha, it workin man, well done.. hopin to see more shit from ya.. sorry for freepostin... but i did like tha usage of tha metaphors...was dope, i jus thought i had to restae it
~1~
oh hey man, could you vote on my battle please in front lines.. its tha topical one... thnx man, really appreciate it

[noncentz]

Thanks And Upping